You're a good writer.

It always gets worse before it gets better. This is one of the greatest stories I've ever read.

A very interesting beginning!

very very nice start

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Not everyone in the world has bonds that tie them to somewhere or something, others "do" but... It is up for debate, they could just as easily stay as run the first chance they are given. The question remains: Is the bond strong enough. I also do not want to just give everything about the characters away from the start either like most stories do: they cry, whine, miss everything, family, friends, etc. This story is taking a different approach in that some people really just want to get away because they have had enough, but be careful of what you wish for!

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Thank you for the compliment!

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We shall see, something has to make him snap and become the warlord.

hope to see more chapters soon.

The compliment made her stop with a spoon halfway to her mouth, raising her eyes to him as he kept eating she smiled before continuing to eat.

This should read, "...as he kept eating. She smiled before..." It's a run-on sentence as it is now.

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Fixed, thank you for pointing that out!

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You're welcome! Happy to help!

can't wait to see more, i hope the warriors are wise enough to clue in that having a higher order omnivore on their side might be a boon in threat detection. (senses are generally better turned)

A very intriguing start for a story. Getting an Avatar 2009 vibe (chuckles).

"Different" is the word to describe your premise. Yet a question does come into play, how much is OC and/or self insert?

A few spelling errors. Otherwise very tightly knit.

Also, where exactly are we on the anthro chart?
I get the sense that it's a 3 with human height/proportions. (Just want confirmation even after checking your images on FA)
Other sub-species / races around (presume they will be introduced later)?

We shall see, something has to make him snap and become the warlord.

Guess I'll be staying out of the comment section lol. I already suspected, but I did not want confirmation about this (kind of like the 3rd trailer for most movie block busters).

Best of luck, stay healthy, and update soon!

-Sky66

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#3. As for other races... Keep reading, hints are dropped.

I apologize if this is unhelpful, but I have seen that most of the sentences in this story lack commas, creating run-ons that are hard to read.

I enjoy the concept of this story, but reading it can be confusing when one actions carries on to the next with no proper punctuation to it.

well at least he isn't a pussy

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Dosent help with constang changing viewpoints and moments ealier either

this is my third favorite story and I didn't think I would like it but I kept it in my favorite just in case

"Because Asha... Despite all your problems and granted I have only been here one... Two days? Two days and I can say that there is a great deal of honesty about your problems by comparison and also there were places I could go back on that world which had all these problems and more, they were also far more dangerous than this."

"Was your whole world like that?"

"No, but it lacked honesty and wonder after a time of studying it, your world has many wonders, like you."

"Me?"

"Yes, a walking, talking zebra. One that walks on two legs, has arms, thinks for herself, has a language, dresses, culture... Earth lost its mystery to me, it became... Normal. Mundane. Boring... You are anything but."

"You are very strange to find this place so interesting and wonderful."

"Some would probably break down sobbing or run away screaming at having this happen to them but I will not." Verik looked down at her. "Its not ever day you get to explore a new world and meet interesting new people."

Oh god. Please tell me he's not like this the whole story.