This story is a sequel to Preening Your Princess
Over a year has passed since Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash became loving marefriends and neither one of them could be happier with their relationship. One day; after a long week of work, Rainbow comes home and wants nothing but to sit back and relax before the weekend. Twilight however, has a plan to surprise her marefriend with something she knows they'll both enjoy, and after weeks of planning and research on the subject, what could go wrong?
Reading Preening Your Princess is not required to enjoy this story.
Sex tag for minor references and mentions, not anything too graphic.
Edited by: Infinite Affection and lunargaurd4ever.
Chapters (1)
Where's the Latex exactly? Someone just posted it in the group. I read the whole thing, unless I missed something?
7551210 the out fit is probably latex
7551210 It's probably a reference to the Wonderbolt outfit, they're latex arent't they?
I was thinking maybe wool or something, though that would be itchy...
Okay, how did I miss this?
It's cute, sweet and yet funny all at the same time!
This was wonderful. It was also my 100th MLP:FiM fanfic. I can't think of a better way of celebrating than with this cute little fic. Thank you for writing & sharing it.
7551406 Most flight suits are made out of spun aramid. Aramid is a synthetic fiber that is lightweight and fire-resistant. Latex is a poor option for a flight suit as the material doesn't breath. It's actually a very bad idea to wear a full latex outfit for too long.
7857638 Thank you, and congratulations on your 100th story.
7859543 You're welcome! Thank you as well. ^_^
Part two of the series, another response I guess.
In terms of story, this one was better. We got yet another embarrassing moment between lovers. They talk it over, and that conversation reveals to us more about the two and how they connect. Unlike the prequel, this one felt more satisfying. Such is the power of being about twice as long. That extra wordcount goes into more time giving us details, more time letting us hang out with the story and follow along with the goings on.
Much like the prequel, we have Rainbow Dash acting as the voice of reason to Twilight's anxiety. As the two stories are linked in continuity, I have to question why they're separate stories at all, honestly. Regardless of whether separate stories or sequel, they cover the same theme pretty closely, and feel like the same pair of characters. Only this time we get enough time with them for that to be apparent, unlike in Preening.
As with Preening though, this was a scene in a larger story. It was a better crafted scene, but still light on actual story. The "conflict" is quickly revealed and resolved, and we're out of the story due to brevity before it has time to really matter.
My reaction is mostly the same as before. Take what you're doing, and keep going. Do more of what it is you tried to do. This time it felt a little more confident, but still not really enough. You mention things like Rainbow Dash enjoying some eyecandy in the showers back with the team. You tell us how she resists that temptation, and remains loyal to Twilight. There is some conflict you could have put into this larger story. You could take this whole story, Preening, and Probably the sequal, Satisfying, and made them into chapters of a story. Then flesh that story out with stuff like a shower scene where Dash is tempted. Maybe even have her receive flirtations from Fleetfoot. Maybe she would enviously watch her and Blaze enjoying a shoulder massage in the locker room and wish Twi were there to give her one. Making Fleetfoot's flirty offer all the more tempting.
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Then when we got to this scene (your current story), not only would we resolve Twilight's anxiety, we'd also get to see more resolve from Rainbow Dash, and why she stays loyal to Twilight. Thus, a more satisfying story.
Instead, you're giving us brief little snippets, then yanking us out of this "story" to interact with Fimfic's site mechanics to go on to the next "story." If they were just chapters in a more fleshed out single fic, we'd be just clicking "next chapter" to go to the next scene/chapter, and have a more enjoyable experience in total.
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10/10 Twidash. 'Twas really cute.