At the bottom of Stable 10, the great generator that has kept its residents alive for centuries is beginning to fail. As solutions are sought within, one pegasus sets her sights on the very ponies who built - and possibly sabotaged - her home.
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Sigh...I mean, on the one
handhoof, he deserved it.Buuut on the other, someone's going to have to clean that up. How inconsiderate!
Oh hey, it's Chekov's Deathclaw.
Also ohboy, now the Enclave has her on-radar. Need to accelerate the friend-making before that hammer drops.
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;) To be fair, Trotter wasn't exactly a *great* pony...
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...but an absolutely terrible paint job.
Celes-Tea....dammit. I don't think I can ever forget that now. And am I rooting for the wrong side if I think capitalism can save Equestria!?! All you gotta do is put a Hayburger Queen (Mascot )on every corner!
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I'm not proud of the branding pun, but I kind of am. ;) Keep an eye out! I'm back in good health and Chapter 13 is just edging toward being finished. Looking forward to getting this thing out in the wild.
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I'm sorry to hear about your poor health stint, but glad to hear your better. I'm obviously a bit behind, but staying career focused will do that. Still, it's nice to curl up with a good chapter and get away from it all to the world of Fallout Equestria.
And never, ever be sorry for a damn good pun. Quality stuff right there!
Hmmm. Deathclaws instead of Hellhounds, there's an unexpected change. I don't think I mentioned this, but I like your take on Radaway. MUCH more medically sound than Poof RadBeGone. Good thing Aurora knows to keep her fluids up to replace what she's losing.
I'm surprised that the Enclave is patrolling Deathclaw territory, but I suspect that this encounter is going to cause trouble in the future. They know she's not Enclave now, and whoever was running that not is gonna hold a grudge.
Trotter is a right bastard, but Autumn made a mistake in killing him. No one does your dirty work if you kill them for doing it; that said, I expect her to end up dead at the end of this. She should have just maimed him, or made some announcement about why she was going to kill him. Oops.
That Ginger is part of some larger family is curious, but we'll see where it goes!
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;p Out of all the characters in FiM, I like the diamond dogs the least. Even less than breezies. I didn't even realize I'd nixed the hellhounds until just now. Whomp! But, on the plus side, I'll have an opportunity to expand one some custom lore regarding their evolution.
I sincerely hope that that's just propaganda. Because if it isn't, I might have to bail. I hate it when the Enclave is portrayed as just pure evil (partially from PH giving them a lot more character than the original).
Also;
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Without spoiling future chapters, the Enclave has more depth than Fallout Boogeyman.
There is a great deal of divergence from what we know of Fallout Equestria from the Kkat perspective, and it is wholly refreshing with new lines drawn in the sand and new frontiers to be carved out, if anything it gives me hope that I can do the same as I've been dearly wishing to do. Mouth-guns not being a thing (so far?), as well as Deathclaws replacing Diamond Dog/Hellhounds is probably the most welcome change, something I planned to do myself as the Deathclaws are irreplaceable in Fallout and mouth-guns are infuriating.
This is certainly a story to keep in sight. Even within the first few paragraphs and the breakdown, thoughts, and conversations by sentence structure between Aurora and her boss were wholly engaging for me to keep reading on, it was not a slog as with other fics and was enjoyable. The descriptions of everything surrounding Aurora are beautiful even when horrendous and allows the imagination to fully grasp the areas we're in beyond blasted muddy hellscapes. I must admit I skim over the journal logs a little as that's something both FO:E and PH did to death and back to the point of utter Canterlot Ghoul-ification, though so far they don't seem to have any massive overarching tie to the plot we're seeing unfold, which is nice and I hope it stays that way to a fair degree.
Tracking.
Another solid chapter. I'm interested in the deathclaw thing. I don't really remember the hellhounds of the original, but they were at least a tie-in with FiM. This is straight from Fallout, no apparent change required. I'm all for monsters bonkin up the place, but it does seem like you lose more than you gain with the swap. Even if you dislike hellhounds, maybe there's another monster from the show you could adapt. An apocalypse'd cockatrice or timberwolf or something. Still, the storyline doesn't suffer from it, and that's what counts.
Finally, contact with the Enclave! I was worried that they'd be a bunch of faceless goons, but it looks like you're giving them a bit more character than that. Aurora reacts a lot more believably here, I'm glad she didn't talk her way out of that somehow. She's not really making friends with anybody, but with her ground-based origins she's posed to become a link between earth and sky here. I wonder if that's the direction things'll take?
I didn't get Ginger's cutie mark right with my guess, and that's a good thing! A former slave totally fits the bill, but it's not at all expected! I am a bit worried to see that suddenly her family is well-known by F&F, and she's more important than she seemed. Characters' pasts being revealed over time is a-ok, but I think revealing more and more and more twists and turns and making a character more and more and more special can hurt the story in the long run. Project Horizons did this a lot, retconning and revealing and jumping sharks and tacking on more and more unique and twisty backstory to each character until the protagonists were downright godlike. I much prefer ordinary people doing extraordinary things to extraordinary people doing the same. Feels a lot more grounded, and the characters are much more relatable.
Lots of setting up for the next chapter! I'm gonna be brief here because I wanna read it real bad, so job well done.
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Tense error.
I love the flying here! Also a very handy way to escape ground-bound deathclaws