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WiseFireCracker


24, Canadian. Avatar drawn by the amazing Mix-up.

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This story is a sequel to Ten Trips to Equestria


Alright, I won't complain. I got what I wanted. I did visit Equestria. Being stranded here was not on my list though. And with the things running around, how I'm running around... I'm really not feeling good about this.

I've got mistakes to fix, dreams to live and so little sanity to spare... Eh, I'll manage.

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Chapters (19)
Comments ( 251 )

your link to prequil is broken bro.

1996941 Really? It works when I try, what does it show you?

1997156
Nope I just tried again and It didn't work.

it doesn't go to a page I can tell you that. looks more like a few lines of text or even just one word and broken pictures.

not actual pictures but a link to a picture that is broken.

So yea just redo the link and message me again.

And the sequel is here. Yes. All of my yes.

Okay, the random ramblings were a bit funny but a bit annoying. Still, I really want to see how this goes. Please update quickly.

Wow, that was a short sequel.

1997185 I just redid the link, tested it and it worked for me. I hope it will for you.

1997229 You're awesome! :pinkiehappy:

1998074 Glad to see you wanted to read it so badly. :twilightsheepish: And yes, the rambling was supposed to be a bit of a mix, getting kind of long at the end, just to give a better view of how much of a pain it is for him.
Oh, and working on updates, of course, but I've got a killer workload... certainly won't be as quick as Ten trips.

1997512 1998974 Ooooh, silly me, I forgot to put the story as Complete. :rainbowwild:

Slow mental decay. At least is was mania and not dementia.

Awaiting chapter 3.
When's Gary gonna be discovered?

Should we just start calling this guy Gary 'cause I don't remember his name. Hell, I doubt he remembers his own name, ignoring he remembers the name of a filly he temporarily occupied.

2018281 Eh, when he meets a pony?

2019148 It's a good thing you don't remember his name, since he hasn't revealed it yet. Call him what you want, because chances are he did forget it.

2001664 Actually, one of my beta readers suggested that it was closer to schizophrenia, once she read later chapters. She made a convincing argument too.

Yep, he's gone bonkers. Official diagnosis.

2020886That's dancing around the question.:ajbemused: You know full well that we all know that's how he's discovered. I want to know how many more chapters until pony on gary hilarities ensue.

2023399 Yes, I love boogying around the question. It's what I do. Spoilers are the bane of my existence. You won't hear me spouting some. Any and all attempts to fish for information will be like talking to a wall: unproductive. Sometimes I give out a little info as a sneak peak, but even that is rare. *cough* maybe one-two chapters? *cough*

2025467Thank you. While his unintelligible ramblings are a bit funny, you can only go so far without some kind of interaction.

Okay, I've always wanted to do this.:twilightblush: First!

Please don't report me. Though I don't see what people get out of it.

EDIT: Oh yes, shit has definitely hit the fan. Please let him go happy rage on Dissy.:pinkiecrazy:

2034274 I don't mind. I find that hilarious, actually. :rainbowlaugh: Did you find out the secret of enjoying being first?
Gary (let's go with that for now) definitely has the rage down. Can't guarantee any happiness here.

2034477 Let's establish a code, shall we? When you comment with :heart:, what should be my reply?

2034513While I find it satisfying to know I'm pretty much the first one to read the new chapter, I didn't really get much enjoyment from saying first.:unsuresweetie: In all honesty, I think it's just better if you post a comment with appropriate reactions to the chapter without having to yell first.

In Gary's state of mind(:pinkiecrazy:), he'd probably cause more damage to himself and those around him than Discord.

Horay, new chapter! something tells me next chapter is going to have a disclaimer of *sanity not included*

2035899 Actually, this :pinkiecrazy: is more what he looks like when in a more manic state of mind. This :twilightangry2: is what his state of mind looks like at the moment. Then again, mood swinging is one symptom of schizophrenia. (oh, and who knows what kind of trouble he'll cause for everyone)

2040353 Meh, I would have included it sooner if there was such a disclaimer. (...doesn't mean it's not needed though)

This story is excellent. Have this: :moustache:

2056050 Thank you, good sir :moustache:! Here's something in return: :scootangel:

2056555 I can say it, I just won't.

2057001 DRAMATIC THUNDER! *cue the background music!* Why is there no Luna emotes?!

Soooo has this newly named Havoc forgotten about Celestia lying in a crater or is she just going to be there for a while?
Also, Havoc connecting with Pinkie? BRILLIANT! I guess it takes going insane to understand Pinkie Pie logic. :pinkiehappy:

2060349 Weeeelll...... it's not that he means to... BUT... short attention span? And loose God of Chaos on the run? She's SO going to lie in that crater for a while... :raritydespair:

Honest Havoc sure is at the level Pinkie makes perfect sense to him all the time now. I'm not sure if that's a good thing.

2060545
I know that Havoc didn't have time to mention it this chapter, but next chapter would be kind of odd without mentioning Celestia seeing as Twilight and Havoc both know Celestia fought with Discord. Just would be a loose end to have Celestia's status as: in crater and then suddenly have her coming back without having/a hastily explained explanation of why she's better. Just seen things like that done before and wanted to make sure it's addressed next chapter.

Just a suggestion :scootangel:

Attack of the Killer Apples~

Meanwhile, in a crater outside of Ponyville...

Nice chapter, seemed a little rushed though.

2083364 It was a complete success at the box-office.

2085133 Yup, Celestia is still lying around in her crater. Doesn't mean I forgot her. *cough* plot point *cough*
Hum... can you please tell me what made you feel like it was rushed? (I could always use the advice)

2086602
The pacing and transitions could use some work. Also the switch to the secret canterlot archive didn't really do anything constructive for the chapter and it felt slapped on. In one sentence Havoc's name was censored in the official document and then you had "said Honest Havoc" in the next. In my opinion if you wanted to use the secret archive, you could have used it as a foil for actual events. For example:

The elements of harmony took assessment of the situation.

"EVERYPONY RUN! THE APPLE'S APPLES ARE GOING TO EAT US!" screamed Pinkie as she flailed her hooves in the air.

But that's just my advice. To sum up, the secret archive document came out of nowhere and were hard to tell apart from the actual story, pacing needs a tweak, and Celestia is still taking a dirt nap in a crater outside of ponyville. (Dues ex Macina waiting to happen imo)

2087048 Hum... I can see where you're coming from with that. The transition was indeed rather brutal and the idea of using as a foil is good, but it would be out of place in the greater scheme of things. Maybe, it's... well, complicated and spoilery. However, it was not his name that was censored, rather than his status as Discord's apparent son. Then again, I guess it was hard to tell...

Oh, and Celestia? Being a Deus Ex Machina? Yeah, like that's going to happen against Discord. :facehoof:

2087104
Ok maybe not a Deus Ex Machina per say, but more like the cop that shows up after the monster has been killed at the end of a horror flick or something equally as convenient. Which reminds me, where the hell is Luna? We know Celestia is out of commission and then we have itty bitty Shining Armor :rainbowkiss: but she's nowhere to be found. Sorry if I'm punching holes in your story or ruining the surprise. I'm just in a hole-punchy mood tonight I guess.

2098221 Will do. :raritywink:

2087184 Well, I certainly won't tell you what Celestia's role will be. Luna's somewhere. And Shining Armor is itty bitty. :unsuresweetie:

2100970>>2100970ii have but one request. Plz troll the living hell out of twilight your sall have my support in any thing you do from then on

Giant Opal? GIANT OPAL!? This is not going to end well.

2105520>>2105626 Indeed. Fun fact: anything that Havoc's broken mind registers as a threat should send normal people running.

Wow, Havoc is being a real trouper about this.

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