Eternal Struggle
“…we could be stuck doing this for all eternity!” Twilight said.
“That's fine with me!” Starlight responded.
Starlight never thought that Twilight was actually being serious.
Starlight rushed towards the nearest restaurant. She needed some food to steal. Twilight wasn't cutting her any slack. She was so hungry she could have eaten Rainbow Dash to prevent the Rainboom.
She wasn't serious, of course. Starlight had standards. Nopony in their right mind would ever do a thing like that, no matter how hungry they were. She would sooner have starved to death.
Starlight charged up her horn and blasted a hole through the window of Muffin Stop, jumping through and running to the back. Ponies she didn't bother looking at screamed at her sudden appearance. The manager pony charged out of her office and demanded that Starlight stand down. Starlight disregarded the request, shattering the display glass covering the muffins for which the place was named. Starlight reached a hoof forward to grab as many as she could—
A flash of light enveloped her. She was back where she started.
“To Tartarus with you!” Starlight yelled in frustration, charging an attack to launch at Twilight.
Twilight looked worse for the wear. Her mane was frazzled from the countless terrible futures she had visited, her wings drooped at her sides, and Spike only barely clasped the time travel spell.
Despite that, though, Twilight’s eyes were full of unyielding determination.
Starlight threw an explosive beam at Twilight in an attempt to wound her. If Twilight had to heal, then that could be enough time for Starlight to grab something to eat.
Twilight redirected the explosion with ease. She had given up trying to keep events on course many tries ago. Anything she did always stopped the Rainboom. But what she did know was that Starlight was getting tired. Starlight couldn't keep fighting forever. And once she became too tired to do anything, Twilight could return to the present, even if it meant that Starlight would die trying to stop her.
“Come on, Starlight,” Twilight said exhaustedly, “You can't outlast me. You may have studied magic just as much as I have, but you will never overcome the natural advantage I have of being an alicorn.”
“I… Will… Defeat you!” Starlight panted, “even if I can't crush your body, I can still crush your spirit! As long as I keep going, you'll never see your friends ever again!”
“That's where you're wrong, Starlight,” Twilight said, ignoring the fact that Rainbow Dash was stopping when she had seen the deflected explosion, “Even though the worlds I visit are different every time, I more often than not meet my friends in some form. They may be completely different from how I know them, but it just reminds me that even in the bleakest of futures, they keep going on. It gives me the strength to continue against you.”
Rainbow Dash had stopped flying for too long. The time travel portal opened up above Twilight, while Spike clutched Twilight’s mane in one claw and the spell in the other, “You can't win, Starlight: I will never give up.” And with that, Twilight was sucked up into yet another world.
Starlight was tired from her attempted robbery of the shop. Of course, everything she had done had just been reset when Twilight summoned her back. Muffin Stop had never been attacked by a hunger crazed unicorn.
But Starlight still felt each passing moment weigh down on her. Starlight told herself that she was just as determined as Twilight, that she too would never give up, and that no matter what Twilight said, she would outlast her. Starlight could only hope that Twilight would get attacked by something terrible when she arrived in the new future. Twilight would survive, of course: she always did. But all Starlight needed was a little bit of time. She needed food, she needed rest… She needed to recharge her magic. All the offensive attacks Starlight had been using finally were taking a more permanent toll on her.
“Screw her,” Starlight grumbled, “I don't care what she thinks. I will beat her.”
Light flashed around Starlight. Time was reset again.
Starlight let out an “ughhhhhh!” in exasperation.
Twilight stood in front of Starlight. Instead of being on the attack, however, she simply waited. Waited and stared. Spike yawned in exhaustion.
“You're never going to beat me!” Starlight said.
Twilight didn't even bother responding. She simply stared at Starlight. Blinked, then more staring.
“Nothing you do is working!” Starlight insisted.
Twilight took a deep breath.
“You’ll never stop me!” Starlight said in anger.
“Just keep talking, Starlight,” Twilight said, almost casually, “The longer you talk, the more you whither away. I have so much magic on my side,” Twilight’s magical aura surrounded Spike, giving him a small boost of energy.
Starlight’s stomach rumbled. She almost envied Spike: at least he could be given energy. Starlight tried replicating Twilight’s spell. Twilight reached out with her aura and blocked the spell from taking effect.
“Thanks for the extra juice,” Twilight smiled. Her eyes became slightly less tired in appearance, and she brought her wings back up to their rightful places at her sides.
“That's… That’s cheating!” Starlight felt ready to collapse.
“With the future of Equestria in the balance,” Twilight said almost ceremoniously, “I would think that anything I didn't do would be unfair to everypony who's lives you would destroy.”
Starlight hated Twilight more than ever.
Starlight launched the momentum stopping spell at one of the bullies this time. Rainbow Dash stopped her quick downward descent to laugh at the suddenly motionless bully.
“Not so skilled, are we now?” Rainbow gloated.
“This… Isn't me!” The bully squirmed, trying to resist, “Something’s stopping me from moving!” Rainbow just continued to laugh.
Twilight simply shook her head, “Whatever, Starlight. The more you try to win, the more you wear yourself down, and the closer I get to going home.”
“Give it up, Starlight,” Spike added in a bored voice.
“Shut up!” Starlight screamed, “Nothing you say is going to change my mind! You broke my friendships, and no matter what happens, I. Will. Break. YOURS!”
Twilight looked at Spike and shrugged, “One more world?” She asked.
“One more world…” Spike sighed.
Right on schedule, the time travel portal opened up over Twilight and Spike. Spike clutched the spell tightly, but Twilight simply combed a hoof through her mane to try and straighten it out a bit. They were sucked up without any further hassle.
Starlight attempted to use Twilight’s energy spell again, but quickly realized Twilight had blocked it completely. She cursed and tried levitating herself towards Muffin Stop, but she was too exhausted now. She felt her magic falter and threaten to drop her. No, she decided, she was going to have to stop using such energy consuming magic. Instead, Starlight tried to break into a gallop to reach the restaurant by hoof. However, she was so tired that it ended up being more of a slow walk. It was almost a straight forward path; it wouldn't take that much longer.
Starlight got in front of Muffin Stop. Rather then attempt to rob it again, she simply walked through the front door. She walked up to the counter, went back where the cashier stood, acting as if she had a very important reason to be back there, and promptly levitated a muffin up.
“Miss, what are you doing…?!” The cashier mare asked uncomfortably.
Starlight ignored the comment and moved the muffin to her mouth, feeling the delicious, moist muffin begin to crumble onto her taste buds… she closed her eyes and moaned at the taste of food; it had felt like an eternity had past since she had--
The muffin was gone just like that. Starlight opened her eyes in disbelief. She wasn't floating the muffin anymore. It wasn't even in her mouth. It had vanished before she could even swallow.
Twilight was grinning and chuckling, “Aw, what an adorable face you were just making, Starlight. Making out with somepony while I was gone?”
“You're a sick monster!” Starlight groaned, her stomach rumbling at the chance of almost having food. She felt like she was going to be sick. She didn't even feel like responding to Twilight’s degrading comment. What kind of imagination did Twilight have, anyway?
“Come on, I'd love to know who the special stallion is,” Twilight sounded almost happy, “too bad he already forgot, though, isn't it?”
“I was TRYING to eat some food, you perverted ‘princess!’” Starlight’s voice was full of loathing.
“Aww, why didn't you say so in the first place?” Twilight mock pouted, “You and hayburgers must make such a cute couple!”
Starlight was enraged. In a scream of anger, she threw her crystallizing spell at Twilight. Twilight dodged with ease. The cloud Starlight hit suddenly crystallized, it's sudden weight dropping it down. Starlight launched another attack, with the same result. Twilight dodged every move with acrobatic grace.
The section of clouds behind Twilight was now much too heavy. It ripped the clouds connecting it to the rest of Cloudsdale and fell downwards: directly in the path of Rainbow Dash. Dash, as quick as she was, had too much momentum to stop in time, and collided directly into the cloudstone structure. Shouts of “Rainbow CRASH!” were heard from below.
“Don't tire yourself out too fast!” Twilight smiled. It was obvious that she had a distinct advantage over Starlight at this point.
Starlight panted in exhaustion. She knew that things didn't look good for her. Despite her intense hatred for Twilight, her simple lack of energy was stopping her resolve to beat Twilight at her own game.
“This is what you call irony, Starlight,” Twilight smiled, “You create a spell that is so powerful it can conquer the bounds of reality for an unlimited period of time… Yet, because of your supposed genius, you can't escape. What did you intend to do if you did stop me? Suppose I even died in one of these worlds… If I didn't come back to reset time, you would have no way to return to our world without this scroll,” Spike held it up, as if to clarify which scroll Twilight was talking about. Starlight grimaced in anger.
“Eventually,” Twilight continued, “You'll just meet the same future you send me to, but you’ll be forced to take the slow path. It would be years before you would come across me again, and that would require you to take the scroll before anything happened to it.”
“You're wrong, Twilight!” Starlight argued back, “I wrote the spell, I can just write it again!”
“Eh, I suppose,” Twilight shrugged, as the portal opened up above her again, “but not in your current condition. As long as I keep coming back, your own spell will summon you back here with me. So just try it! Go back to our world! But if I, or ANYPONY for that matter, uses this scroll, you’ll just get pulled straight on back here, to this moment.”
Spike shook his head, “Truly a masterful plan, Starlight.” And with that, they were gone.
Starlight hated Twilight. Despite her intense need for revenge, this was just getting to be too much. Starlight collapsed onto the clouds, closing her eyes as silent tears began to fall. Her body shook uncontrollably. She never would have let Twilight see her this way before, but everything she was doing was just being wasted. It was taking a huge toll on her emotional state, combined with Twilight’s terrible mocking.
She hated Twilight.
Light flashed around her once again. Time was reset, but Starlight wasn't. She remained in her silent tearful convulsions as Twilight reappeared.
“You're weak,” Twilight chided, standing just above Starlight’s shaking body.
“You're a failure,” Spike grinned maliciously.
“I… I…” Starlight sputtered and gasped to control her breathing, “I… HATE… You…!”
“Emotions, emotions,” Twilight spouted casually, “So much feeling for someone as pathetic as you.”
“I think it's getting to be too much for her!” Spike added with a cackle. He jumped off of Twilight’s back and landed on Starlight’s side, knocking the wind out of the already gasping unicorn.
Tears flowed uncontrollably at this point. Starlight couldn't stand the pain, “St-st-stop it!” Starlight choked out.
“I think she wants more of a challenge!” Spike laughed. He lifted up Starlight’s mane and began to breath fire against her coat. Starlight gasped and screamed in pain, fire burning at her neck; trying to fling Spike away from her with a dying fragment of magic. Spike was stopped, but he and Twilight simply laughed at her tortured state.
“I think it's time we stopped toying with her…” Twilight cackled, using magic to turn Starlight’s face up towards her…
Then, in unison with Spike, their eyes flashed bright red, screaming, “AND FINISH THE JOB!!!”
The sky went black all at once, jets of flame flying towards her face as Twilight’s hooves came rushing towards her exposed skull…
Starlight woke up, screaming.
She panted and looked around. She was in the Castle of Friendship. Twilight’s Castle.
Starlight felt her tears roll down her face as she shook uncontrollably.
“J-just a… b-bad d-dream…” She told herself. That didn't stop it from feeling any less real. She could almost feel the burns covering her body as Twilight crushed…
No, she wouldn't think of that. Starlight sobbed silently and hugged herself tightly, trying to calm herself down.
That hadn't happened, she told herself. Twilight wasn't like that… Twilight had… Befriended her, despite all that she had done to her and her friends. The only reason she was even here in this bed, instead of spying on Twilight’s personal life, was because Twilight was such a good pony.
The door opened suddenly. Twilight’s concerned face looked at Starlight, “Are you alright? I heard some screaming…” her voice trailed off as Starlight’s silent sobs suddenly came out with full force.
Starlight couldn't bear to look at Twilight. She knew that Twilight was kind… She was a friend… But she, Starlight, was supposed to be strong! She never let anything get her into a state like this! And yet, here she was crying uncontrollably in front of her—
Starlight felt a set of hooves around her neck, giving her a warm embrace. Starlight sobbed and hugged Twilight back, crying into her mane.
Twilight slowly stroked Starlight’s mane, “Shhhhh…” she said quietly, “It's alright… It's alright… I'm here for you…”
Twilight’s soothing words slowly drew Starlight back into her senses. Despite her slowing sobs and tears, Starlight held onto Twilight with continuous strength; she never wanted Twilight to leave her.
The two ponies continued their embrace until Starlight’s sobs were reduced to sniffles. Twilight stroked Starlight’s mane in a comforting, mother-like gesture, occasionally saying “Shhhh…” and other calming phrases. Starlight’s tears continued to flow, however.
“I-I-It… Was so scary!” Starlight sputtered out, “A-a-a Nightmare…!”
Twilight hugged Starlight even tighter, “It’s alright… That's all it was, Starlight… Just a bad dream.”
Starlight sobbed again, “B-b-but… It fe-felt so… real!”
“Shhhh…” Twilight stroked Starlight’s mane again, “You're okay…! It’s not real…!”
Starlight’s tears finally started to slow. Twilight’s calming gestures were helping her finally calm down. Starlight finally got more control over her breathing again.
Twilight moved her head back to look Starlight in the eyes, “Are you alright?” she smiled with genuine compassion.
Starlight shakily nodded.
“Do you want to talk about it?”
Starlight suddenly felt conflicted. On the one hoof, she didn't want Twilight to leave her: she didn't feel like she could keep it together if she was by herself again. But on the other hoof, she wasn't sure if she wanted to talk to Twilight about what had scared her so much…
Starlight’s tearful, conflicted eyes were all Twilight needed to see before she once again embraced Starlight in a hug. Starlight gripped Twilight’s neck and didn't let go.
“It's okay, Starlight,” Twilight said soothingly. She released Starlight and climbed onto the bed and sat next to her, “You can tell me when you're ready.”
Twilight embraced Starlight once more. Starlight hugged back and leaned her weight against Twilight. All she wanted right now was the support of a good friend.
Twilight was happy to oblige.
My first published story! Wahoo!
It's nothing much, but the idea was just floating around my head after my friend (ponybytesketches.deviantart.com, check him out!) jokingly commented on that line from the finale. I also like the reformation of villains, despite how cliche it is, so long as it is done well.
I do still have my doubts about Starlight, but this story is written under the assumption that she really does intend to change, and that it's not just an act to strike Twilight down when she least expects it.
Here's to hoping Season 6 will make me love Starlight in the same way I love Sunset!
Please come back to Equestria, Sunset
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This is a very good first story. If it helps any, I did not realize it was a dream at first. The first time I started to realize it was when Twilight and Spike started to act outright violent towards Starlight, which is out of character for them, but perfectly acceptable in a dream.
The only constructive criticism I have for you (and this is really my personal style) is that you don't need the colored text. The story reads perfectly well without it.
That aside, you earned my upvote
Twilight could have done something quite evil, as another story also noted: just wait to Starlight to age to death. Twilight and Spike outlive her and win by default.
Never wise to trap an immortal in a time loop.
If I'm being honest, putting the climax of the story in the description, even if it's covered in spoiler tags, is a poor decision. Either drop a few more hints in the story along the way, or just trust your readers be surprised when they do get to the end.
It's a one-shot. Telling people the ending gives them less of a reason to read it.
Writing wise, it was pretty good.
To be honest, I read the spoiler tags and still didn't get it until I reached the end. I assumed that Twilight went crazy due to extended Time Travel and that she was gonna brainwash Starlight Glimmer after torturing her for a bit.
I never realized that it was a dream until the end xD
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Thanks for the input; I removed the most spoilery of the tags
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I was trying to decide if I needed it or not, but I just decided to go with it, if just to emphasize the evil nature of Twilight and Spike in the dream. I also added the blue text later to show seperation between the evil dream Twilight and reality.
It was kind of just an experiment; but I like the colors anyway.
Thanks for the suggestion anyway, though!
Guilt.
This was amazing! It seemed like another story where they're just fighting, but then BAM
it's a dream! Faved! 
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Thanks! I try my best.
**imagines sexy muffin face** Yep, quite a nightmare to behold.
As someone who despises Starlight, it was oh so satisfying to see her falling apart emotionally... which made the ending so disappointing. I really was hoping that the two would be fighting for years, decades, centuries, eons, etc. It would have been interesting to see how their perspectives and outlooks would have changed over all that time, not to mention their mental state. To have it be a dream felt like a copout and makes the title misleading.
Still, the emotions here were really well conveyed, and bringing up the logistics of fighting for so long and needing food, not to mention Twilight's magical reserves, was a very clever touch (it would have been hilarious if Starlight suddenly realized she needed to go to the bathroom and had to figure out how to do so without leaving Twilight an opportunity to correct the timeline). You've got a great idea here, and I encourage you to keep writing; I just wish the story lived up to the title.
Wow, that ending made me have to read this story over twice just to make sure I didn't miss anything. I wonder, Did it all really happen and Starlight died? I mean what the hay happened?
I had a theory based off your comments and story description that Starlight is now her daughter but the story clearly said friend, so what happened?
Still a good story loved it and loved that you gave STar a happy ending. Most people don't.
I give this a 10 / 10! Easily and now I shall do what I do with my personal faves! Add it to every folder I have so I can read it whenever I feel like it!
I sense Princess Luna at work here. Who else but her loves to teach valuable lessons through dreams and nightmares?
6950807 I'm not convinced it was a dream.
It could have been but it seems more likely that it happened but Starlight got reset or saved and had her memory altered. Possibly.
Congrats on this not being another 'Starlight dies a horrible death' or 'Starlight erased from time' or 'Starlight suffers fate worse than death.' They've gotten BORING.
I think this is the second story I've read with this basic premise. Not that there's anything wrong with it, it's a powerful, interesting one. And this one does add a twist by making Twilight exactly as powerful as Starlight's fears make her.
Though, every time I think things over, I ask myself: What if Twilight gloating like this, going on about her 'natural superiority', backfires on her? What if it drives Starlight to do worse because Twilight showed her this approach is too weak?
6951376 It has to be Luna. She is always exploiting our mistakes by replaying them in our heads. Good night! *Hides under blankets and peeks out, scared.*
BOO!
I wonder if all of this was Luna's doing...
That isn't Twilight. That's SMUGlight Sparkle, the Uberpowerful Alicorn of Smug Victory and Righteousness.
She's an avatar for the authors to ventilate their dislike of a character through a character in a position of greater strength. At least this one isn't as blatantly out of character as SMUGlight SMIRKle.
Drop the coloured text, it looks amateurish.
Stopped reading once Starlight woke up. Would've been more interesting to see Starlight come apart at the seams.
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Those of you wondering about Luna, it's not that far off from my original idea.
I'm writing a seperate story where Luna is involved, at least in the beginning.
But, let me just say that I've always liked the concept of the Nightmare Forces.
I don't feel like Luna would go as far as having Starlight get essentially killed in a dream. It just doesn't seem like something she would do, at least not now that Starlight was trying to change her ways already.
That's what the whole red eyes flash and sky going dark part was all about. Not Luna, but Nightmare Forces.
Eh, after a bit of indecision, I decided to drop the colored text altogether.
I play too much Fire Emblem, and Grima's red text is just a touch I always enjoyed.
I think that sort of dream makes sense for Starlight, she's a smart pony and I think part of her would com to realize if she HAD kept things going for as long as possible "breaking" Twilight would turn out worse for HER. After seeing Equestria destroyed by Starlight's selfishness enough times Twilight would stop "playing nice" in her attempts to stop Starlight and just resort to just killing Starlight to stop her. Twilight would eventually become pragmatic and decide killing Starlight was worth saving every-pony else.
It was good. At first I thought maybe it should have a dark tag but that ending tho..
Still, it was good.
You know, it would've been neat if you'd continued this long enough for Starlight to REALLY start losing it...
*whistles* Damn I like this. I love the idea of Twilight fully willing to sacrifice eternity; and Spike staying with her.
But shit, this got mean and dark
I love it! 
Kudos on Feature too
So, just to clarify since I got a bit confused, This is all a dream Starlight had after canon events, and nothing from the show actually happened differently.
Because of that 'Twilight wold make a good mom' thing, I thought this was going to be an extended version of that comic where Twilight adopts filly Starlight when present Starlight shows her her motives. This one:
http://www.deviantart.com/art/Final-577958989
...Was actually super disappointed by my expectations that this wasn't the case. I really want to read such a story now.
Well, looks like Princess Luna failed spectacularly at her job here.
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There certainly is such a story on this site, but I can't find it right now.
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not necessarily - a nightmare based on reflection of your actions can be eye opening, and help prevent such bad choices in the future. Plus, on a case like this, it was like ripping a bandaid off - she has to get those feelings out and clear the air before she can really move on
6952428 I do agree with you, on both points, but I think this went too far for either reason. Or both.
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Unless Luna is inducing the nightmares as a form of punishment for Starlight's actions. She might have been forgiven by Twilight and her friends, but that doesn't mean she was let off the hook by the other princesses. Think about it, it's a punishment she can't escape, since she's always going to need to sleep.
Someone's about to have a bad time...
congrats on getting in the top feature box!
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Wow. A Cinema SIns (CInemare in the case of this fandom) comment?
Thanks for that. I enjoyed that
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Hey, just curious as to your opinion. Do you think there was any way Starlight could have actually won that fight? With every other villain there were fics both for alternate defeats and ways they could have won, but for Starlights finale I've only seen multiple ways she could have lost. So, any thoughts?
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Well assuming Twilight's immortal, all she'd have to do is keep Starlight in a loop for several hundred years until she dies of old age.
Typos:
whose
its
This story got dark, but other than that, eminently enjoyable.
6952989 She was covered in mud while escaping the Chrysalisverse and clean when she returned - it seems casting the spell would reset her too to the stae she was when it was first cast - so they could both kept it up for eternity.
You're not gonna win, we'll be here forever,
Fighting in this judgement hall forever.
I know you just reset each time I beat ya',
But I'll always be right back here to meet ya'.
With that spoiler tag I thought this was gonna be based off the DoubleWBrothers picture where Twilight changes the past and becomes Starlights mother.
img02.deviantart.net/1262/i/2015/348/5/0/final_by_doublewbrothers-d9k3o0d.jpg
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"Papyrus, you want anything?..."
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Or Luna let them happen. Since Starlight is punishing herself here.
Very good, I like this story!
You know, a lot of people hate Starlight Glimmer, and that out of nowhere plothole "This unicorn might have more magic than the actual alicorn that embodies the element of magic" is something I personally can't agree with, but I'd definitely love to see more from her in season 6, have some character-development and such...
Also, nobody wants FIM and Equestria Girls to gain any sort of in-show connection. So far the other world has not even been mentioned in the original G4 episodes, and while I'd love to keep it that way, I really wish we could get some more ponytime with Sunset Shimmer. Maybe stick her and Starlight together like Metool-Bard did with Sunny and Discord in "Reformation Buddies"...
Ohh, okay, it was a dream
Cause Twilight was laying it on thick, like, BRUH! 
I was kinda hoping for a an extended story about were Starlight sent Twilight and Spike back in time to show her filly self and Twilight helps her and changes Starlights future self. But I still was not dissipointed... You did good...
6953491 Or was it a dream and what happened at the end was how the world changed after everything was fixed.
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Better than that, it would've been neat to see her fight herself to death or something instead of Twilight becoming uncharacteristically sadistic at the end... (and yes, I know it's a dream, I'm just saying it might've been better to have ended the dream without it...)