At the bottom of Stable 10, the great generator that has kept its residents alive for centuries is beginning to fail. As solutions are sought within, one pegasus sets her sights on the very ponies who built - and possibly sabotaged - her home.
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I love the staging of this chapter! We kick things off with a greater level of turmoil and more at stake ahead of what’s on the horizon, and we get the approaching confrontation with the Enclave. This chapter just made me love these characters even more, and I’m just aching to know more about Roach’s half-remembered past, not to mention WHAT HAPPENED TO BLUE that keeps echoing back in her memory?!
I really hope Aurora and co. end up betraying that son of a bitch.
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It definitely kept me thinking and rechecking! Took a lot of revision to get it where I wanted even a draft to be, oy vey. :)
I haven't forgotten about Roach and Blue! I really want to say more than that, but no spoilers!
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I'm more angry with Coldbrook for his name! Do you know how many times I had to delete "Coldstone?!" Who names these horses, anyway? Now I want a malt!
...So, Coldbrook. Your brilliant plan is to recruit at the point of guns aimed at her friends and family a mare who's already forcibly rearranged power structures and killed or maimed major players, and their followers, in pursuit of her goals. Recruit her, a pegasus, to go and be recruited by the pegasus supremacists. The ones who apparently value pegasi stable dwellers staying safe in their stables. And while she's with them, all you'll be able to reliably know about her activities is what she tells you.
And you conducted this coercion after, right in front of her, breaking an agreement with a long-time and well-known personality of the area, stripping her of her livelihood, because it had become more convenient for you, giving her no particular reason to trust that you wouldn't seize her home even if she did every last thing you wanted.
Yep, no way this could possibly go wrong for you!
And then after I wrote that, the very next section already contained it starting to go wrong for him, and in a way I hadn't even thought of above. Yep. :D
And at last I catch up with this story's posting. :D
Interesting alternate FoE world you have here, and story in it. :)
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He's really making a mess in his own house, isn't he? No doubt he'll have something to say about Aurora's lockout. Hmm...
Glad you're enjoying this different take on FO:E! More to come, and I've got a solid weekend to bury myself into the rest of Chap 16 ;)
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Yeah. He probably could have successfully recruited her for that job, too (at least until/unless SOLUS turned out to be something she didn't want to hand over) if he'd been nice about it.
"You seem like a capable mare who cares a lot about her friends and people. Well, as someone charged with the care of this entire town, I can respect that. So here, have one of our spare ignition talismans. But that done, and your Stable safe, there's something you could really help us, the whole town, out with. And you have caused some trouble around here, after all."
Hook her with a bit of gratitude and guilt. Maybe give some things back to Fiona at Aurora's request, to make her feel more indebted. And keep his copying of her PipBuck secret, so he still has it in reserve and she's less likely to counter it; he can still switch to threatening later if he needs to.
Buuuuut no, he just had to show that He Is In Charge.
:)
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I tell ya, if only he had several weeks to think it through! ;)
Wow, those are some impressive statistics. Having only one downvote on an FO:E story is like as rare as a unicorn.
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Thank you! Honestky, seeing a new upvote is like a little burst of caffeine. Gets me excited to jump into the next chapter. :)
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Np. I often feel the same way :)
. “I realize the three of you may not who I am.
May not know who I am.
Loving the story!
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Thanks! Glad you're enjoying it!
(I'm a bit frazzled this morning, is there a typo in the line you quoted?)
So there just happens to be a deathclaw named mac......that has super regeneration abilities.........while big mac was being used to test healing spells designed after reptilian regeneration..............HMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM
I'm getting Hammer of Dawn or GDI Ion Cannon vibes from this SOLUS that both the Enclave and Rangers are after
Honestly I completely forgot about her old stable AI! This was such a nice flavor bit, to have the AI in more than one stable... It also makes me wonder what sort of shenanigans it could be used for, her being a stable dweller and the BoS not
Oh. Oh no. Oh nooooooo!!!!! HE CLONED IT TO HIS OWN AND IS GONNA IMPERSONATE HER TO GET THE STABLE TO OPEN NOOOOOOOOO!
Wait did the enclave strip it or did BoH?
Man, I hated these brotherhood knobs a lot before, but this just takes the steak. I have zero sympathy for any sort of comeuppance that hopefully comes their way
IRL I'm incredibly against lying, and try my best to be honest as much as I can. But after that previous spectacle part of me reeeeallllly wishes she would have omitted this by saying something like "do I look like an I.T. pony? A server is someone who brings your food to the table, and she was the only pony there. I freed her because no one deserves to spend their last moments in a cage". Not providing information to someone who's not entitled to it isn't dishonest, and misdirection in times of war is strategy
I was super hoping the deal was gonna be more along the lines of trading a fabricator for it. On the other hand, with how incorrigibly malevolent the BoS is, maybe joining up with the enclave might not be too bad. THEY at least showed concern for her after she told them who she was, especially when she was about to stumble into Mac. So far I get a much nicer vibe from this AU enclave, for sure
YASSSSSS THE BRILLIANT, BEAUTIFULLY INTELLIGENT MARE DOES THE THING! I was truly hoping she would use the stable AI or similar to send a message to them; if messages can get out, messages can get in!
OH MY GOSH IT WAS EVEN BETTER THAN I EXPECTED!!!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA I LITERALLY BURST OUT SCREAMING IN EXCITEMENT THAT SLEDGE GOT THIS MESSAGE!!! Aurora is such a smart cookie <333
Asking him to bring Blue in just straight up tops it. She thought of everything; I REALLY hope they stay safe!!!!!!!!!
Got another batch for you
From chapter 13:
From chapter 14:
I am left wondering why Fiona used up that excellent blackmail to get back the PipBuck that was supposed to be returned anyway and the Rangers no longer needed. 'Course she didn't know that last part 'till she'd played her cards, but also didn't ask.
From chapter 15:
And now onwards, all aboard the Gingerfeathers ship train, whoop whoop!