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Troy Caliber and Neo Blake are two friends that have faced many things in their life together. So when they both buy some interesting stuff from a guy cosplaying as the merchant from resident evil, the last thing they would suspect is to be transported to a world full of walking talking ponies and other creatures like griffons, talking deer's and minotaur's, and becoming the people they cosplayed as in con. The ponies they meet are having a terrible case of demon attacks happening, not just near them but the other raciest, luckily the two are fast learners and find this to be more interesting than scary.

The double duo are going to face many ugly, monstrous demons in the world of equestrian. Taking them down and delivering demonic beatdown in style😎.

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DemanSlayers i like the name so are thy like demon/angels aka nephilim or are thy like warriors with the power of the nephilim?

Troy Caliber and Neo Blake are two friends that have faced many things in their life together. So when they both buy some interesting stuff from a guy cosplaying as the merchant-

Tell me, is this the merchant responsible for your displacement?
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Oh dear. Let's pull out the cliche checklist.

  • Edgy
  • Displaced
  • Merchant
  • Inline images illustrating things
  • Telling instead of showing
  • Cosplayers
  • Infodumping of the highest order
  • Transforming into the thing they cosplayed as
  • Dumped into Equestria for no reason whatsoever
  • Bad grammar
  • The earth pony started to speck in a authority tone

  • speck. Really? Use spellcheck or something, at the least.
  • Edge

I hope you take this into consideration before your continue.

EDIT: WAIT A MINUTE. Missed a couple.

  • Anthro ponies are what the displaced meet
  • Obvious wish-fulfillment

The double duo

Holy dick, really? That's like saying the three person threesome.

I like the idea behind the story story so far since I rather like devil may cry. And to help a bit I've corrected your incorrect use of their, since it popped out to me.

Neo looked back at troy that had a puppy dog look on his face, neo rolled his eyes "Alright what their wearing would get some to stare.

their should be they're or they are

When they got their they were greeted by the man working at the stand, his voice sounding just like the merchant from the game that the two found interesting "Hello stranger, mind looking at my wears?"

their should be there

The merchant looked where neo was near, neo could see a smile under the mans mask "Ah, I see you found one of my newest additions. That their is the devil bringer Nero uses in the game, and before you ask, yes it can be attached to a persons right arm"

their should be there

"That may be true but we don't know where we are or what might be out their" neo said his serious mode turned on.

their should be there

Neo said "Yes we have but this is different, remember we were inside the convection way deep inside the building" troy giggled when neo said deep, he continued "Theirs no way we could be sent to a forest the normal way"

theirs should be there's or there is

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I personally don't know about Nero, but I know that the Dante he made Troy is a Nephilim as his father is still the demon Sparda, but his mother is an angle names Eva.

I'll admit the the grammar of the story could use a little improving, but I like the idea so far. Personally I don't understand people who hate on someones story within the first few chapters. People should be offering constructive criticism like this.

Troy sighed "Finally. I want to see where the hell we are and maybe find a place to eat, a slice pizza sound about good right know"

I think you meant now

"I got one" Dante turned to Nero to hear his plan "Know bare with me here, this might be crazy but I think. We should just punch it like the reasonable people we are" Nero said with a fake serious look on his face.

now, bear with me

Dante rolled his eyes "Yeah ok, I should of seen that one coming. But I get to punch the shield, been wanting to hit something for a while know. Get this boredom out of my system"

now

That's just some, I hope it helps. Looking forward to what comes next.

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I think you have this site confused with hugbo-I mean, Wattpad.

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Don't look at me. I was just naming the cliches.

Huh, aren't you the guy I ripped into a few days ago? Whatever, let's see if you impro-

In San Diego a Comic convection

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Never mind, back to the Neptunia hole. I already know where this is going and it's too late in the day to blow a blood vessel.

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How does that help? All that does is point out what is cliche, but what matters about that? Are you going to call a movie cliche because it has a protagonist that must face some form of challenge as the movie eventually reaches some sort of climax and an ending where a resolution is reached? Not to mention that sometimes these work for the story. Why not give an explanation of why the cliche doesn't work, or why it doesn't fit with the story, or even how it can be altered to work better. All I care about is that people stop acting like dicks to each other and offer something constructive to help.

(also, I also kinda mentioned the hate thing cause I noticed Hamester_Master's comment, that guy is just a ball of hate)

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I've already done a step-by-step walkthrough in the author's previous story, as seen here. True, while the comment may be ripping into the story a bit, it offers constructive criticism that carries over to this story as well.

The reason why I only went so far as to point out cliches this time is because the advice I gave in the previous comment still applies here as well. Namely, don't over/under-describe, try not to misspell obvious words, and keep the plot at the least, moderately believable.]

EDIT: Sorry if I came across as a bit rude.

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Sorry, I didn't read his other story so I didn't know :twilightsheepish:

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It's alright. I have a bit of a tendency to throw around criticism like this, considering how I used to be the editor for a handful of this guy's stories.

Check 'em out, if you want. The up/downvote ratio is basically the sign that I edited for a story. Or rewrote it entirely myself for him.

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Never used it personally, so I don't get what you likely meant as an insult.

9047810
Eh, I just know I get pissed when people leave non-constructive criticism on my stories, though I have also been known to be rather nice to those who leave constructive criticism as I thank them for their time and help.

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By hugbox, I meant that the most obvious/glaring writing errors (their/there, Show Don't Tell, capitalisation, etc) are completely ignored and unwarranted praise is handed to shitty writers. To be fair, that happens here too, but this site does a better job at letting you filter out the fecal matter (as long as you avoid the front page and the Featured Box).

The merchant chuckled, The two looked at him in confusion. The merchant stopped laughing and said "I new you couldn't have that much Money, let me finish Stanger. The necklace cost 150 dollars but I could throw in the sword and pistols for you and drop the price down to 90 dollars seeing you don't have Dante's sword and guns on you"

Ummm I don’t mean to tell you how sales works, but no sane person would sell 3 items for $60 less than just one of said items.
That’s not how bundling works.

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However the merchant is willing to go low as a form of trickery and in order to get the person he wants to displace.

Nice chapter, can't wait to see how everyone reacts to having actual demon slayers in Equestria.

Loved it. New chapters please.

Well it couldn’t get any worse” making the mistake in inflicting karma.

*MOUTH DROPS*

tell me she did not just said that!?

"He beaten four demons with no problems at all. Not to mention the ones that tried to get pass but were easily killed! His strength is greater than any stallion or minitour, the way he fought was strong with no hesitation, like a true strong stallion~"

tsk!


whelp I'm gonnnnaaa gggoooo before i find out if a cambion can handle a alicorn's heat



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Loved the chapter dude, keep up the good work

Do they really haft to change there names

more yes i say more













and you need an editor

This story is great i can't wait for more.:pinkiehappy:

Next chapter is when now? We want to know what comes next.

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Oh did u get a thing saying it was updated cause I did

The pictures you added are broken and not showing up.

*sees the title* QUICK GET THE POPCORN!! AND SOMEONE GO GET SOME LAWN CHAIRS FROM THE MERCHANT!!!

Yo dude I absolutely freaking love this story! I really cant wait for more chapters. Please more whenever you can. I'm curious if the main 6 and the princesses will find out that both of them are demons, and also dantes DT would be a nice bonus. However in the game I actually didn't much care for the DT he had. If you wanted to you could make his devil trigger like the one from DMC4 Dante? Just throwing idea's out there if you want to use it thats up to you :) have a good day and happy slaying!

so are the two going to have herds and cool story :pinkiehappy:

swwwwwwweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeettttttt

yeah

love it do more, more, MORE.

9121303
He's being a grammar Nazi. Just shut up and enjoy the story.

9167831
There's being a grammar Nazi then these's chronic story breaking grammar. A writer can at least make an effort to not have half a dozen mistakes in a single paragraph. Have some pride in your story and proof read, ask the grammar Nazi he'll probably do it for you. Otherwise it's just lazy writing.

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I think the point is just the Merchant trying to sell it at all cost just to send them away ASAP, oherwise there's no story. But yeah this guy should be broke.

Nero had to agree with him. The man can eat and get hungry right after even if it's 6 pizza's he'll still get hungry 5 minutes later and ask for more. Good thing he works out.

Do you mean six slices or six boxes? If we take the average or most commonly consumed pizza size and use a basic cheese pizza as a base start then most places start with a dough ball of 16 to 24 ounces. To that is added about 4 ounces of sauce. Topping it with a couple cups of cheese which is about 8 ounces. Let's figure a 20 ounce dough ball, 4 ounces of sauce, and 8 ounces of cheese, you are talking about a 2 pound pizza. Then multiply by 6 and we get a total of 12 pounds of pizza consumed, but if you want slices then most are cut into 8 slices, it's 4 ounces a slice, or a quarter pound, cut into 12 slices, it's just under 3 ounces a slice.

If Troy eats 6 pizza slices then that's a realistic amount of 18 ounces or 1.5 pounds but if it's whole boxes then it's probably over 12 pounds since most people have toppings on a pizza. Within a one hour time limit, the upper quartile of voracious eaters can probably eat over 6 pounds of food. Averaging out that at least half of the healthy adults in the 18-35 year old range weighing over 100lb can eat over 3 pounds in one sitting without vomiting then Troy eats over 4 times the normal food, but if he's hungry again in 5 minutes then we take 60 minutes divide by 5 you get 12 boxes multiply by 12 we get 144 pounds of food in one hour at a low ball. Even if you low ball it further to 6 slices it's still 1.5lbs roughly every 5 minutes × 12 = 18 lbs of food in an hour meaning 6 times more than average.

Even if Troy works out you would have to jump rope for 30 minutes to burn off one slice of pizza. Can someone check my math?:twilightoops:

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Anyone else a little disturbed about how casual the two main characters are about killing someone they disagree with? I also seems Nero/Neo can't decide if he's the calm voice of reason or really just another jerkass with 14 year syndrome on a power trip.

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