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like a good meal, every sentence was savored. thanks for the chapter Arelak!
It is unfortunate that the antagonistic faction had to cause trouble like this, the canal project now has 1 less pair of hands/hooves to work on it and we don't know the extent of Veriks wounds.
Asha is more than enough wife for one man
Yay! Great chapter.
I definitely got the same vibes reading this fight like watching a fist fight from “The Punisher”.
To quote a very famous Lemur...
Today.... Today is a good day
Great chapter. Can't wait so see what happens next.
I eat through these chapters too quickly :c they're too good
Marriage, the caveman style.
I enjoyed the fight scene a lot and could literaly see it as i read.
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Glad you are enjoying my descriptions!
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I can only hope the future chapters keep your attention.
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Sometimes going savage is the best was to solve a problem.
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oh, you'll get no complaint from me.
Ungga think rock good weapon,but big stick better
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Bunga like rock, no one suspect rock till Bunga beat them with it.
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Well I hope my writing falls into that first category and not the later, thank you for the comment!
Amazing chapters so far can’t wait to see even more! Keep up the awesome work!
This fight reminds me the first time I saw someone playing Gorn. Now if only you could rip someone's throught out with your teeth in that game it'd come full circle. Anyway, I'm loving the story, I'm so happy I stubbled apons this so long ago. Even more so now that I got much, MUCH more than I wad expecting. Most stories like this blaze through with pacing but yours works perfictly, the build up to when he finnally starts taking Zebrica will be so worth the wait. Good luck man, and I hope that there will be more soon.
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I like my Russian/Eastern European Encyclopedia Britannica length novels.
Leading up to the fight, knowing Verik could use any weapon and no limits, I was hoping that the basket of weapons was full of venomous snakes.
'Look at that crazy fool! Hucking snakes at his enemy! He's insane!'
Oh well, the stories we see in our head are always funnier than the ones we read on paper.
To increase the length of storage on his meat, I'd recommend Verik ask Nuru for anything he could use to make vinegar. A few weeks of meat sitting in a jar of vinegar and salt will cure it, and keep the bacteria away.
Carrots, mustard greens, cabbage, radishes, and vinegar is the foundation for a basic kimchi as well. However, he'd need to be aware of all the gasses that build up while the lid is sealed, especially in hot environments. A sealed jar of hot kimchi is like a shaken up bottle of champagne by then.
I enjoyed the fight, but while the neck-snap at the end put a stop to it right quick, I'm actually surprised you wrote your character fighting like a neanderthal. With Verik not putting put up more of a formal protest to the fight beforehand, nor using the four days before hand to come up with a better strategy than fighting dirty to survive. The way you've written shows to the rest of the tribe and the faction that hates him, that he can be brought down to their level, but maybe next time, he wont be so lucky, especially if they use his strategy against him.
If any of the zebra's who hate him manage to scrape two brain cells together to spark an idea, Verik would be dead long before he ever realizes it.
He may have won the fight, but he only opened himself up to an endless war against a faction with no clear defined leader.
We aren't even given the fool's name, so other people reading my comment can also make the same assumption that there are more zebra's with the intent to kill him.
Verik needs to fight to win all fights, not just to survive another day.
As brutal as biting into someone during a fight is, it wont send your enemies running in fear, it'll teach them to avoid his teeth, or to muzzle him like a dog.
I say, not savage enough.
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Not everyone knows how to make vinegar and Verik is most certainly not one of them, he does on the other hand understand smoking, drying and salting meat. As for throwing snakes, only an idiot would do that. First off you risk getting bitten and the gathered crowd risks their own deaths whereas a rock can be avoided or be far less than fatal when struck, it also requires an understanding of which snakes to use. If you went into a duel and started throwing snakes around the odds are good you would be chased out of town and left to die in the wilds, it is a very bad idea over all.
Edit: There is a food shortage, why would anyone waste precious food to make vinegar? Better to dry it out or as the locals do: hand to mouth. This not the 1st world, this is the 9th world with widespread famine.
Most of the time in life you will find that when it comes to law you have little to no choice in the matter, indeed you can challenge something but there is always repercussions. The duel was legally binding and he was given one of two choices and that was the end of the matter. You are looking at things from a 21st century perspective where you can try to argue your way out of a problem but if you go back to the dark ages... Well good look to you while they prepare the stake and fodder outside for your burning, it is a harsh and cruel world sometimes which means biting the bullet.
A key factor you forgot about the fight is he understands they are not predators but can be quite violent. Indeed most people when confronted by a horrific act and the question of "does anyone else want to step forward?" Will automatically buckle on the spot or run like hell despite the bluster people spout off. He played on that. True, he did not let his opponent suffer, but how they died was a statement as well. As you rightly pointed out he fought like a caveman and for that it caused a lot of hesitation in others minds. Not just the simple fact he killed their "champion" but that he was literally stoned to death gives pause. Do not forget he went into that ring knowing his opponent was a superior trained fighter than he was and for it took quite a few lumps.
Too many seem to think combat is some fantasy world game where it ends cleanly, if you ever get into a real scrap its every man for himself and anything goes. I display that reality here, you win however you have to win because if you do not there is only one response: death. Allow me to assure you that people get damned savage when the writing is on the wall and if you think this "lowers him to their level" then okay, but he won the fight and survived. The first rule of warfare is there is not much point if you fail to survive the battle so you can keep killing. Medieval warfare was brutal and violent to say nothing of its savagery.
Endless warfare... Who knows, keep reading and find out but not everyone is going to like you and thats just a fact of life. Quite a few out there would like nothing more than to gut you like a fish right now or burn you alive, just pray you never meet them or have a gun if you do. No amount of talking is ever going to solve the problem of someone who wants you dead, has the means, knows the law and also just where to sucker punch you into causing the fight. Now step into the world of politics and not just petty feuds... You will have more enemies than you know what to do with, now step into a 3rd world country where its normal to kill someone over that belief. Talk all you want but you have a war on your hands.
If you want to win a war you need to survive long enough to win it. For me, I will be as damned dirty as I have to be in order to whittle my enemy down till I can finish them off. Is war pretty? Hell no, its utterly savage and bloody only more so when you have swords, spears, bows and so on instead of guns which are "generally" more "quick and clean." Should you ever expect to win the war it means taking some licks here and there along the line, especially those you never intended to take.
Many a time in history have people tried to muzzle someone who was dead set on what they wanted to do, sometimes they won, other times they were torn to bloody ribbons in the process. Study how someone fights all you want but just remember that the overwhelming masses on the planet cant even manage to knock two brain cells together. Look at the horrible mess the world is and realize you can not make a mess of things without helping it along or as George Carlin basically said: People are idiots, then realize half of them are even dumber than that.
If people in general were so noble and brave you would not have all the tyrants, dictators, genocidal maniacs, Pol-Pots, Mao's, Lenin, Stalin, crusades, jihads, refugees, cesspits and bombed out hell holes around the planet. Fact remains most are spineless cowards when confronted with a bulldog that bares its fangs and tears at them, a fact Verik knew and played on. Most pretend to be brave but the telling sign is when the other guy has the gun and you dont. Many a time have well trained armies with professional soldiers who were "brave" broke and ran like frightened rabbits when an enemy stepped up to the plate and rattled their teeth.
Anyone can be brave but never forget that the reverse is also true, anyone can be a coward.
I'm still perplexed of who some hate Verik, and if it's because he didn't accept Tendaji's agreement to become part of the tribe that still isn't enough to hate his guts. I mean he brought a lot of good since his arrival - with some bad luck - but still, he plans to help with their food problem so I don't see a lot of reason to hate, maybe mistrust but hate is another thing entirely... Really confusing about this whole thing but what you gonna do, haters gonna be haters
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Therein lies the great rub: historically those who have tried to help are labeled monsters and the enemy for absolutely no reason. Take the American Revolution for example, over 90% were dead set against the revolutionaries and called them traitors until they won; overnight they become heroes, hooray! Some are going to hate you no matter what it is you do and even saving their worthless hides will not change that fact. Then again, do you want to save those who are against you anyway? Or just let them... Slip off the cliff...
Also is a pretty good way to get away with murder or as a way to commit suicide
I mean there is a reason that it was outlawed