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Amethyst_Dawn


A good story displays a moral, the best ones attach you to the characters who display them. I do neither... or both?

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Trixie notices that she really, really, really, really really wants to see her friends kiss. There's nothing wrong with that, right?

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... right?


Special thanks to Tranquil Serenity for editing input.

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I like this concept. Though I was expecting it to be partially because of Trixie having an unrecognized crush on Starlight.

So pretty sure Twilight and Trixie are the only ones living in the castle who doesn't have a significant other?

Aww, that's it? I want to see how the date goes.

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Eh, maybe she does. None of my business. :moustache:

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What about Spike?

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Trixie only starts giggling when I ask about that part, so I assume it went well.

Trixie felt her grin grow to enormous proportions as she waggled her eyebrow at Starlight, who quickly put a good to her own face.

Wut?

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And the moral of the story is to always, always proofread. Even better, have someone else proofread it, because you become blind to your own shortcomings very easily.

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It actually was proofread, but this isn't the first time my phone messed up something during copy-paste. :rainbowlaugh:

The story's actually kind of cute, just a little too short and underdeveloped. I'd drop that occasional foray into first-person narration, if only because it seems a bit inconsistent and makes you question just who the narrator is supposed to be.

Also, you tend toward run-on and comma-spliced sentences, which can make your descriptions read a bit clunky. Good effort with the characterization, though.

I NEED THIS IN MY LIFE.

So, I was wondering: did you compose this mostly on your phone? Because I couldn't imagine writing anything of any length without a full computer and keyboard.

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Doing my best, Sums. :ajsmug:

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Yup, been writing on my phone for the past few months. :twilightsmile:
It's agonizingly annoying, yes, but it's all I can do for now.

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Spike has a lot of fillies in his room.

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You don't know which ones.

This was a really fun story. I wouldn't mind seeing how that date goes...

THIS IS A MASTERPIECE! TRIXIE IS BEST SHIPPER!!! :trixieshiftright:

YES.

Trixie is best shipper, and Starburst is best ship.

Eat your heart out, script writers.

I would be super keen to see how the date goes...

What? That’s the end of it? Come one man I along with other people want to see how the date goes.

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What can I say? I love a good cliffhanger. :trixieshiftright:

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Well if thats what you're going for, then you succeeded brilliantly.

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But I want to see this continue on! :raritydespair:

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Thank you. :twilightsmile:

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Sometimes, my friend, a question is best left unresolved. :trollestia:

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But Woona wants more.
i.imgur.com/qnbrF_d.jpg?maxwidth=640&shape=thumb&fidelity=medium

And you can’t say no to a face like that can you?

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You'd be surprised what I can say "no" to. :trixieshiftright:

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I give up! There's no point in this when Woona doesn't work.

MAKE A PART 2 PLEASE! SOOOO GUD

Twilight collabing with Trixie?! :pinkiegasp: The pigs are flying! :rainbowlaugh:

Regardless of the utterly horrendous attempt at a one-liner-- such an inferior flirt hat Trixie knew even she could top if she wanted to --Starlight burst into laughter and placed a hoof on the wizard's shoulder to balance herself as her head leaned forward.

Is it supposed to be ‘that ’ or ‘hat’? Just want to make sure weather or not if that’s a typo.

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Did not see that coming.

Now that was the best shipping outcome I have ever read.

Well that escalated quickly and in a very unexpected way.

Hah! I knew you couldn’t resist that adorable face of Woona!

:rainbowderp: Well, that happened.

Um. ok. Seems cute.

Just kind of put off by the fact that this is featured in the "Trilight" group... and the fact that some people are saying that Trixie (female) has a crush on Starlight (female)... Hopefully they meant Sunburst...?

:unsuresweetie:

(Please PM me. I'm feeling confused and I'm worried about what I do understand (mainly in the comments))

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I have absolutely no idea why it's in that group. People will do what they want, I suppose. :facehoof:

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Ok. Thanks.

Sorry to bother you :ajsleepy:

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It's no bother, thank you for the heads-up!
Hopefully I can get this cleared up with said group soon. :twilightsmile:

Best Ending Eva!!!! I think there's a Trixie shipper inside all of us:trollestia:

making the rumblies in her stomach

The kind that only hands can satisfy?

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I did, but that's only because I like the series.

I haven’t even read this yet but I already approve

Trixie is best wing pony

yes Trixie pls be our starburst shipping mascot

I'm surprised that it wasn't Candace doing here.

YES! LOL!! MAGNIFICENT ENDING!!! :pinkiegasp: :rainbowlaugh: :yay:
I always enjoy a good twist, and this was perfect! Thank You!

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