At the bottom of Stable 10, the great generator that has kept its residents alive for centuries is beginning to fail. As solutions are sought within, one pegasus sets her sights on the very ponies who built - and possibly sabotaged - her home.
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*squeals manly*
Yes! More chapters to make me happy!#!!!!
Current, almost entirely spurious theory: When she saw the bombs coming, Celestia sent Luna to the moon. A thousand years away is better than dead.
YUUUUSSSS omg amazing job! Cannot wait for the next one :D
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I can only imagine her reaction to blipping back to the moon. The "OH COME ON!" heard round the world!
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I'm super excited to be getting to this place in the story! Glad you've stuck around for the ride!
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Ooh, lots of fun questions! Let's see, which ones can I answer without spoiling anything... ;)
> "Houyhnhym" is a nod to a race of superintelligent horses mentioned in Gulliver's Travels. I think MLP also uses it as a reference somewhere in the show? I just thought it was a painfully weird horse-word that I couldn't pass up using.
> It was mentioned in the scene at Gilda's house that gryphons tended to believe in one sun-god, yep! I don't have plans on diving deep into their religion, but if the opportunity arises where I could expand on it without it feeling like a major diversion, I'll try to sneak a little more in.
> Aurora and Ginger's relationship could accurately be described as fragile and new. Certainly not perfect, as they've only known each other for a week. I'm rooting for 'em, personally. :)
> It's possible I wasn't clear or forgot to mention early on that Roach's wings had decayed away during his transition into a ghoul within the tunnel.
> The movie is canon, yep, however the events that took place during it never occurred in this version of the timeline. Tirek's death at the 'hands' of Twilight had a chilling effect on other villains rising to power, including the Storm King. Celeano and her crew were never bound to servitude, leaving them free to roam the skies to the south. Also, yes, I think it's fair to assume at least ten balefire bombs targeted the junktown at the end of the war and wholly wiped out those weird fishpigs.
> I don't think the Crystal Empire would have had to flex any muscle militarily to close the border. Mostly it amounted to the diplomatic equivalent of snubbing Equestria. I wouldn't think the princesses would be okay with it, but with a war on they had bigger fish to fry.
> Scene with Luna? What scene with Luna? I have no idea what you're talking about oh would you look at the time!
I'm happy the chitchat between Julip and Roach resonated with you! It took about a week to flesh out that scene and it sounds like that was time well spent. I don't think I'm giving anything away by saying I want to give Julip more depth than just an Enclave mare with a penchant for saying "fuck" a lot, and I really enjoy how the two interact on the page. We'll see plenty more from Roach as things progress, too. :)
Also, super excited that you started writing again! I know how clunky and weird it is to start up after a long break (gestures wildly to her first several chapters) but keep at it and you'll start settling into a style that you enjoy. A good tip I can offer is to e-mail yourself notes when you have a good idea. I let my mind wander a lot while I'm at work and once in a while an idea pops up that I don't want to lose, so I send it to myself in an e-mail. Good luck with your fic!
Took me a bit to get through my queue to this, but another good chapter, I thought. And some interesting developments! :D
Thanks for writing. :)
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Thanks for reading!
Great update.
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Thank you :)
Remember, kids: smoking kills!
Really wondering what-all happened to the Crystal Empire now. Did the treaty get rolled over by Equestria once things got even worse, or did they survive to the end and then Vhanna wasn't too picky about their targets? (That's assuming even the Heart couldn't stand up to balefire bombs.) Or hell, maybe they resurrected Sombra and got him to re-disappear the place just in time.
I'm really loving this different take on the Fallout Equestria universe. It's interesting to see where exactly things went wrong here after the fight with Tirek. I also like the fact that balefire has a noticeable effect on magic.
This resonates Discord's warning from the previous chapter to a poetic extent. It hammers the point home.
How odd it is that Discord is the ignored source of wisdom.
I distinctly remember the therapy being the other way around, twilight dips further into denial.
I like how Discord is making genuine attempts at redemption by trying to be a good friend to Twilight, but she is too blind to see it and forsakes him instead.
In this chapter, I noticed a couple more continuity incongruences.
From this chapter:
This directly conflicts with chapter 20:
A quote later in the chapter aptly describes the situation surrounding her tools:
Another incongruency noted in this chapter is one that was initially caught in chapter 19, this chapter states that Ginger's dream occurs three years after her traumatic event. This would make her nineteen in the current dream-flashback:
This contradicts chapter 10, when earlier in the book it is established Roach found Ginger as a child. After this chapter, it would mean that Roach found her as an adult.
Technically flipping the stated ages in chapters 10 and 19 would fix this incontinuity. Because traveling alone at 19 is still too young to be traveling alone, as the Lone Wanderer was reminded at several points in Fallout 3.
The capture of these inconsistencies in no way detracts from my thorough enjoyment of this novel. I offer these up as constructive criticism of the story from the reader's perspective. Overall I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter and fully intend to complete the story.
Also, I like the inclusion of the abnormally large earth pony Meridian. It adds some mystery as to her condition. Was it the result of genetics? radiation? chems? Who knows, but she is certainly imposing.
Man I was actually starting to like Ginger before she got all passive aggressive asshat the last couple chapters
Aurora, without her help you would have walked into his bloody trap. Why are you just as ungrateful?
Also true. Both sides are acting like kids
*page tear* Pppfffft, like that's ever gonna happen
someBODY once told me...
I have a lot of mixed conflicted feelings about the mechanisms behind Balefire that are described. It's a really cool and unique concept. But the massacre Twilight just committed really sours my ability to enjoy it. I feel like I would've enjoyed the explaination more if the sabotage came later, or something. I don't know tbh I'm just really grappling with how unlikeable twilight is (not bad writing, just a bad person) which is in big juxtaposition with how I typically feel about her. You did a great job ensuring that all previous leadups to this didn't feel like a rugpull; it was expected to some extent. But I'm moreso surprised at the level of injustice and how completely unphased she was that she straight up murdered over a hundred ponies because she was so greedy, so selfish and egotistical that HOW DARE MY FORMER CHILDHOOD RIVAL HAVE A SLIVER OF SUCCESS
twilight is a god damn bully-gone-serial killer.
I love captain beans <3
Also while the crew was being unnecessarily rude with julip, I do concede that julip is a bit of a douchenozzle herself sometimes. Hoping for a change of heart/attitude <3
Well I'm at least glad she had the clarity to realize it was her hubris and inability to listen to a being more ancient than even celestia could imagine. Twi, when the lord of friggin chaos gets afraid of something, maybe it's time to listen???
Whoa, this is a twist I wasn't expecting at all. Color me intrigued