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XenoPony


Hi, name's XenoPony. I'm an avid pony writer and fan fiction author with a wide range of stories.

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One evening on the eve of the Grand Galloping Gala, Starlight Glimmer can think of only one pony she wants to be her plus one, her best friend Trixie. Seeing no other alternative but to face her fears and ask Trixie out herself, Starlight pays the show mare a visit. The discussion that ensues however, is far from what Starlight was expecting. She just can't understand how Trixie is only a size Ursa Minor.

Edited by: Flutterstrucked, lunargaurd4ever and LoneUnicornWriter.

Featured: 11/4/2016

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Comments ( 46 )

Aww, cute and funny as Hell. I'm not normally a fan of this pairing, as I just see them as friends, but you made them work well here!

YAAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

This story is the perfect combination of adorable and ridiculous :heart:

I.. I can't stop laughing... I got to the part about the plot and... I just... *dies from laughter*

This story was very engaging very well told and very well written there NEEDS to be at least two sequels to it. Very well made and worth reading I loved every bit of it. :twilightsmile:

That was pretty adorable. Have a like!

7693267 Come on, clearly three sequels would be far better!

7693414 I thought trying to get three would sound a bit pushy so I toned it down to two but yes three does sound good as well.

Your story hit me halfway through, even though I was already gone on the cover page. Trix x Glimmie were always on my mind, but I never imagined such a warm story to be possible!

Though... just two? Is Celestia really trying to make fillies or something?

I think I have to go through a second time and reacquire my soul; poor thing must have flew into the sun. :raritystarry:

Yes, yes, fuel my StarTrix ship love...

What would happen if Starlight and Trixie each tell one side of the story of their unrelenting passion to the rest of the Mane 6 and Spike after getting caught?

Oh fine, I'll read it to figure out the play on words or whatever the description teases at.

This is an excellent ship: stout, seaworthy, with tall masts, and a full, flowing mainsail. May she ride above the waves, up and down, up and down, up and down, cresting each wave in earnest, time and again, her generous bow slicing the sky blue waters in twain, until she reaches the safe enclosure of port, and unloads her precious cargo.

Seamen.

the orange hue of twilight

TwiJack confirmed! :pinkiehappy: Now onto the story!

7695050 That comment made me want to go look for a YouTube bleach account and ask them to kill me. I had no trouble finding one because they are everywhere. The question is... should I do it? Is it really worth living on like this?

Hell no; bottoms up!

7695509 - Embrace the madness. It will be your downfall, but also your oeuvre.

I'll preface this by saying I'm not a huge fan of the "misunderstanding" story. Where the vast majority of the content is based on two people talking about two totally different things and getting confused/embarrassed/angry about something that literally two words of clarification on either party's side would fix.

That said, it was an interesting read. I like the stuttering, blushing version of Starlight, and the humble version of Trixie that goes right back to full stage confidence when she starts putting the moves on Starlight. Excellent characterization for such a short fic.

One thing I think you could work on is your little bit of Lavender Unicorn Syndrome, or in this case Lilac Unicorn. Remember, it's nice to break up referencing a character the same way over and over again, but if you just end up doing it with the same alternate descriptor, it's usually better to just stick with the character's name anyway. But there are plenty of ways to make a descriptive reference to Starlight: lilac unicorn, pinkish pony, Twilight's student, student of friendship, recently reformed mare; in the context of this fic you could have gone with the shy mare, the nervous pony, the conflicted pony, the smitten pony etc.

Just something to think about next time.

Again, I did enjoy the fic, thanks for writing it!

7695887 Thanks for the advice, it's always helpful and appreciated.:yay: Took it to heart and even made a few changes to the story.:twilightsmile:

I don't like it.




I LOVE IT :pinkiehappy:

7695050 innuendo stronk my friend.

Beautiful work!

"What! Trixie I thought you were talking about your butt, not the Everfree forest!" Starlight finally cried a loud, pent up nerves and confusion exploding forth as the mental dam shattered.

Hahahaha! Oh, this was a funny story! Well written, very funny, and just plain enjoyable.

7697850 Oh man, good thing they weren't talking about a volcano! That would have been even more awkward, but even funnier!

This was a wonderful story :twilightsmile: I really liked how you characterized both Starlight and Trixie :raritystarry: Very cute it was a wonderful one shot :twilightsmile: I would love to see a sequel to it or even a longer version of those two getting together. :twilightblush:

Classic trope of total miscommunication and I am loving every bit of it!!! :rainbowlaugh:

7698925 Yeah. That would have been so funny.

Not a bad story here overall. You did the ship well, and I like Trixie once she'd wised up to it.

The only criticism I might level at it is pacing. The audience, almost by default in cases like this, is in on the gag and waiting for the reveal at the end. Thus keeping things flowing quickly, and ideally with escalating jokes, is the best way to handle it. This suffered from a little too much introspection on Starlight's part I felt, which kept bogging down the forward progress.

It was good otherwise and a pleasant read overall. Hope for the best on your next piece.

Good stuff :pinkiesmile:

7697830 That line makes me think there should be a clop sequel to this.:raritywink:

7754719 That would be very entertaining. Now I want to see that!

7754958 I want to see that too!:yay:

7755032 I hope this guy writes one!

So, will there be a sequel?

7952151 Possibly, but it's not on the top of me to-do list right now, sorry.

I got a good laugh out of this story. Really good.

"What! Trixie I thought you were talking about your butt, not the Everfree forest!" Starlight finally cried a loud, pent up nerves and confusion exploding forth as the mental dam shattered.

There's something you we all hear everyday. Just yesterday, I was talking about why the sky is blue, and was asked "when you say 'sky', are you referring to your butt?"🤣

PS: That didn't really happen. I was being sarcastic.

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

"What! Trixie I thought you were talking about your butt, not the Everfree forest!" Starlight finally cried a loud, pent up nerves and confusion exploding forth as the mental dam shattered.

aaaaaand I absolutely lost it then... so funny.
The build up was a mix of "how is she not getting that its a actual URSA we are talking about" and LOLOLOL

Great story. Epic work. Not laughed that hard in a while.
Best Trixie/Starlight story Ive read thus far.

Ye gods, did I ever get a good laugh out of this. Ah, I needed that.

This was very entertaining! I liked it so much i drew something for it! https://bronybehindthedoor.deviantart.com/art/Size-Ursa-Minor-723877222

8650762 Awww, that's awesome:rainbowdetermined2:, thanks!:twilightsmile: I'm glad you liked it so much that picture is really funny and cute!:yay:

Loved this story! Well written and I can really get behind this pairing, good job! :twilightsmile:

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