A lifetime in a dangerous reality on earth, being conscripted into the military, and life of training didn't really enthuse or surprise him, but what ended his life as a human and began his life in a new world with new obstacles did.
Mocha has it rough from birth to death, then rebirth into modern Equestria. Life isn't all fun and games for Mocha, and this is his tale.
(Part 1)
He has to learn about the world, struggle through challenges, and grow in more ways than any human should.
This is not a Gary Stu story, he will not have it easy, this isn't going to be your typical (predictable and annoying) HiE fic. (Those annoy me too.) Also, not a human turned pony story.
Thanks to Rancor for being my editor. Coverart Version 1.0 is from artist Mix-Up
Note:
Completed, book 2 coming soon.
Seems like something I have to add to favs...
Heh. Thanks.
A couple more chapters til he crosses over.
Yeyeyeyyeyeyeyey
Can't wait to read it!!!!!,
Oh and congrats on 80!!!!!
Holy shit man........
I'm don't know what to think.......
Ok second chapter.....
I may have read some of it with out like reading it........ It went threw my mind instantly......
And I'm not a big fan of first person.....
And the beginning like..... Can I meet her???
I liked it but, I'm unsure..... There's something about me...... That doesn't like it.....
I just don't know what.... I keep dwelling on it......
I just don't know......
So Tom and Jerry are a thing in the future? Damn, LONG LIVE THE CLASSIC CAT AND MOUSE CHASE! LONG LIVE TOM AND JERRY!! Lolz XD
Hmm? I need to read more of this...
Mocha this is an interesting story can't wait to read more.
Fuck me for finding an interesting story that's only five chapters in. *Bangs head on desk*
6439232 don't worry this story will turn out just like all of mochas stories. You won't regret it.
>>Mocha star you continue to impress me more and more but that is to be expected from a writer of high caliber.
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I just wish I didn't have to work so much the next couple weeks. I'm having so much fun writing this one.
"Prit'
LMAO.
That's my new phrase at home. The fam loves it but haven't read the story... YET. I'll see if I can get ppl at work to use it next.
:D
Prit.
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There's a plan for that.
A run on gag.
Remove , on occasion and keep one of the commas.
everyone, through hard work should change to everyone if they worked hard enough.
remove about them, to them
Other than that, good job mate!
No noticeable errors, good job
6442360 You're doin a great job mate. Two chapters with no visible errors. Not only that, but hell. This is one freaking amazing story. Can't wait to see more.
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"Prit"
Woah!!!!
When we get to chapter 5......
My feed must be broken
Ok chapter 3.....
First where's chapter 2?
For some odd reason this chapter seems way more interesting than the first two, I think it's just me.
Other wise I can't wait to read more!
Wow! You would say that.
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Then read!
Chapter two is a myth created by the illuminati.
Don't believe it or the aliens win.
Normally I am not big on the hole lone human in Equestria trope. Usually it's a twenty something male that has not a lick of sens to them, who just seem to be the center of attention for his weird form and for constantly bragging about his so called human technology, knowledge and ingenuity, with the little gizmo's he carried with them, all the while the ponies stare in amazement at them. In actuality, I find that this shows that they are more dependent on theres fancy tools and that when they are deprive of them they quickly are reviled that they are nothing with out them; and that they don't really have the skills set to back up all his clammed. Human turn pony I find it more interesting, most of the time because they have to adapt them selves to their new environment and body and the tools that they ones had aren't as useful any more to them.
To me, this is more of a survivalist story, where I find it infinitively more interesting in my eyes. The human in this case is in a hostile environment has not time to waste in bragging about about his tools and is struggling to just survive the environment and tries to understand the ponies to better integrate with them. heventualy his equipment will failed him and he will have to find other ways to defend himself.
Mocha seem to be a fun an funny guy, he doesn't take himself too seriously, his has had a long history behind him, has integrated with the ponies to the point that he has nearly gone completely native to this world.
In all honestly I think this is beginning of a great story and I am looking forward to see more of this story.
A small white pony....
How small?
And what! It's really weird and I'm really liking this some how it's weird....
Also I have something on my mind so KIK me
6457333 how small?
8 inches tall. The white horse is that tall.
The hero human is only 1 foot tall.
#sarcasm
It's really weird cuz I described the scene, people, creature colors, and sizes quite well, yet you're still asking questions to answers that are in the story.
in the same chapter, none the less.
Don't be afraid to like another one of my stories, bud.
Just keep reading and expand your mind.
Woah...
i really don't know what to say.....
oh wait i do...
this place is weird.
q
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ah man....
Mix-up got to a bigger review first......
darn
every ten chapters .
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Is not a contest, just comment
Loving it so far. I'm not the biggest fan of Humans In Equestria but I really like this. It just pulled me in with the warfare, and now i'm sticking around for the ponies. Can't wait to see more.
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Haven't even seen the ponies yet! THanks, you're in for an adventure.
This is a great story so far, I like Mocha as a character and I like how you present paleopony period that he finds himself in. I am surprise that he did not try to scare off the deer with a few shots in the air, it might have been the best alternative to actually joining the fight instead and be force to pick a side. Well all evidence point that the armor was discarded by its owner sense the key elements that where removed from it so it stands to reason that its owner is still alive. All doe I understand that the armor was inoperable I would still imagined that parts of it could sill have been useful for monedane protection or create tools knives or even bartering. Waste not want not thats what they right?
Sorry i got to the newest chapter just a few min ago and mocha, you mad genius , are one hell of a good writer. Cant wait to see how his stay with the deer go and lom stayed Well that was unexpected though I'm starting to think that something interesting is about to happen and I'm look ing forward to it.
This is such a great story. I can't wait for the next chapter!
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Thanks!
Wow Mocha, another chapter without mistakes. Looks like you didn't really need an editor after all eh? Haha,
Alright this story is already good, now its gotten better. Great job Mocha!
GREAT CHAPTER! Only one problem tho.
This:
Should be changed to this:
There should be a "the" before 'end.'
Almost forgot, don't forget to submit this to the HiE group and don't forget to add the 'Human' tag.
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I have a fantastic editor.
But even he only finds a couple errors every chapter.
Dawwwww
ewww! ewww! ewww!!!!
this scene was made all the worse by the fact my un-house broken puppy was sitting in my lap as i was reading it.
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Just wait, I'm excited about the next chapters
Again great chapter, and great story so far. I like how you portray Primeval Equus in you story.
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Only 5,999 years and 11 months to go. ..
Give or take.
:D
Yeah...It's not like it is some sort of foreshadow or anything.
you know i got to wonder why this story doesn't have more likes, its great
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Spread the word!
I've done it in many groups, but no one really had the same interest for HiE, maybe.
6416096 long live our overlords!
Needs more views. +1
6548347 Yas!
I CANT STOP READING THIS STORY! I don. Think that's a bad thing... But I don't know