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The Lutece twins


My goal is to create great stories that everypony will like, so it's nice to meet you. Enjoy my stories to your hearts content. Enjoy. Used to be Golden oath.

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Merasmus has had enough. He has been defeated too many times, labeled as insane, and has do deal with soldiers antics. Well he has had enough, he opens a portal from his bombonomicon and jumps through in hopeing to find a place filled with peace. He finds a world filled with ponies, can be finally have some peace and quiet, or will he go crazy and destroy equestria.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 175 )

This seems fun, considered it watched:pinkiehappy:

i like to see more

"Your very welcomed"
"Your welcome" There is no point in the very

I.... i wouldn't have known what to do." She sniffed.
I.... I wouldn't have known what to do." she sniffed. Tut tut don't want to forget your capitals do we

Then the fillies did something that made Merasmus's yes widen, they hugged him.
I didn't know a yes could widen more than 3 letters. MEIN GOTT

~T.CC

6434664 thank you for finding those, I will fix them now.

6434683 No problem I like the direction this story is going in.

~T.CC

comedy in coming!
more please!

Yay I contributed by giving you an upvote and a cake! *throws cake at your face*

6440267 The cake is a lie! And thAnks man

6440290 no prob. And did you get my last pm?

6440591 OMFG, your name :rainbowlaugh:, and thank you for the favorite.

Once you get framed for the murder of your roommate, things really can't get any worse.

Elu

Well, not bad, not bad. Too fast for my taste, but I'll see how the story goes.

6454095 I will slow it down for you, so that everyone will enjoy it more.

Title idea gained from 'The Great and Powerful...Walter?'

6454157 no, it actually came to me while I was working on my lost one story.

6455355 oh okay lol first time I got your reference wrong XD

Me read. Me like. Me want moar ponies.

Ok, just calm your Merasmus

That should be a mistake, but it's hilarious... Eh.

"Oh that's not good. Somepony is in trouble!" He yelled, galloping towards the screams.

Word fail.

"To talk to Zecora about telling a story on nightmare night tomorrow." A light yellow earth pony with a pink bow in her mane said.

Capitalization fail. There's quite a bit around that area.

"TIMBERWOLFS!!!!!" The three fillies screamed. They ran as fast as their hooves can carry them. They ran past trees and bushes, but their ran came to a end when they are surrounded by timberwolfs.

Wolves.

Basically, just capitalization and spelling. Other than that... Pretty good.

I'm interested to see where this is gonna go, will the mercs follow over? or will he find some peace?

6460925 ok, well I'm not perfect,but I can try and fix them

6460929 he will mostly find peace. If a certain pony doesn't drive him insane first.

6460945 Interesting...... By the way, you might want to pace this some more. Tracking this definitely.

6462000 still being typed, I am a little suck, so please hold on. Sorry. And ive been busy as well. Sorry. :twilightsheepish:

I'm liking this story already.

mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeee please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

6466434 wwwwwwwwwwwwiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiillllllllllllll dddddddddddddddooooooooooooo :moustache::moustache::moustache:

6465964 thank you, and yea, I like it as well

Pinkie Pie promise

Unless they trade marked it as that I was pretty sure it is a pinkie promise.
Except for that small nit pick good chapter, all in all, can't wait for the rest of the story to unfold.

~T.CC

6466650 May I make a jugeston? Have Merasmus fight Chrysalis, Tirek, and (just for the randomness) Painis Cupcake. :yay::moustache::scootangel:

Well done! No nitpicks from me this time. :pinkiesmile:

...Eh. Not bad. Some spelling mistakes. Want some hints that'll make your life super easy? Copy-paste this story to Microsoft Word or Google Docs. Let it correct the spelling and grammar mistakes. If they miss that, there are several (hundred) free programs on the internet to help you correct (or just plain fix) the mistakes in your grammar. Try it out!

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