At the bottom of Stable 10, the great generator that has kept its residents alive for centuries is beginning to fail. As solutions are sought within, one pegasus sets her sights on the very ponies who built - and possibly sabotaged - her home.
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Happy April! New chapter is up, and you can expect Chapter 38 tomorrow! One step closer to the reprise of Flipswitch? :3
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If in doubt, carve out his nutterbutters with a rusty ice cream scoop. Ironshod certainly has that coming to him. ><
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While Renewal isn't destined to be back to back shooty shooty level ups and weapon mods, there will be more gun. ^_^
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She deserves a helluva punishment, but a white room definitely isn't it. I think it's fair to say Primrose's aim for justice isn't to inflict physical pain but to completely debilitate her transgressors on a cognitive level. Keep your feathers crossed, we may see more of Autumn if I play me kyeeards right (awful Ms. Cleo infomercial joke).
I’ve heard this story is a reboot fic of the fo:e setting. I can appreciate that, what with how much show came out after the first fic, and how played out the setting is by now. But it seems a little wonky to me that it still kept the name. Can someone give me a rundown what the biggest setting differences are?
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Hi! The title has a double meaning, the first one being the obvious nod toward writing a Fallout Equestria fic that gives the genre a fresh start rather than tacking it onto existing lore (something I just wouldn't be able to keep track of without picking and choosing what "counts" as canon), and it touches on a deeper theme within the story itself.
As for the setting, without giving away any spoilers, the story begins in Stable 10 below Foal Mountain and drives due eastward to Stable-Tec HQ in Fillydelphia, the protagonist's destination. I follow the main protagonist's journey alongside a gradually deeper and deeper dive into the events preceding the war. I know that sounds pretty bog standard for Fallout, but I'm trying not to give anything away to prospective new readers. The core of the fic is an ongoing mystery that's rapidly approaching its conclusion. Feathers crossed you give it a shot and find something you enjoy, but if not, no harm no foul! ^_^
Incredible chapter - it's great to be back! Hope you haven't pushed yourself too hard getting these two chapters finished EDH
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Thank you, and maybe I did a little but writing helps keep me going! <3
Yay more of the good shit. Although I feel like there's been a tiny bit of a time skip from last chapter. Not sure if I'm not remembering details in filly or if it's intended.
1 little thing I noticed that I think is a mistake.
Gee thanks, Sledge, I really wasn’t sure it’d be worth meeting the Stable they couldn’t stare at my bare ass the whole time.”
Missing an if between stable and they?
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Ooh, good catch! My brain likes to skip words like that, aaah! And yep, there's a very slight time skip between the end of 36 when Aurora is rescued by Ginger and 37 where... spoilers!
Chapter 37 is heavily focused on prewar backstory. Chapter 38 is going to be very much focused on Aurora & Co. ;)
Oho, ze plot. Eet is thickening!
This story brings me so much joy, thanks Elbow, it's amazing as always! I found some errors, but my phone thought otherwise and just reloaded the page...
Er. I was, indeed, planning to try and not comment much on this, and it's possible I'll miss a reply to this comment, sorry, due to how I'm going through this due to the length, but I'm only a few lines in, and...
"October 25th, 1077
Thursday
“Knock-knock.”
Delta silenced a groan as she closed out the program on her terminal. Nearly ten years stuck in this luxury tomb they called a Stable"
Shouldn't that be 1087? I looked back a bit in the story just in case I was misremembering, but Chapter 33, at least, has the balefire being deployed on October 31st, 1077.
Sorry; I thought you'd like to know, though.
"- - - 4 packets sent.
- - - 4 successful, 1 failed. [25% loss]."
"- - - 4 packets sent.
- - - 3 successful, 1 failed. [25% loss]."?
Or am I missing something?
...And yes, I do seems to be failing to completely avoid commenting...
"- - - - - - pioneer.zip delivered to [JSITermNet0319]."
Shouldn't it be littleexplorer.zip at this point?
"If it phased Pinkie at all, she didn’t show it."
"If it fazed Pinkie at all, she didn’t show it."?
"Primrose watched the unphased aide standing beside her."
"Primrose watched the unfazed aide standing beside her."?
"Luna’s voice rang from the dias"
"Luna’s voice rang from the dais"?
"October 28th, 1077
Sunday Morning"
"October 28th, 1087
Sunday Morning"?
"being encroached on by Pioneer’s deluge of data"
Oh, hm. Is it still supposed to be Pioneer at this point, and the other name was an error?
"Three days since she set it loose"
...Wait. What?
But.
[checks]
Okay... Even if my previous understanding of the first scene of the chapter, that this program had been running for years, was incorrect, that scene was October 25th. This is October 28th, and early in it, of the same year presumed to be 1087. If she set Pioneer loose late on the 25th, that could count as three days... but that first scene also contains this:
"Since then, she would spend an hour each day watching the screen populate with the worm’s findings."
So... as far as I can tell, that would seem to indicate that Pioneer was released on, at the latest, the 23rd, and probably earlier. But it also has to have been released no earlier than the 25th. And those two don't have any overlap, so, uh... I think something's broken here?
(...Though I'm kind of amused by the time difficulties here, at this point. The program was released no later than the 23rd, and no earlier than the 25th, and before the 28th, with one of the main reasons for its creation happening on the 31st, all of the same month, in a year that's ten years after itself.
It starts feeling like an experiment with a time manipulation megaspell went wrong. :D
Er, sorry.)
"ponies a millennia from now"
"ponies a millennium from now"?
I’d like to make a formal complaint.
I’ve finally gotten enough time to sit down and read this very big chapter (which is very nice), but there is a critical thing missing, one that undermines the very integrity of the chapter itself!
There exists no gun!
8/10 (I’m being generous, there better be gun next one, FBI this is a threat of violence)
"tiny pink filly in a cotton candy blue mane"
"tiny pink filly with a cotton candy blue mane"?
"The traffic report from Pioneer’s first few hours lay bare for both of them to see."
I don't know if there's a problem with this, but I thought I'd note it just in case, since it relates to some areas where there does appear to be a problem.
"What bombs did Spitfire see from the safety of the Stable door?"
Well. I note she said she saw the bombs that went off. Not that she said she saw them going off...
(This one isn't error spotting, just to be clear, just something I noticed and decided to comment on.)
"Figured even if it was made for a unicorn like him"
...Yeah, see, in other circumstances, given what was just said earlier about the gun being made for pegasi, I might point this out as a potential error.
But, you know, for some reason, I think Spitfire might not actually be telling the truth here.
"As fucked in the head she had to be to"
"As fucked in the head as she had to be to"?
"- - - 0 successful, 4 failed. [100% loss].
- - - - - - [JSITermNet0409] logged as active node.
- - - - - - [JSITermNet0409] added."
There was a complete failure to connect, but it was still logged as an active node?
"each and every reaction port throughout SOLUS’s superstructure fired"
Well, I assume not actually all of them, just the ones that can give thrust in the desired direction?
And, hah. Nicely done, Jet. Maybe they can find SOLUS. Maybe they can even manage to get in communication with it. But with no remass? They can't change its orbit. They can't even change its attitude, unless there's a backup system of flywheels or something. Unless there's a moment when it happens to already be pointing at whatever they want to hit? SOLUS isn't a functional weapon anymore.
...Actually, I suppose I don't know whether the weapon can be used to generate any thrust. Might be able to do something with that, if so. But that's still not going to produce attitude changes.
...Hm. I suppose I'm also not sure/not remembering whether this universe has gas-conjuring talismans? In which case, Jet might not have been able to exhaust the remass. Evidence against that is him not just putting SOLUS in an escape trajectory, but he might have deliberately not done that due to wanting his daughter to still make passes by the planet. So if it does have the ability to conjure more nitrogen, it might indeed still be able to maneuver.
(Also, still not sure whether Apogee is dead or not; it does look more that way, but still not certain. After all, the key bit pointing towards her being dead is "But there were no observers here anymore. The last conscious breaths on its silver skin had been taken days ago.". And how much of a conscious observer would Blue have been described as? Didn't mean Dash wasn't still in there. Actually, might even mean Apogee was just asleep at the time. So I think it could still turn out either way.)
"bring SOLUS online meant the death two more nations and"
"bring SOLUS online meant the death of two more nations and"?
"at the metal clip board hovering"
"at the metal clipboard hovering"?
"two well-cared for ferns"
"two well-cared-for ferns"?
"It turned freely in her grip and she pushed it open just in time for something the size of a softball to explode against her nose. Cold water splashed up her nostrils and down her throat startling a coughing yelp out of her as she reared backward, the door turning into a hard wall behind her shoulders as it slammed closed behind her."
...I think something got missed here. As I read it, she opens the door and, before she can enter, is hit by a water balloon. This causes her to rear back into the door, which she'd just opened and not walked through, now behind her, and closing it with her on the other side. So... Did she actually go through the door at some point, and that got left out? I assume so? But the phrasing seems to if anything actively suggest the contrary, so... I'm not sure what exactly's meant to be happening here.
Hm, also, interesting that the first balloon's water was cold and the second lukewarm. Maybe Pinkie prepared one more recently than the other?
"frankly, sloppy this was becoming, she"
"frankly, sloppy as this was becoming, she"?
"looking up to their pegasi betters"
"looking up to their pegasus betters"?
Okay, and finally finished this chapter, yay! And enjoyed it. :)
...Of course, now I need to find time for the next chapter...
I caught this when I looked back to check something from the next chapter:
"July 19th, 1067
Canterlot Castle"
It looks as if, from events later in this chapter and in next chapter, this is actually meant to be January 19th?
...Also, now I'm confused again about whether the bombs fell in 1067 or 1077, sorry.
Finally, we get to Pinkie Pie instead of keeping her on the backburner for nearly 40 chapters!
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Woo, Pinkie's time to shine!
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The door slid shut and a quick check showed Milli no longer responded. Spitfire had just confessed to murdering Equestria and then locked her in her office to starve.
Her. The head of IT for the last 10 years. Spitfire was going to kill her by locking her in her office full of snacks and drinks with a computer controlled door.
Spitfire must think she was really bad at her job.
It took 5 minutes to bring one of the spare terminals she had been working on up to function, then another few hours on an alternate login to assemble all the videos and evidence into a concise package. She topped it all off with video from her office camera of Spitfire confessing to being a genocidal traitor and clicked send.
The videos and her short introduction began automatically playing at full volume on every screen and pip buck in the stable. After a bit of thought she added the 'play all' command to her worm and sent it back on its way with its new payload. Having already tracked down so many networks it took only 10 minutes to download the video and begin playing on terminals throughout the stables and the wasteland.
She could dimly hear the sound of a riot somewhere in the distance though her thick metal door and shook her head in quiet astonishment.
"Seriously, kill the IT boss by locking them in a room full of damning evidence and live computer terminals? How in the hell did somepony so stupid manage to kill an entire country?"
Wow, you get me every time you bring up Apogee. She's not even a fan favorite of mine but you give her depth. It keeps choking me up.
One nitpick here is that pneumatics hiss, hydraulics are nearly silent (pumps excluded). More of a schlick than a hiss there. But that's just nitpicking. Unless there's miniature pumps that are making the hissing and each door comes as a prefab module with its own pump?
I really hope that's remorse in her heart.
Yep rarity sucks at bedside manner. Mare's clearly depressed and she finally gets herself to a meeting and you're treating her like that? Shame on you rarity
UGH all the leadup to the rescue followed by several flashes to side stories?? My ragged heart needs closure that aurora is gonna be okay D:
Did she send this from Aurora's pip account or is this an oversight? Cause otherwise what with the whole listening in thing with the Rangers
Primrose has done a tremendous amount of awful things but it's endearing to see her act this kindly towards ginger and aurora in light of Ginger's act of kindness
Damn, it's so sad to have someone so pure pass onto the great beyond. This implies that SOLUS was either cast off into space or redirected to re enter the atmosphere. She's already gone, but the idea of her body being sent off into the cold loneliness of space feels so sad to me. Part of me hopes she would be cremated upon reentry so that her body can seed future life or something poetic like that
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I was thinking the same exact thing. Ginger using Aurora's account and not her own "Nimbus Pinfeathers" account could potentially send a copy straight to Coldbrook.
An intentional decision, or Ginger's potential oversight? Who knows.
Wait, what, huh? The Reinlander Model 700 was designed by Pegasus Wonderbolts to stay balanced in flight, but were created for use by Unicorns?
Either Primrose is implying that using a Stimpack makes someone non-pureblood, by extension that means that Primrose herself is not a pure blood. Or Aurora is so physically damaged that trying to use a Stimpack to heal the catastrophic injury may have unintended (and potentially scaly) side effects.
Cadence's arrows?
Her feathers? As in she'd give her feathers?
Delta comes across as one of the most emotionally damaged characters in the story, it's no wonder that same anguish is what drives her to defy Spitfire. She's already lost everything, why even care anymore?
It took me far too long to realize what soot the "soot stained marble" was, and then it hit.
Jarate!
Vague Doofenshmirtz reference?