At the bottom of Stable 10, the great generator that has kept its residents alive for centuries is beginning to fail. As solutions are sought within, one pegasus sets her sights on the very ponies who built - and possibly sabotaged - her home.
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Great chapter
I want to strangle her with ever fiber of my entire being.
Excellent chapter. I do so adore how you detail everything down to the millimetre of a hair on Aurora's scarred arse and the individual flecks of grime and dust that have accumulated in the space between her cheeks.
Eshe's death was very well handled and paced, quite dramatic in the best way.
Though my arsehole clenched a little when Aurora said that she wanted to talk with Roach after all this was over. As far as I see it, Roach and Julip have both achieved their 'ends' as it were, and they have death flags awaiting above their heads in my mind, so I worry for their continued safety. I do also for Fiona as she's so bloody reckless, can't help but love her and think she'd destined to go out in a blaze of glory.
I do believe that is a reference.
Wow, that was an epic chapter. Excellent work!
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Thank you!
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Oh, I'm sure her winning streak will hit a brick wall eventually.
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Oh yeah, I really enjoy fleshing out the scenery, getting into each character's head, and more or less exploring as much as I can reasonably explore. I'm glad the pacing and impact of Eshe's last scene hit right for you. That was a tough one to write, less in terms of choosing the right words and more in the way of saying goodbye to a character who wanted to be done. Definitely resonates differently when all parties involve know it isn't a matter of finding a magical miracle cure to fix his body, and they're just fulfilling his last wish on his behest.
And you better believe it's a reference, haha. I can't turn down a perfectly good opportunity to rag on Fallout's most beloved questline crutch! I swear personal, unsecured journals were more popular than Nuka-Cola.
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Thank you! I really wanted to contain the entire Mariposa exploration to one chapter, length be damned. No sense in dragging out the inevitable ending over the course of multiple installments. ^_^
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You and me both.
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That brick wall better have spikes and pop up in front of her when she least expects it, lol, jk.
In truth, she needs to know she bucked up.
I also see that Cozy Glow would DEFINATELY do this if she could.
well, so much for what I was going to do today. Now I'm reading this.
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Sunday is canceled due to pony!
Good one, got 4+ hours of very immersive listening through it ^_^
Some fine work down here, i can't wait for more.
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Listening? I'm curious how that works! Do you use text to voice software or did you hire the dulcet voice of Wil Wheaton to read it to you?
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^_^ Thank you. I took yesterday off from writing and this morning I broke ground on Chapter 48. Goes without saying it won't be an utter doorstop like Freed, haha! I got feathers crossed for a July publication!
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Cheapest way is to use some kind of TTS interface software for default win10/11 male/female voices MS David and MS Zira. But I guess it will be wise to try modern AI-based TTS software if available because voices in Win10/11 are made old way and far from perfect; but I like them anyway and way too lazy to switch for something on the Will Wheaton level. Here how it sounds (maybe useful for self
proof-readingproof-listening):https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ojW_e8PYHGq3kYwIqp43I2nGqk36iRM5/view?usp=sharing
The gang LIVES! ...for now.
Primrose seems to have drawn another trump card from the deck, unfortunately. Just one more reason for Aurora to pay her a visit. Though, perhaps knowledge of the weapon Prim has in her hooves can help Aurora leverage the aid of more allies who wish to not be vaporized...
Cozy Glow....... that biiiiiiiiitch
Oh, oh man, I should have not read that at work, damn it all, got very misty eyed at that scene, fuck. Your writing is great.
...Oh. Right, even if SOLUS is out of propellant, if it still has some sort of angular-momentum-based attitude control system and enough range on its weapon... it might take a while for it to finish executing its program, and IIRC its attitude control would eventually become saturated -- which might happen before it hit all its targets. Well, or Jet Stream might have thought to command it to do that too, in which case Primrose is out of luck -- but with the stakes, it seems a bad idea to depend on that. And even one target hit would be a disaster. Even if SOLUS was only able to hit a mere ten percent, that's more than ten Stables destroyed and a fresh injection of fallout into the wasteland. A lack of propellant would be a major problem if SOLUS needed to change its orbit, and relatedly if there was anyone on the ground who could shoot it down before it can fire... but lacking those, that's a potent threat Primrose just made.
Also, there was a lot of other impactful stuff in that chapter (it was kind of long :D), but that bit at the end, coming at the end, is... most recent. ...Yeah, sorry, somewhat tired and hungry by this point, but, hey, got caught up on this story!
And I continue to enjoy it; thank you for writing!
And yes, I think Eshe's death was well done.
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Oh, I mostly listen to these, too, using FIMFiction's built-in text-to-speech interface. Though that just interfaces with the system's text-to-speech, so how good it is depends heavily on that. My OSX machine, currently my primary, has in my opinion very good built-in text-to-speech; my Linux machine is still something of a work in (slow) progress there (It's newer and more powerful, and being Linux I assume there's some way to get it to run very good text-to-speech indeed, but it's been something of a struggle to even get it up to "passable". Apparently text-to-speech is something Apple did really right years ago. And I'm talking about fully local text-to-speech, to be clear, not something that relies on a connection to an external server.).
Anyway, sorry I don't have more detailed commentary, but, well, tired, hungry, perhaps should have gotten to bed hours ago, but, on the other hoof, good horsewords. :D
Hm, though, something else I've now thought of:
Flying by the Ponyville crater as they did, wouldn't they have actually been passing relatively close to New Canterlot? Yet they don't seem to have been particularly concerned about being intercepted by the Enclave, so is the Ponyville/Canterlot distance farther here than one might think from the show? Or am I missing and/or forgetting something else?
Definitely glad I waited for a slow weekend to read this one. Your beautiful horse words managed to captivate my heart and bring me to literal tears in this chapter.
Ehse's death was a peaceful way to go for someone who didnt deserve that horrible fate.
I'm very concerned about why the bodies aren't fully decayed after so long. I'm excited to see why the soldiers were sent to lockdown the facility, and why they died so suddenly when the bombs went off, though. I have this sinking feeling that Aurora and company will find out the hard way on their way back out.
Overall, it was a great chapter.
By the way, your username brings joy into my life; you could say that it has made me venture elbow deep into making cheesy puns about it. (I'll stop if you want me to.)
In all seriousness though, keep up the great work on here, and on a particular image hosting site you keep popping up on.
Love the chapter, love the story. This is the third story I have read after the original and Heros, and I rate it very highly.
I have a question though that I only noticed this chapter about your gryphons. They have fur all the way up to their face and lion like ears? Why did you make this change from the gryphons in the show?
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Thank you, that's high praise! ^^ I tweaked the gryphon anatomy more as an aesthetic preference than anything other reason. There's a digital drawing I found on e621 drawn by Kodardragon that I especially like, and wound up being Fiona’s template early on. I think it's much more expressive with the big ol' feline ears and kinda figured, why not! :D
Can't post the drawing in question here since it's NSFW, but the post ID is 1835820 on E621.net
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does this story involve an Alicorn as side character? Or good scenes with them?
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Not as of yet, unless you include the Tantabus maybe? This story is an entirely new canon, so there isn't any postwar alicorn hive mind to speak of. Though, sans any alicorns, I'd like to say there are still plenty of good scenes. :)
Aaaah fek
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I'm so glad I was able to write Fiona back in, she's easily one of my favorites. Birb needs her page time :)
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so glad she's now part of the team. SHE NEEDS ALL DEH LOVES!!!!
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o/ Welcome to the Renewal club! Excited to have new readers, especially ones who remind me of the snappy lines I wrote back in the beforetimes (holy crud it really has been four years now)!
I miss those early chapters <3
I LOVE THESE NERD ASS PEGASI OKAY. Stars above I want them to be redeemable.
“Most of the Elements of Harmony called it home, back when it was still a town.” He turned away from the trucks and stood. “Wouldn’t surprise me if Primrose and Spitfire assigned more than one bomb there just to make a point."
Fuckers took PONYVILLE! Can't have SHIT in Equestria.
See, there it is. I remembered them.
...what if Eshe somehow is being preserved from turning into one? I'm so curious.
Time is stalling. She's been skipping, and I have a bad feeling about where this is ending. A really, really bad feeling.
Well, there's that.
Oh you motherfucker.
Celestia this story is so good...
There are few things I love more in existence than genuine repentance for someone's bad course. The complete 180 at the realization that what one did was fundamentally bad, and the intense desire to do anything you possibly could to make it right again. Everyone who goes through this deserves another chance and a clean slate. I really really appreciate being able to see this happen again and again on the part of former enclave members. Weathers, julip, chops... I've said it once and I'll say it again. I'm pretty sure I don't only speak for myself when I say I LOVE a good redemption arc
Oof, I was enjoying seeing where they were going with this
As someone who's been assigned to "Rat Patrol" when our mill was shuttered for a few weeks a few years back.. being in an industrial complex alone is creepy enough even without magic, horrors, or the infinite creativity allotted to fiction. It's VERY unsettling especially if you aren't accustomed to the place / are new. I can only imagine how creeped out aurora must feel in this situation. I am relishing the tension of this scene :>
Not gonna lie some of this council hit pretty close to home, in a lot of ways. I really liked this scene and appreciate the insight into Fiona's character, especially with her being the one to help aurora stop hiding behind flight trauma responses
OooooOOOoooOooOoOooOoOoo ominous
Maaaaaaan you just know exactly what to write to make the hackles on our necks raise up
Man, this makes me wonder what the ghoul was trying to do before it went completely feral
Maaaaaaan this book has me gripped so tightly here I am up at 1am on a work night again. What a bloody cliffhanger!! I'll have to wait to find out tomorrow what the source of the cough was
Ironically enough I initially suspected turrets when I thought of eshe "luring them to their deaths" then when it came up with no turrets and instead the majority dying by ghoul, I let my guard down. Sure enough , turrets!
Man I can't even imagine what it would have been like to be among some of the survivors during that first 40 years. THOUSANDS of shared dreamers, not just a dozen.
I really hoped she would kiss his forehead, like he did hers. This was beautiful, and so indescribably heart-wrenching. I'm happy to see she used nitrogen, such a painless and merciful, peaceful way to go.
But man, this is just so, so, so sad. Sad for eshe, for what he got roped into. Sad for Aurora, that she had to be part of it and had to help him see his way off. Sad for the 3 optimistic ponies who just wanted to help and who got snuffed out prematurely by it, and sad for eshe that it was that moment that marked the pivot point between wanting rescuer, to wanting rest.
Man, I don't know what else to say. This was really something else
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Yeah, that ending was hard to write. When I first wrote Eshe into the community dream way back when Ginger was the one dreaming, I hadn't planned him to be a recurring character. Crazy how he ended up evolving.