At the bottom of Stable 10, the great generator that has kept its residents alive for centuries is beginning to fail. As solutions are sought within, one pegasus sets her sights on the very ponies who built - and possibly sabotaged - her home.
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Stumbled upon this delightful discussion and as someone who have some language purist tendencies I have to say language is just fluid, period. Most people nowadays look at the word “decimate” and the first thing they think of won’t be “kill one in ten”, just like when we look at December we won’t be thinking about the tenth month in some ancient Roman calendar. Languages change and evolve and vulgarize all the time, often producing some pretty random phenomena in the process. It’s just natural. Knowing etymology is well and good, but one simply can’t brand established and socially acceptable language practices as “mistakes”.
It liiives
That last revelation is certainly not something I was expecting nor have seen done quite like this before. Nice twist. Looking forward to more!
Two supposed to be you? Also what the fuck rarity
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Fixed, good catch! And yeah Rares, what did Bugqueen ever do to you!
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Glad it worked for you! I wanted it to be subtle rather than a dramatic dun-dun-dun moment. Not my usual tempo for this kind of thing but good practice!
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Oh wow, thank you for the compliments! One of my biggest hangups with the standard Fallout setting has been the "fifty shades of brown" landscape that hits hard early on and gets really, really old as time progresses. I don't doubt the world would look like churned mud immediately after a cataclysm but two centuries is a bit of a stretch for me, so I chose to show a good amount of nature returning. That, and being from Wisconsin, I've been diligent in finding opportunities to throw some northwoods geography in the mix like the moraines between Junction City and Blinder's Bluff. ^_^
Without spoiling anything, though, you're on the right track when you said you should swing back and give a read of the early flashbacks. I'll be the first to admit that I botched the timing with kicking off Teak's journal entries, oy vey I had to play some catch-up, but while the inner thoughts of Zecora's kid aren't critical to the plot they do serve as the first flakes for a larger snowball that's getting kicked down the mountain. Story-within-a-story dealie.
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Yep I'll agree with you on that. Kkat's FO:E was a fun read but at times it felt like a whistle-stop tour of the main tropes of Fallout and less like a story around Littlepip. Part of why I decided to approach FOE:Renewal as an alternate reality was to clean the slate of any existing canon, which there's just so much of now and way too much for me to keep track of, and focus on writing what I imagined FO:E might look like if more focus was placed around building the world from the ground up including the "why" of its current state. That's always what I look for when I read sci-fi set in the future. I want to know how the world/universe/or whatever got from here to where it is now, and why that matters. If I don't get a sense that the author is going to give those answers, I start to care less about the characters living in that world.
As for the Mr. Gutsies, supermutants, Mothman cultists, and wealthy moguls whose brains were downloaded into the Las Pegasus strip, haha, I don't think I'm spoiling anything by telling you I don't plan to write all of that into Renewal. I want to avoid oversaturating the story with too much at once, and the result might wind up with Renewal feeling a little bit like "Diet Fallout," but my main focus is on telling the story first and foremost. I'm still keeping my eyes peeled for the opportunity to add more, and I do have plans to include more robotic elements into the story before it wraps up, but for now I've got this Aurora pegasus causing problems in the story and I don't want to leave her unattended for too long. :3
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Yoooouuu... are right, yep! Good catch!
Oh no...
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Oop, big honky spoiler response time!
Whether it's a consolation or not, it's worth mentioning that Ginger's death wasn't a last minute decision and had been planned as far back as her encounter with Autumn Song. I didn't intend for her death to be a quick gimme to pluck at heartstrings, but I can understand how it certainly fits that trope. It's hard to get the "heroic sacrifice" to hit just right for everyone and I don't doubt that I could have given those last few scenes a bit more polish than they have. The problem I found once I finally wrote the story up to that point was I had played her death scene out in my head, written it down in notes, made adjustments and tweaks, all that good stuff for the better part of a couple years. I think in doing so I sucked a lot of the emotional punch out of it for myself because I'd effectively written it in several dozen different ways, so committing that last draft to paper was more of a struggle.
It's possible I let it drag out too long and made it feel like there was more time to consider all the options than there was, but I think the main point came short of communicating clearly was that Ginger's magic was drying up by the apex of their ascent. She was convinced if she included herself in the teleport, the instantaneous release of the balefire's detonation would come along for the ride. I pictured it like holding a rabid animal out the door by the scruff, and not being sure whether when you dropped it if you could close the door on it quick enough. Ginger wasn't confident in that risk and chose to send Aurora to safety alone so the bomb could be contained a few seconds longer. Possibly I could have made this clearer by alternating the scene between Aurora's POV and Ginger's, but I didn't want to interrupt the scene's momentum and risk it feeling too gratuitous.
You're definitely not the first to express more connection to Julip than Ginger, though, and I'll take that as a win, haha. Julip was actually never meant to be a character at all. I ended up writing her into the story at the literal last minute, when I was writing the first interactions between Aurora and Autumn. Out of anyone I do think she's become a favorite of many, and part of that has to do with her growth as a character. I thoroughly enjoy writing her, especially as she began to reconcile her loyalty to the Enclave against the actions of the Enclave, with Roach's guidance. 🐞
But yeah, I appreciate the honest perspective. It definitely gives me a better idea of where the story felt predictable, and I can see how a keen observer might notice the separation of Roach and Julip as a narrative red flag. Naturally, the story revolves around Aurora responding and adapting to what the wasteland throws at her, and her reaction to Ginger's death is a part of that. Hopefully it lands a bit better than how Ch.40 did for ya. ^_^
FINALLY, ALL CAUGHT UP.
I do not like that news regarding Aurora's state.
Not one bit. A pretty mare should never have that happen and shame on you for doing it, sir. Now I have to wait for the next chapter and be annoyed at what she's going to be subjected to.
Also glad there was finally an explanation for Rainbow Dash's element and what happened/what it did, felt like forever on waiting for it.
I have a theory regarding something though, feel free to PM me if you don't want to reply here, or simply do a Gandalf and keep your secrets then, but given how Ginger was stabbed a bajillion times with the freaky-deaky Super StimPacks™ that Twilight had to have ferried away, and some of those never actually got recalled, the same ones that Mac and the soldiers were subjected to if I'm not mistaken; Ginger was subjected to balefire the same as they were, and had been growing very magically potent. If my theory holds water then Ginger has actually done gone pop in a different much more crazy way than going full Deathclaw, and the only reason why Tandy thought Ginger is dead is because Primrose believed it and so does Aurora, and whatever happened disconnected Ginger from the dream realm.
Am I getting warmer, or am I more stone cold than a witch's tit and actually no, Ginger is literally just atoms and particle dust?
Fallout: Equestria was a story I enjoyed following as a kid, and Renewal keeps me a fan of the concept well into my young adulthood. You've really revitalized the trope and emulate what gave Fallout: Equestria its appeal in the first place. I've been following this story for a good two and a half years now. I decided to start reading to occupy me in what was the start of a big chapter of my life. That chapter is coming to a close soon, and I felt it prudent to offer my gratitude to you for keeping the magic alive for me. There's something bittersweet about the way you portray this world, and it scratches an itch in a way that's hard for me to explain. Admittedly I've had personal gripes here and there, but over time those seeds bore fruit, and the minor complaints went away as the buildup paid off. Regardless of whether it's done well objectively or not, I personally love how you write character growth and plot development. Following the tale of these characters you've created has been great fun for me, so thank you.
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Holy wow, thank you so much for sharing. Hearing that just made my freaking... what, years? However long I've been at this, three years now, you just put a bit of polish on them. Thank you for the honesty and vulnerability, I'm so glad to hear this story has kept you in good company and that you've kept coming back to read the new installments. <3
Grate so far
Until Jessi brought it up, I completely forgot that balefire plus fresh generation one stimpacks equals rapid and horrific mutations. Ginger somehow becoming a wasteland monster after the bomb would be a fate worse than death.
As for Aurora, I'm still not entirely convinced that she's turning into a ghoul just yet. Being teleported by Ginger's magic while the balfire bomb was going off could have had some weird side effects; for instance, Aurora is now able to enter the dream realm and communicate with Tandy, where before she wasn't able to. However, the dream realm thing could also be an effect of staying at Discord's place. Whatever the cause, I have a feeling that Aurora has some of her innate pegasus/pony magic back now, which could be speeding up her healing/recovery time. Can ghouls even enter the dream realm?
Anyways, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!
I had this fic on my radar for years. After finally sitting down and reading through all of it I am happy to say that I have not been as hooked by a story on this site ever since reading the original Fallout Equestria way back in 2015.
At first I was somewhat irritated by the choice to scrap so many elements of the established FO:E canon, but it really worked out in making this feel like more of a „grounded“ post-apocalypse story rather than just a video game adaptation.
At one point I was super confused though, because New Canterlot was established as the HQ of the enclave, so I just naturally assumed it was a floating cloud city. Then when Ginger later talked about growing up in New Canterlot, it took me some time to realize that the enclave just doesn’t live in the clouds in this universe….
One thing I REALLY loved was the depiction of StimPaks, RadAway, etc. as actual medicine rather than just magical fix-all items that work instantaneously.
I am also quite surprised to see that this story, which was very light on gore so far (for an FO:E story), is suddenly reaching Project-Horizons level of mutilation and body-horror, especially for our protagonist.
Some criticism at the end: I don‘t think we‘ve been given nearly enough backstory and motivation behind what would drive Spitfire and Primrose to devise this insane plan to nuke their entire world into oblivion only to eradicate some perceived notion of inequality due to the existence of magic?
Also: How would they find enough people willing to going along with this? I mean, basically all the engineers behind SOLUS must have known exactly what they were building when turning that thing into a weapon. What would they stand to gain after destroying their entire world? How could all of this happen in secret without a single leak if they have basically been living in an authoritarian police state where one of the rulers can literally read people‘s mind in their sleep? It just doesn‘t work for me (yet).
Aside from that the backstory of the time before the war has been excellent and that dread in seeing the pieces come together was my favorite part of this story.
Anyway, TLDR: Great story, keep it up! :D
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Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it!
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<3 Well I'm glad to hear you caved and started reading, hah! You're very right, I much prefer to write this as a grounded story based in reality - or as real as post-apocalypse ponies can be - rather than a walking tour of all the popular Fallout and MLP tropes. I wanted to write a story about the characters first and keep the world as a steady background instead of making the world the story. I might have had a small stroke writing that sentence, haha augh. But yes, realism is a constant focus. When I'm playing Skyrim you bet I'll chow down 100 cabbages mid-fight to heal myself, but writing a convenient magical maguffin into the story just didn't jive for me. Where's the danger if the reader knows Aurora has a stimpack in her bag that will instantly heal a gunshot wound? ;)
Plus, researching for the story is too much fun. Rad-X and RadAway were the two "healing" chems that I spent the most time digging around with, especially when it clicked that I should make RadAway act as a diuretic. :3 My immaturity might have showed a little after Aurora got double-dosed at the Bluff.
As for the recent darker turn in Aurora's situation, I stewed on it for a long time before I finally committed. I couldn't justify in my mind how an inexperienced Stable dweller could make her way through the wasteland, even with friends to help her, and come out the other end unscathed. I'm not a huge fan of the protagonist taking a bullet to the shoulder and that's it, so I pinched my nose and wrote the Ironshod's freezer scenes and the post-teleport scene. I don't think I'm spoiling anything by saying I won't be going as far as Blackjack's dark arc by turning Aurora into an alcoholic android, though. xD Aurora definitely got her eyebrows burned off but she's a tough little shit. I'm sure she'll find a way to adapt.
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Oh heck, I remember writing it! That particular scene had been a long time coming and finally getting to the point where it happened was absolutely bittersweet. I'm stoked you're enjoying things so far and that that line stuck with you enough to mention it!
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Hoho, I do love tinfoil hat theories. I will say that Ginger has not been transformed into a terrible Deathclaw-Akira monster, though that would be a metal scenario to write. Ginger did indeed die during the explosion in Chapter 40, sorry to confirm. I don't have any sneaky plans to resurrect her or reveal that she somehow cheated death, and she won't be appearing as a Force Ghost to urge Aurora to continue her Jedi training. Glad you're still rockin' along with the story though! Keep the conspiracies coming!
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It was more of a "what if" scenario than a tinfoil hat scenario. Deep down, I knew she was vaporized, especially with being at ground zero. As a side note, I'm glad that Rainbow indulged in some much-deserved pee-tty revenge.
I've been up far too late far too many nights in a row barreling through this story, lol! So many great story moments and characters!
I can't tell who enjoys punishing their protags more: you or Somber. ;P
It feels like poor Aurora isn't going to get much of a happy ending when all is said and done; but I await with baited breath to find out how much light you're willing to provide her with at the end of this dismally dark tunnel you've thrown her down, heh.
Read these new chapters while I was on a plane to a fur con, and it really was fun!
Loved each chapter, and can't wait for more.
Also EEEEEEEEEE!!! FIONA!!!!
BEST WASTELAND GRIFFONESS!!
Discord took a deep breath through his nose, held onto it, then exhaled it in a resigned sigh. “She’s ghouling.”
NO. STOP IT. STOP THAT RIGHT NOW.
Torn between the sheer happiness of all this Fiona content, and the stress of STOP THIS. DON'T YOU DARE.
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I figured it was just an after affect of Tandy restoring her natural Pegasus magic but that might be wishful thinking.
I really really really hope this is just a false conclusion and that her healing is from the magic given by Tandy .-.