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Mocha Star


I'm here to write my way into your hearts and infect your minds.

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This story is a sequel to Rarity's Colt: Snickers's Harmony Trials


Snickers is in the best place he's ever been: He has friends, unrequited love, and an undefined future; he may even finally have a good chance to live a new life in a new place, as long as he can keep himself out of trouble long enough to earn his mark and balance his old life as a human with his new life as a pony.


Things will happen that will earn the Random tag.

Swearing and sexual situations and topics are gonna happen throughout. This is basically young teens learning their place in life.

Special thanks to Ninjadeadbeard for editing, starting at chapter 17, Cover me Timbers.

Chapters (25)
Comments ( 197 )

Why are the good stories made up of such short chapters? It's not fair...

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I have more, but won't drop them all at once.
This is actually 1/3. I chose to split it into 3...

This never stops making me laugh. Looking forward to more.

its best to cry bi in this circumstance, they can't exactly call you out on it.

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all the wisdom and knowledge of concoctions of zebras + unicorn magic=awesome

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He's gonna be happy regardless, and that's what really matters.

Ok, I'm all caught up with the entire series. I've enjoyed the ride so far. It's an interesting world you've built here. I'm glad Snickers is embracing the chance to have the 'child'hood he was denied. I'm a little sad his herd broke up but it's for the best. Snickers has so much to learn still. Who knows, maybe they can try again later. Hopefully to include Silver Spoon too. I've got a soft spot for her.

The author's notes has my imagination running. It's utter wish fulfilment but I can see them all forming a large herd off in the future. It's easy to see the seven of them are forming a strong friendship now. Given the gender ratio I'm sure herds of two stallions and six to nine mares aren't unheard of.

Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading the next chapter.

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Thanks. Honestly, I hope the herd comes back. I've never really written Silver Spoon, and having her crush on a colt is fun.
This whole romantic subplot is going to drive me crazy, but I'll go to the asylum smiling at the end result. Plus, now he's got a bro to do stuff with, which will probably lead to different kinds of trouble for the CmC.

Oh, the fun to be had in, what I feel is, a great RGRE world.

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Indeed, Snickers needs a colt/stallion's perspective on things. I love how open Rarity & the CmC are now. It's great Snickers can talk to and learn things from them but it's filtered through their gender. Nothing wrong with that. It's advantageous actually but Kiwe can provide the male take on things. I think he's a great addition to the group.

Mocha, can I tell you something?

My god... why doesn’t Snickers become a politician? The way he makes everyone jump between laughing and crying so often, you think he had a maxed out charisma score.

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Your welcome. Listen, my door is always open if you want to follow me.

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Hm,
Rarity's Colt, book 37. Democracy Commeth description; the politics of upper Canterlot aren't what they used to be and our plucky law clerk takes on the nobles for the rights of the people.

I'll try to remember that and toss you a reference..😂

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😂😭😭😂
'My door is open if you want to give me something.'
That's a new one and I love it.

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I imagine it's more like Teddy Roosevelt getting the VP nomination. He didn't ask for it. McKinley didn't want him to. But by Celestia, the Mares love a stallion who can talk dirty.

I give him a year before he's leading the entire government. And hating every second of it.

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Sweet Celestia, the way the story goes at random, he just may. 😂

There is so much neat littke stuff in yjis story, I legit enjoy myself every time i read a chapter.

I cant wait to see what kind of street cred the mares all give Snickers after that lil fiasco.

Snickers! For God's sake! Your taking this shit too seriously, buddy. Embrace this weird as fuck Matriarchy you've found yourself in, specifically, the part where you're being loved to death by a dozen cute fillies, you lucky bastard!

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Thanks and your welcome! Next ones got some of the same random that makes Snickers's life so unexpected, only with more head canon exposition done fun!

Yep, after going back and checking out this whole series again, then checking aroubd tje site for anything of equal or better quality and finding none, i can say with confidence that this is the best usage of RGRE I've seen thus far.

All others have either been a simple oneshot that doesn't give us much, or an overexagerated smutfic.

This, though? Its damn fantastic.

Equestria is set up to be a wholseome-ish place where the mares don't dominate the males, but love and cherrish them instead. That's the basic gist, but then yiu keeo adding all his extra world building... The Thousand Sorrows, for example, makes a pretty great backstory as to why Equestria is the predominantly female.

I personally love every cute moment between Snickers and his filly friends, and after everything I've read, im starting to get the idea Snickers might be seen as real catch by everyone. Its all just a theory at this point, but not only have noticed possible hints of Snickers being rather attractive to the fillies. (Being a colt, they'd adore him anyway, but i feel he's considered really handsome by a good number of filles and mares in town)

I remember soomeone in the story mentioning Snickers' "Grace", but it's only been mentioned once, yet it somehow felt more important. My first thought in what "Grace" they could be refering to is the possibility that Snickers walks, trots, canters, and carries himself around town in such a "gracefully" subtle way, he doesn't even notice hes doing it, but all the girls do, and they love it.

Then there's "Tameing", which is definitely a peculiar term to use. So I ended up theorizing on that too.

Most males are rather "tame" and "docile" to begin with in this Equestria, considered the lesser gender, and must be protected. Suddenly, here comes Snickers, a complete antithesis to the status quo.

He could easily br seen as a "Wild Colt/Stallion", he's tougher than the usual Colt, not afraid to speak his mind, and if pushed, will push back.

In other words, he's an ACTUAL "Rarity"!

So you have Snickers, a free-thinking, independendent(-ish), dirty minded little "Wild Stallion" certain fillies might wanna "tame"

Sheesh, i could go on, but this is comment is getting way too long, and hell, i could be dead wrong on all of this.

Anyway, love this series, love this take on RGRE, love Kiwe, cant wait to see more.

It's about time Snickers learned a bit of pony history. I'm sure it'll help him come to terms with things. Great update Mocha Star. I look forward to reading the next one.

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Personally, I like that I remember and cover the points that I mention books ago. Yeah, the others were (and the readers) were informed of the historic event, but Snickers was out for the count and didn't hear that. Now, the colt has to come to terms with what he said and the possible repercussions because of his statement that he didn't know had cut so deeply.

Thanks for the comment, I appreciate it and you.

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Indeed, the consistency in lore and continuity help the enjoyment of the story. My "about time" comment is more about my poor forehead and all the facepalming I've been doing knowing Snickers had just inadvertently stepped in something. :derpytongue2: Keep up the good work.

even gods can learn lessons while also foreshadowing things that are going to happen in the future.

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They can try, but our guy literally told a God off just now. I don't think things are going Harmony's planned way. 😝 maybe the next time he'll ask and talk it over instead of just forcing his divine power onto Snickers.
I hope not, they have such great moments together.💑


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Snickers as anything but an earth pony is laughable. Ha ha ha ha! 😜

I'm not sure how you can use my 'world building', but I don't see a problem sharing my little piece of Equestria with you and other parts of the world.
Let me know how it goes over! :heart:

A little bit more lore and world building. Interesting to see Snickers refusing "the gift" and in such a colorful way. :derpytongue2: Good stuff as always. I look forward to reading the next chapter.

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I really liked how Snickers refused it, just being the kid we love and letting us know he's still there.

But, he's also a colt and I liked how he cried for Rarity.

Best part, Harmony leaving him a gift he couldn't/shouldn't refuse.
Lol

Tnx for reading and I'm looking for the next one, too.

:facehoof:

Okay, Harmony definitely lost a ton of Dignity Points with that bit.

A nice chapter, not too light on humor, especially at the end there.

Huh. Well. That was... crude. Neat as hell... but crude.

A+, well done!

see what happens when you don't stay away from deities proclaiming themselves gods, you end up pregnant and giving birth to a wolf pup.

Can't wait for the awkward conversion when he has to explain this to his friends and mom.

Oof, bad timing Snickers. Thanks for another good update Mocha.

This chapter is really rough, grammar-wise. You didn’t have a stroke, right?

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Maybe.
I need a prereader badly

Rarity, your not going to be too thrilled when the delirious state passes and the fact that your a grandma hits you.

I noticed Snickers mentioned that pup was a she then a he several times. Was that a typo or him being delirious?

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He's not sure, so he keeps hoping between the options until he gets back to civilization where he stops giving gender for a while. 😊
Great question.

This is a very interesting and fun series of stories. I was hooked from book 1 and am really looking forward to more.

The Monk
“On her doorstep was Twilight Sparkle. While Derpy deeply respected the mare, like most in Ponyville, they wished she'd either switch to decaf, or start hitting the harder stuff.” -Dan_s Comments

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Soon. It's been a frustrating week or two, but I'm at least on the next chapter.
:)

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Looking forward to it loving this story so far :D

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Thanks, I love hearing that.
I've only got a few things left and then to fill in the gaps so the chapter makes sense and closes a plothole... Hopefully I'll be ready Monday to post. Hooves crossed!

Hey, do you have any idea how many more rarity's colt story's you will be making? Also, when does this specific story take place?

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I don't know, it's just going until it is done.
At least two, for sure. Each around 100k words. It's before season 4 at the moment. Hope that helps

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Thx for letting me know :D

She brought it to Snickers’ ear and it popped with a pi;, most of the air blew across his face.

Not sure what pi; is.

“Oh, before I forget,” Pinkie said raising a small kennel into Snickers’s view, “here’s your pet timberwolf, he’s nicer than I, and a few other ponies, expected him to be.”

But Snickers asks about them calling Pup a she right afterward.

I demand you remain calm and

Missing quotation marks.

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