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Natedogg2006


I've never called myself a brony, now I'm writing mlp fanfiction and enjoying it.

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This story is a sequel to Why She Serves


Tempest Shadow
Fizzlepop Berrytwist has been dating Twilight Sparkle for some time now. Far from going soft, she feels like the experience has made her stronger than ever. And yet an old friend, fear, has left her unsure of herself for the first time in a while. How will she deal with it? She'll need to rely on the power of friendship.Β 
This might also involve a lot of alcohol, sweets of questionable origin, and borderline abduction. She never said she worked all the Tempest out of her system.Β 
A follow up to my story Why She Serves. Set after the climax but both before and after the epilog. Following the model of one of the Elements asks all the rest for advice genre, but with a Tempest twist obviously.Β 
I really just wanted to do a little bit more with the setting and characters of the original story, so here we are. Hopefully you'll all like this take on a slightly older and more mature Tempest Fizz. Let me know what you think.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 45 )

First of Morningstar and zecora shipping goinging on now 🀣


Second well that's one way to end chapter 1, once again I find myself hooked by your skills of story writing... great first chapter :twilightsmile:

And second chapter is just as great....

I love the casual way they handled the attack on Fizz..

Took me some time to discover you had made a new story πŸ˜…
It was drowning in my notification

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Who says I'm going to ship them:rainbowderp: I've already got so much going on in this story. How will I have time for them to get together as well. :twilightblush:
Thanks for checking it out, and for the favs

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They're probably so casual since it's probably not the first time that day someone had tried. Even the threat of death becomes boring when you've dealt with it enough. I would know, I used to ride a bike in a town that was not bike friendly. I saw my life flash before my eyes enough time I started reacting to it like reruns of early seasons of family guy. "Really, this bs again?":rainbowlaugh:

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ohh well.... i can dream cant i :fluttershbad::fluttercry::twilightsmile:

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was really the feel i got when the attack happened xD

here we go again xD

"Wait," Morningstar cut in. "I just have to ask." Fizzlepop nodded her approval. "Did you name them Rip and Tear so ponies you introduce them to will think you're giving them a command?"

Mick Gordon - 02. Rip & Tear

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I do love a nice ultra hard guitar riff every now and then. Thanks for that.

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then it alsmost doesnt get better then Rip & Tear :rainbowdetermined2:
and you are welcome

"Do you have any idea what she has planned Fluttershy?"

"Nope."

:ajsmug: Hmm

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She can't tell what she clearly doesn't know. Do you doubt her?

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Oh, and thanks for the fav your highness

Rereading this and it prequel helped remind me just how good these stories are.

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It's taken way too long to get 8k words down, but FYI there's something coming soon.

woo!!

new chapter!

time to read it!:pinkiehappy:

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Yeah, sorry for the wait.:twilightblush: Hope you like it. :twilightsmile:

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i was starting to get worried :fluttershysad:

but it was well worth the wait :twilightsmile:

really good chapter.

and Morningstar and Zecora they are gonna be a cute couple :twilightsmile:

Great chapter! Happy to get more of this.

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Thanks so much, sorry it took so long.

I'm actually sad that this story has so little attention. I get that sequels get less views on average, but I adore the way you write Fizzy that nobody else has and its adorable!

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Don't worry about it. I don't consider myself much of a writer, so I don't advertise my work much. It's fine because it allows me to properly appreciate comments like this. And yes I do kind of love the voice I've found for her. It's why I had such a hard time with this chapter, because I lost it at some point. Until I found it it just wouldn't work. Thanks so much for letting me know it was worth the effort.

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Oh, and thanks for the watch:pinkiehappy:

I don't think I've a read a fic as fast as this one. Every line of it hooks me!

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Thanks so much, and thanks for the favs on this and the original. Rest assured the next chapter is in the works, but I am also currently working on a Halloween story, so it might be delayed a bit.

"You'll be literally the first pony we call on I'm sure."

bh.. BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAH x'D

Lol, and I know what a mixed zebrish-ponish royal union would speak inβ€”ROYAL VERSING! x')

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Now I'm imagining a poetry slam done in a the royal Canterlot voice. And I love it. Thanks for reading buddy.

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Thanks for providing magical horse content) Good for balancing crazy reality 'x)

Wooo new chapter dropped :twilightsmile:

Fluttershy looked around the table. "Did anypony see where Pinkie's cupcake tray went? I was going to make sure she got it back."

Sneaky pinkie that's where it went 🀣

"After such a lovely and interesting conversation, I have had some deep rumination. That such a night with such a friend, does not need to come to an end. So unless a stallion of such a great pedigree, would send a mare alone into the Everfree, then perhaps you can show me to the quarters of your station, and perhaps this night can end in some....relaxation.

Smooth zecora very smooth

Really good chapter 😜

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That was fast, thank you so much. And addition thanks as well, I was fairly proud of my lines for Zecora this chapter.

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Well it was not. Long chapter and I think I just looked in my folder at the right time you posted it πŸ˜…

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It's appreciated anyway. Be ready for more good news soon.

"As long as we're together, I promise they'll never stop."

smooth Fizz, real smooth

what a lovely chapter, really love both of their rings

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I layered the cheese on nice and thick there, but I thought it was some smooth cheese too. And yes, I love giving deeper meaning even to objects that already have deep meaning. My ring is tungsten, because nothing can damage the love between my wife and I. Does the cheesyness of my writing make sense now? :rainbowlaugh: thanks again for reading, hopefully you're awake for my last treat with this story. :twilightsmile:

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Twilight doesnt aprove of the the level of Cheesyness :rainbowwild::rainbowlaugh:

but it is nice that the rings have a depper mening :twilightsmile:

im about to go to bed but i should be able to finish the last chapter :rainbowwild:

really nice ending ^_^

guess the next story is about wedding :P
or meybe skipe the wedding and go to them trying to make a family either by magic impregnating or adopting :rainbowderp::pinkiehappy:


but really good story and wroth the wait

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Ha, good catch. I didn't even think of that one. :rainbowlaugh:

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Thanks so much once again. Like i said, no plans currently for any follow-ups. Sorry, more follow-ups as this is a follow-up:raritywink: I will say I had a little idea or two here and there, but nothing that could really sustain more than a short one short or something like that. If i get the inspiration I might make an attempt. But right now I'm happy with where the story is. Hopefully that's not too terrible of news for you:twilightoops: Goodnight and thanks for sticking with this story for so long.

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no planned follow up i.pinimg.com/originals/9a/57/85/9a5785990ff1dc2e719753ff482d008f.gif
:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

it is a good ending :twilightsmile:
and would rather you only wrote a follow up to the story if you felt that you had something and felt inspired to write :twilightsmile:

I really enjoyed this along with the original. Great reads!

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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment. This story was fun to write so I'm happy to see that people liked it.

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