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Was glad to see this one update; world building is always good. :3
Still legitimately curious how it goes from the current state of affairs to what we saw in the first chapter... well done on that by the way. Seldom does knowing the general outcome tether me to a story this hard.
Edit: Just realized I didn't really comment on the chapter so much as in general. It's a bit of a slow/less interesting chapter but still important to help set the stage so to speak. :3
Ah yes, in my old writing days we called chapters like these time turner's, their were two kind's.
1. A clock. is one that shows the gears turning from one perspective to the other.
2. A engine. is one that shows the gears turning but you don't see it you only see the motion's it causes.
Most beginner's will choose a engine as it's more simpler and easier to write, but some choose to do a engine because it's in their style, while others simply do a clock because it's great for story-telling something hard to find on this site. What I'm getting at is is that this is great story-telling and you are sparing no expense or laziness in writing a well though-out story.
Enjoying the ever-loving-fuck out of this chapter, it's amusing to see them running around as the gears turn some forcing them other's hoping to stop them, and few just accepting the turn's due to how many times it's happened. -Fenrir
Hopefully we're getting a look at some future allies
This was a damn good story so far an can’t wait to see him become the warlord an when the shipping starts! Hope to see more real soon!
So expansion and alliances made between Ilah and Zwali - possible invasion? - while Fareed is planning to go to war with a city called Salai; I'm thinking that Nyah and Ismat might meet Verik in the future, and considering how both are thinking... that meeting will be an interesting one