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not sure if i like the whole telling how it will end Thing in the proloque it is a big turnoff
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Personally I think it's a good story to see him rise from nothing, even if we do know the end of the road we still get to experience the journey there.
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it also ruins all possible Suspense and so on if you know the ending already
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True, I suppose. Guess that's another matter of opinion more than anything else.
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thats why for example i enjoy game of thrones so much even tho i am really good at guessing and stuff like that theres Always something that Comes straight out of left field
I am thoroughly enjoying this. I like nation building stories (Even though this is more like nation re-building) There's one thing that gets to me though and that's that i read it to quickly and now must wait for updates Keep up the good work can't wait to see more chapters.
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See below
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The ending at the beginning is a story telling method I learned via Leslie Marmon Silko, a Laguna indian. They tell the ending first then leave you wondering how things actually got from A to Z as the story then jumps back to where it all started. The Loyal worker has it right: it is about experiencing the journey even if you already know the ending because no one knows exactly HOW things wound up there.
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well everyone has their own preferences i personally prefer being surprised and gut punched by stories,movies,books,Shows and what else is out thhere
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For me it is not preference but my ongoing literary experiments, this merely being one more of them, underworld was the previous attempt.
I am both impressed and amazed at the fact you are purposely using a character's skill in grammar in this story as part of their character, though it must be challenging to do that sometimes, right?
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Most gut punches and surprises in stories come from events along the way not the finale of the conclusion. All the prologue gives us is the some of the repercussions of his actions. Given the title his rise to power isn't a spoiler. Him fixing or playing a part in fixing/helping in the recovery of a city is sorta par the course for this type of story as well. Most of the gut punches come from seeing what happens to others around him and the major powers of the land and how they effect him. The prologue applies a classic and sometimes commonly used tool of storytelling that makes the story seem more like the memoirs of those involved. In fact the prologue could be considered an homage to Robert E Howard's first novel with Conan as it starts of in a very similar setting and scenario. The biggest difference being that old man King Conan fights off an assassin that if I remember correctly was some mystical demon because Conan winds up becoming the main enemy of dark gods and their worshippers. The stories of Conan the Barbarian are about how he gets to that point. A prologue is usually meant to either set the tone or show you where the story is going and this one does it perfectly. By only showing us the main protagonist and a small moment of his thoughts towards his environment we know where the story will be going and nothing else. More often than not when reading stories like most readers will forget the prologue due to the rest of the story which is commonly intentional. I know a movie that made great uses of this as well which is an amazing feat in and of itself considering it made audiences forget about it in two hours Fallen, "I wanna tell you about the time I almost died"
Verik is super cringe.
"Plenty of nations have them outright but under different names, where I came from though almost everyone but the richest were wage slaves."
The way he tries to sound "wise" while saying this crap is annoying.
He sounds like a small bitter child throwing a tantrum because earth wasn't a perfect utopia.
Trying to compare a world where rape, murder, corruption, greed and thief is the norm and trying to argument that it is better because the scum of that world is straightforward is idiotic.
Sounds like a kid that discovered that the world isn't always fair, so he needs to tell everyone that "he knows" to aparear more mature.
He is a psychopath and megalomaniac that couldn't live his fantasy on earth because it wasn't a hell hole, so he loves this piece of hell because no one can held him accountable.