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Jade Dawn


I have only one request: COMMENTS!

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Once upon a time, 17-year old Eric Colby was just your average high school senior. His father worked for TechnoCorp Enterprises, the world's most prosperous science and technology corporation, and Eric himself was doing pretty well in school, for the most part.

But one night, everything changed.

After a series of unexpected events, Eric is suddenly transported into Equestria and mutated into a unicorn by a mysterious genetic sample. Discovered by Twilight Sparkle and her friends, Eric struggles to adapt to his new form, while also trying to uncover a plot that could destroy both humans and ponies alike, and put the whole Universe in danger...

Takes place a short time after the movie, and is canon up to that point. The events of Equestria Girls did not happen during this timeline.

Rated Teen and or some frightening scenes and/or concepts, especially for some moments during the later phases of the story. Feel free to interpret their severity for yourselves. Comments, opinions, and likes are very much appreciated!


(Cover art is a composite image made of a modified Mane Six vector by shadowhillhcr, art of Equestria from orbit by alterhouse, and a vector of my OC Jade Dawn that was modified from an adult Button Mash drawing, author unknown.)

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 53 )

I enjoyed your story, bro. Keep up the good work and I'm sure you'll go far.

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Thanks. It means a lot to hear something like that. :)

I'm impressed of this story please continue with this one.

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Thanks! I'll definitely be working on this one some more, although I can't really promise a consistent update schedule. They'll come when I manage to finish a chapter, but they will come.

Thanks for the support and the comment!

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At this point, I don't know. I based a lot of Eric's personality and mindset off of myself, so I might put in a couple of brief mentions about it at some point in the story. It won't be a major factor though. I mean, when you've been hurled halfway across the galaxy and genetically transmogrified into a unicorn pony, you're kind of gonna have bigger things to worry about. :)

nice story so far I will be looking forward to see what will happen next to this story. So far I think your are setting up for an interesting epic story by the tone of it. I hope you keep on writing. Good luck:raritywink:

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Thanks for the support! I'm working on the next chapter right now, and I hope to have it out soon.

If you're looking for some more of my work to hold you over until then, I've got another HiE story here.

You have set up an interesting start for a story often told. But I am I interested to see where you will take this. My advice, put some chapters out there, gain some momentum, and see where it leads.

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Thank you for the support! I really appreciate it, and I hope to have the next chapter out in the coming days, if schoolwork doesn't bog me down.

By the way, if you'd like to see more of my work, check out my other fanfic, Nightmare Moon is Coming to Town. I actually wrote it during a period of Writer's Block while writing this story, and I'm pretty happy with the results.

Again, thank you for the support, and I hope to have more coming soon.

Interesting chapter, it's been a while sense I saw a good HiE that is graving my attention. I will be looking forward to the next chapter. Good luck on your goals.

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Thanks for the comments (and the memes), everyone! I'm glad to see that people are liking the story so far.

I don't know when I'll begin work on the next chapter. Hopefully very, very soon. But in the meantime, I'll let you in on a little secret: we'll get to meet our main character in the next chapter.

Again, thanks for all the support thus far! :)

Well, congratulations on getting the next chapter up and the wait was worth it, so thank you also for at least coming back to this and continuing your story. Here's SuRie with an inspirational song to keep you going through hard times!

Alright. You got a good start here. Keep it going!

Sounds like this pony was abducted by aliens! That's the most possible explanation there is to explain what happened to Coco the question is who took her and why?

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Well, I'm glad to see that I've interested more people. I hope you'll stick around for the rest of the ride. :)

The pony parts where good!

The human stuff was a bit dry. Necessary for character building perhaps but it does slow things down.

Keep thing rolling! Moar

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Yeah, I figured the human stuff might come across as that. But there's a reason for all of that.

I bet Earth and Equestria are about to face an alien invasion soon and two worlds have to unite to survive! By the way when's chapter 2 of Robotnik in Equestria is gonna be up? :rainbowhuh:

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I've already started working on it, but it's kind of an on-and-off thing at the moment. Don't worry, though. I'll get around to it probably sooner than later, seeing as I've already put up the next chapter for this story.

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K. By the way nicely done on this chapter I hope your character fights extraterrestrials from space with Tempest and the Mane 6! I wished you added the Jason Griniff era Sonic The Hedgehog in this story and then they will have a top priority mission to find the Chaos Emeralds and stop this mysterious evil force and stop Eggman's newest scheme for World Domination again. At the last Chapter Eggman ends up back on Möbius with his assistants and yells, "I HATE TEENAGERS, I HATE PONIES, I HATE FRIENDSHIP, AND ESPECIALLY I HATE THAT BLUE HEDGEHOG!!!!"

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Thanks for the comment! :)

By the way, did you get the references I mentioned?

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TechnoCorp

Is that a different version of Oscorp?

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No, the name resemblance is purely coincidental. Actually, the company name comes from a Lion King fanfic idea I once had, but ended up not writing.

I shall be tracking this. Looks pretty interesting! :rainbowdetermined2:

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By the way, I'll give you a hint about at least one of the references I've put in. Take another look at Megan's description, read a little about G1, and you'll get the idea. :)

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By the way, what parts did you find interesting? You know, stuff you liked, stuff you disliked, stuff that you thought could be improved upon, theories, that kind of thing?

I'm just trying to gather feedback for future reference.

Hmm, from the get go, is this story available outside of the mlp fandom? I ask because the franchise info and the disclaimer. :pinkiesmile:

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No. I just put the copyright stuff in there just in case. You never know how fan-work regulations might change.

Can’t say I’ve seen many behind the curtains events of someone getting displaced. A lot of the fics I’ve seen it just boom happens. Refreshing.

A magical mystery and even Twilight is stumped! Dun dun duuuuuuuun!

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xD

By the way, if you want to see some more of my work, I have a short story involving Nightmare Moon here. Just click the link.

You now have my complete interest, even though I’m mostly here for the pony aspect. :eeyup:

When's chapter 3? I wonder what happens next?

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I'll get to it eventually. There are a few other projects that I'm attending to at the moment. That, and I've got a college prep course and a part-time job now, so my schedule isn't quite as free as it used to be.

But don't worry; I'll get there. I'm not gonna leave my fanfiction magnum opus uncompleted and leave my supporters hanging. :)

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