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I am a self proclaimed grimdark and dark fantasy fic writer. You want darkness, death, and despair? You've come to the right place. Also an eternal Twilight Sparkle fan.

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Twilight Sparkle failed her entrance exam, and the consequences were far more deadly than anypony could've predicted.

Where many ponies would see this as a terrible tragedy, a creature only spoken of in the darkest of legends sees the poor filly's fate as an opportunity...

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Pain.

Already off to a good start.

You will be mine. You will stay with me, train under me, learn the darkest and most arcane of the magical arts, and when the time is right... you shall release me from my prison.

I already get the feeling that I want a sequel for this.

"Oh yes, little Twilight," he explained, "you see, I didn't quite save you from death. You very much died in that classroom, and you took a good bit of the ponies with you... including your parents. "

TEAM KILL!

"Rather than let you're prodigious talent for magic go to waste, I... well, I guess you could say I redirected the path your soul took," Grogar stopped a moment before trotting back over to his throne, "that bell around your neck? I'd take real good care of it, girl."

You hinting something? Am I supposed to read something between the lines here? Could you explain?

"That's what's left of you, filly," Grogar said, "I've bound your wayward soul to that bell, and by that bell are you bound to me in turn," he sat back down in his throne and gave the filly an appraising look, "while the bell cannot be destroyed by any mundane means, or most magical means for that matter, it is terribly susceptible to Light Magic."

OH MY CELESTIA! :rainbowlaugh: I WAS JOKING! (I write these as I read, so the joke in the last one was a complete coincidence)

"Shadow World?""

...Do I even have to say it? Or is it obligatory? ..... Fine!

"Child, this place makes Tartarus look like an amusement park," Grogar replied with a snort, "no, Twilight Sparkle, this place is far older, and you'd do well not to take it lightly."

Hmm... older than hell itself... nice! Sounds like a place I would like to work in :pinkiecrazy:

looking a bit further,

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"but I suppose I could indulge your curiosity a bit..."

And our

The filly decided then and there, that if she was going to be bonded to Grogar anyway, she might as well do everything she could to make the ram smile. She'd support him no matter what he intended to do, after all, he had spent so long trapped in this abysmal place.

Anything? :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright: Like kill Celestia?


You know, not many people use Grogar. To be fair, he is and oooold villain, like, I got to know him via this story, (also the only one besides this that I've seen him in) and a lil bit of googling after that. I like this tho, is nice

Edit: Also, let's start a yt thing. FIRST!

Damn, that was quick. I wonder if all of us will do a crossover one day?

Oooooo, I haven't read a Grogar story yet, and I've enjoyed tales of Twilight's corruption before as well.
Definitely following this one! :twilightsmile:
Edit: Oh wait, it's complete.. Dammit I thought there would be more. :facehoof:

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You got me a lil confuused there for a sec xD

Grogar’s definitely gviing off some Sidious vibes here.

Would be interesting to see you continue from here. :twilightsmile:

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Sequel, please!

Oooooh o.o this one is deliciously corruption friendly :3 I could easily see this one continuing while showing Twlight falling further and further while Grogar's heart grows a few sizes xD

Any chance I can humble ask you to maybe write a bit more? I'd love to see your take on this story :3

Everything I could have hoped for and more, I can imagine Grogar as a mix of the old god Hades and Malthael. Dignified, reasonable, but a horrific enemy when crossed.

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I actually imagine him ruthlessly punishing any Minion who dares to spread the unfounded rumor of the Dreaded Dark Lord Grogar reading bedtime stories to an unicorn filly. :twilightsmile:

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Minion opens door to the living quarters to report on the latest terrible happenings, and sees Grogar sitting by her bed with a book and tiny glasses..
:twilightoops: Minion carefully closes the door, and creeps away. He doesn't need that in his unlife.

Like this comment if you want a sequel just as much as I do.

need more i wanna see how celestia reacts to her coming back and releasing grogar

You poor child... so much potential, wasted by your imminent death...

You are now voiced by Orson Welles doing Unicron. I don't care what anyone says, you can't convince me otherwise.

"I am Grogar," the ram exclaimed, "your savior, your master, your tutor, and your father."

And with one introduction, I am in. I am reading this, I am reading the sequel. Because that is how you introduce a being like Grogar!

"Child, this place makes Tartarus look like an amusement park," Grogar replied with a snort, "no, Twilight Sparkle, this place is far older, and you'd do well not to take it lightly."

Oh that is a good fucking line.

Hmm... what say you, filly... do you want me to save you from this agony?

That was either supposed to be "what do you say" or

Very good sir! I look forward to reading the sequel!

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"what say you" is a perfectly correct phrase.

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Honestly, that was supposed to just be a segway into the joke, seems that wasn't clear enough.

This feels familiar. XD

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I bet it does. It's in a similar vein to a certain story of yours I admit, but that's more a product of the concept I think. Some of what I'm doing was inspired by that certain story, but the rest was simply inspired by the whole 'Villain adopts Twilight' thing.

Hell, had you not already had Tirek covered I would've used him, but when it came down to it all I could think of was Discord, and I don't have much confidence in writing Discord as a mentor character.

The idea to use Grogar was actually one of my readers, and in a spontaneous bit of inspiration, this story was born. There maybe similarities, but I hope you can appreciate them as well as the differences should you decide to read the sequel. :pinkiesmile:

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Oh no i love the concept. One reason i enjoy writing born in light so much. The more the merrier.

"Take heed, Twilight Sparkle," Grogar said as he stepped through the doorway and into the hallway outside the room, "what you are about to see may shock and terrify you, but you need not be afraid, for I am the master of this realm—this... Shadow World ."

Let me fix that.

"Take heed, Twilight Sparkle," Grogar said as he stepped through the doorway and into the hallway outside the room began shuffling a deck of cards, "what you are about to see may shock and terrify you, but you need not be afraid, should be afraid, (pulls out duel disk) for I am the master of this realm—this... Shadow World Realm. It's time to duel!"

Much better :D

Hm. Grogar's kinda cool, I guess.

"Rather than let your prodigious talent for magic go to waste, I... well, I guess you could say I redirected the path your soul took," Grogar stopped a moment before trotting back over to his throne, "that bell around your neck? I'd take real good care of it, girl."

What was that thing which bounds the lich soul into the mortal realm what was called? Apothecary ?

Twilight nodded to herself and returned her focus to Grogar as he began to speak, never once noticing the increased glow of the bell around her neck or the odd shine in her eyes.

I guess This Grogar or maybe Basicly Grogar , Princess Nightmare Luna , and Discord , CrisLIS are of the list OF SAVABLE VILIANS ,
Trixie and Sunset shimmer and Starlight glimmer Were saved .

So I hope Grogar wold be nice .

Sombra is Questionable .

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Until the show retcons it Sombra already was redeemed and had a backstory that makes the crystal ponies and their original ruler not seem quite as good or innocent.

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There is still hope ...

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Not certain what you mean by that. Btw part of the reason he hasn't returned yet is that most of the staff including Jim Miller like the his full backstory from the comics (Fiendship is Magic #1) and to a degree his redemption. They tried to pay homage to it with Starlight's backstory but hers was a really weakened and watered down version of his that felt really lacking.

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Ook , Iwould see the fiendship is maic story , But how Grogar said it has some sort of sense as he was the victim so is a
HOPE THAT AS LITTLE AS IT IS EVEN NOT IN THE MAIN UNIVERSE THE ALTERNATE UNIVERSES COULD MAYBE SOMEHOW REASON WITH HIM , UNDERSTANDING HIS VIEW , BECAUSE HE STILL SAID A LOT OF TRUTHS
THE HOPE DIES LAST AND IT HURTS THE MOST WHEN IT IS SHATTERED IN THE HEARTH

Plus that is interested branch , Yes DARK MAGIC AND SOUN MAGIC OIS ESPECIALLY DOUBLE EDGED BLADE SO IT NEEDS EXTREME PRECAUTIONS BUT COULD BE USEFUL .

There was a universe when DARK MAGIC was more open to public universe when princess Luna ruled . in the universe,paralel should exist Good Sombra as well .Somewhee existed ...

Pluus you COULD CHANGE SOMOENE BECOMES FROM UNDERSTANDING WHAT IT THINKS AND WHY IT MAKES WHAT IT DOES

So it sill looks like mussunderstanding and bitter revenge .
And really Twi having to .... do that again to not lose herself awareness could this be fixed because... draining souls it is just ... patching filling a leak .

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......I think you went off on a tangent somewhere. I was stating the example of canon Sombra and why I figured he'd be redeemable in this story (albeit through different events) if the author's main change is modern events and things that weren't brought up in canon along with how they affect the characters. Also whatever you're trying to convey is being partially lost due to really bad English and full caps lock doesn't help if you're trying be taken seriously in a discussion.

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