At the bottom of Stable 10, the great generator that has kept its residents alive for centuries is beginning to fail. As solutions are sought within, one pegasus sets her sights on the very ponies who built - and possibly sabotaged - her home.
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Underrated story
Hm. I wonder why Ginger didn't hear Primrose's other words, in that part at the beginning where there's overlap with the previous chapter?
"Smoldering bits of wood drew charred lines where some had been, but there was no debris."
The smoldering bits of wood don't count as debris?
"Seconds ladder, Sledge had"
"Seconds later, Sledge had"?
"apart and a grant vista of night"
"apart and a grand vista of night"?
"didn’t show any signs of addition, Julip"
"didn’t show any signs of addiction, Julip"?
"bags besides Julip’s let her butt drag against"
"bags beside Julip’s and let her butt drag against"?
"assault shotgun laying on the granite between them"
"assault shotgun lying on the granite between them"?
"expecting from what was by all accounts looked like"
"expecting from what by all accounts looked like"?
"the Enclave's standard issued field uniform"
"the Enclave's standard issue field uniform"?
"Beside her, Aurora looked mollified by what she’d seen."
...Are you sure "mollified" is the word you want, there? I'm not sure how it makes sense in context, unless I'm missing something. Hm. Was it meant to be "mortified"? That seems more plausible...
"surprised you didn’t full Julip on"
"surprised you didn’t go full Julip on"?
"but imagine they couldn’t stop someone from"
"but I imagine they couldn’t stop someone from"?
"accomplish is changing the shapes of"
"accomplish was changing the shapes of"?
"I cancelled your contract because yesterday the stimpack formula you sold to Maiden Pharma eradicated a small battalion of Enclave soldiers."
Am I missing something, or should that have not been "Enclave" there?
"Punishment was more like it. A slap on the hoof."
What does the bullet point in front of this line indicate?
"the door and let them drift the rest of the"
"the door and let it drift the rest of the"?
I'm low on time at the moment, but I continue to enjoy this story; thank you for writing. :)
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Thank you <3
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Haha oh god, seconds LADDER. Come on, Ellie...
I'll make corrections when t's not 4am but thank you for having a keener eye than me! Back to sleep!
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Heh, no problem; typos happen. :D
And particularly no problem there, given what I was just saying in the blog post comments, eh? :D
And you're welcome, though I'm not sure how much it's "keener"; I've been on the side of things of being someone who works on the story, spending hours working with others to edit it before release, and then still implementing lists of typo corrections helpful commenters posted. Your prose is pretty good, but perfection is a high bar indeed. :)
Anyway, sleep well!
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I just spent the last few minutes trying to figure out why none of the sentences you had edits for were in the story, and then I realized I was looking through One Size Fits Most. I am not a smart cookie.
Edits are being made now! Thank you again and let me know if you come across any other weirdness. :)
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Woof, alright edits are in! The big one being that mention of "Enclave" battalion was meant to be "Equestrian" battalion. Call me crazy but I don't think Spitfire would allow what was left of her Wonderbolts to be used as guinea pigs. XD
Woof, just finished this to the current chapter. Your writing style fits the setting and characters very well, and it is always good to see a Fallout fic still ongoing. Well done, I hope to see more soon.
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Ah, hah, sorry. :D
And you're welcome. And I don't promise perfection, but I do tend to notice some things and note them down. :) I seem to be alright at it. :D
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Yeah, that confused me for a bit, as I recall; I kept wondering if I'd forgotten something, or waiting for there to be some reaction to Celestia knowing about it... and then I realized it was probably just a typo. :D
And thanks!
so the cannon of the original FoE has no impact on this?
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No it doesn't, this story takes place in its own universe. Littlepip & Co don't exist as far as I know. ;p
> Immortal Primrose
AAAAAAAAAA–
Beyond that, hmm...
Okay, so I'm maybe starting to pick up a disconnect here. Not sure if it's real/intended or not, but
hoofhand we've got an unspoken belief among an unknown number of pre-Apoc ponies, and what seems to be a confirmed general belief post-Apoc, that the Sisters' whole moving-the-heavens thing is fakery. Less understandable pre-Apoc—if we're 100% canon up until Tirek's untimely demise—since there have been clear incidents of erratic behavior in the heavens. Completely understandable post-Apoc since either 1) it was lies, 2) it wasn't and at least one alicorn is still alive, hidden, but active enough to still be controlling the heavens, or 3) something else has taken over control.So I guess what I'm saying is that this recent chat with the Tantabus has set me back to wondering about the cosmology and what exactly the alicorns are, and just how much power they hold. Is/was there fakery?
I'm also wondering if there's a significance to the burning doorways in the dream realm. You would think if the dream realm were entirely magical then the balefire would have just destroyed it/eaten it all up, and then the flames burnt out long ago. Primrose's thoughts mention pocket realities, so perhaps that explains there still being structure to the place, but why is the fire still going? Is there still magic feeding in from somewhere? Or wait...if endlessly burning doorways correspond to ponies who were touched by balefire yet have been active since that...does each burning doorway correspond to a ghoul?
Perplexing princess powers aside...Spike sure was spot-on when he said this Twilight just doesn't know when to stop. You'd think with all of this evidence that balefire is just as bad as Discord was saying, she might go back and have another chat, maybe even ask for help since her side is now clearly on-track to powerfuck the world. Or she could at least let him go like he asked. Of course, this is Twilight "Murder first, friendship later." Sparkle, so...nah.
......Also also, we now know Primrose is just perpetually stuffed to the gills with Twilight's magical helljuice. Having terrifying visions of her getting balefired and turning into Cozy Godzilla.
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"Good thing she's an angel now!"
Well, of course; the church and country she founded and keeps under her
ironlovely velvety hoof say so. :D10625918
Hm. Interesting point, regarding the pre-Tirek's-demise heavenly antics. I do wonder what went on there in this universe...
(Also interesting point about the burning doors potentially being ghouls. :D)
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Hmm hmm hmm...
I'm trying to think of a way to answer your without accidentally giving something away.
Bum bum bum...
I tell ya what. Let me move some things around in the next chapter. I think I can squeak in some explanation in without disrupting the flow. :)
Wow, this version of Celestia is dense: your new gasoline powered automobile is to be recalled at once! When exposed to a nuclear bomb the gas burns uncontrollably!
Well no $π!1 Sherlock, you don't say?
Also, Beans asked the two of them to leave fingerprints (or, feathers) at the home to be found and used against them later? Really?
Well let's just hope the family survives their (at this point inevitable) encounter with the enclave... : /
No!!!
I've caught up!
Thank you so much for writing this.
Can't wait for more!
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You're welcome, and thank you for reading to this point! More to come!
Oh man this was a good chapter. Glad i finally got around to reading it today!
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I'm glad you've been enjoying it, and thanks for sticking with it for this long!
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It has been 220 years, but typically in Fallout/Fallout: Equestria lore, Vault and Stable dwellers are meant to wait for an "All Clear" announcement from Vault-Tec and Stable-Tec before unsealing the door. I like to think after a couple centuries of adjusting to life in a shelter, it's something people become accustomed to. I don't imagine many dwellers would want to trade an easy life like that for what could only promise to be a hard life on the surface. ;)
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I absolutely love writing her for that reason. In MLP, Cozy Glow always stood out to me as the most potently dangerous villains in the series. She's a psychopath, and even worse, she's a manipulative psychopath. When I first started writing Renewal I had no plans to include her in the story at all, but at some point I realized that with Tirek's death spooking the other villains to come out of their original plans, Cozy Glow would essentially grow into adulthood unhindered. There was no way I was going to pass up the chance to weave her into the story and I'm so happy I did. :)
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Hopefully the next one won't be delayed too badly. ^_^
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take alllllll the time you need! (seriously, the longer the better for me lol) It's the busy time of year here and I don't have the eye energy to read like I want. D:
Uh oh....I caught up...
NOOOOO!!!!
XD your story is soooll goood!!!
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Thank you! Keep an eye out for the next installment - things are going to start speeding up :)
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Roach needs more snuggles ^^
he is best GHOUB! (bug ghoul)
Finally sat down to read this, and It takes me back to when I first read the original FO:E in that more than once I finished reading a chapter and realised it was nearly 2am lol.
Really enjoying this alt-universe take on Fallout Equestria, cant wait for more. :)
btw i didn't manage to comment this earlier because I was too busy reading more. ( it's almost 5 am, thanks for that) But the ark or whatever of the group descending into Stable 1 was excellent. I hope it was as exciting to write as it was to read because it was an absolute fantastic chapter in a fantastic fiction.
FOE is what got me into mlp, and fanfiction in general. This has been a wonderful reminder of why I'm still here sifting through stories, thank you
Awwww!!!!! THIS IS SO CUTE!!!!
I love julip lol
Maaaaaaan I feel so bad for julip, she must be abso-bucking-lutely terrified! But man I'm so relieved she hid them, I LOVE her character development!!!!
It does serve her right to get her just desserts after what she did to Trixie, but at the same time I almost feel slightly bad for her.
Oh right she was the one who ignored discord and invented Balefire bombs. Never mind
Oh well!
Man I loved this chapter. You do such a good job at making the enclave enigmatic enough to be.mysterious and unpredictable, and yet benevolent enough to aurora that (especially in light of the steel rangers' greed) make them look like good guys. Really a true morally grey entity in the story
Is that a Vault 79 reference?
How wonderful it is to finally meet the Enclave in person. It's humorous to hear that people still don't know what a floater is.
My headcanon is that Celestia used her Daybreaker form to intimidate Twilight here.
One of the best moments of the chapter.
Very good writing that elevates the threat of the Rangers, excavation power armor is canon too!
Primrose is both correct and horribly wrong, she is massively underestimating the Rangers. I doubt the Rangers will try to breach the door, they will likely try breaching a weaker exterior wall. Then fight their way to the atrium.
Aurora has seen her weapon disassembled before, back in Chapter 5.
But Roach probably doesn't know Aurora has seen her rifle dismantled before.
I cannot quite parse this line, It just confuses me.
That was the Dressage mare's intention, one that left Ginger particularly emotional. Likely because she went against her own moral standards.
Taken from Chapter 13:
By the way, the above paragraph from Chapter 13 was one of the hardest-hitting moments in the book for me. A reality check of the wasteland.
This was a wonderful chapter. I look forward to the future reading, with the occasional dipping back into the previous chapters.
Lethally. Adorable.
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Lots of edits made to fix those goofs, hah! I think halfway into writing this book I was already regretting choosing 1067 as the year the bombs fell as opposed to the more Fallout appropriate '77. If it wouldn't require an absolute boatload of work and continuity checking, I'd just flip it to '77 for the sake of my brain wanting that number. @.@ Back when I first started writing I spent a bunch of time trying to work out a year number that would make sense to existing pony canon and ended up going with Luna's trip to the moon being a formal Year 0, which put Season 1 at a tidy year 1000... which would have made the Mane 6 so far beyond retirement age that it was silly. At some point I got the bright idea to yank it back a decade... and promptly threw all that logic straight out the window when I decided to write the Mane 6 as mares in their late fifties.
Yeaaah, I should probably just change it. XD
Also, you absolutely know I can't go through the effort of asking Shinodage for permission to use his Space Ponyos without mentioning those headcanons.
Fixed the artefact spellings and made 'em Americanized. My guess is spellcheck was throwing me for a loop and I second guessed how words were made. :3
Glad you're loving the story enough to binge read it! Let me know what else you find and whatcha like or don't like! I'm actively working on the sequel to Renewal and I can always use a top up on my authorly mojo!