It's been a long time since Ponyville had such a strange visitor, in fact, the last visitor from so far away was Zecora herself. Ironically, it's the very arrival of this visitor that prompts Zecora to begin questioning her decision to stay in the Everfree. Overcome with sudden homesickness, the zebra begins to consider returning to where she came from.
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Chapters (7)
A concept you (or me in this case) don't see too often.. and it sounds so good!
I'm read this and love it! :3
This needs more likes! Really cute idea, and you did an excellent job bringing it to life. There were a few typos, and repetitive wording, but nothing major. An enjoyable read.
5588782 If you notice things like that, PLEASE tell me! I'm happy to go in and fix them, but since I have nobody to help me except great folks like you guys, and my mind is always going a thousand miles a minute, I can't do it all by myself. Point them out, and I'll fix them!
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Your repetition of the word summer is unnecessary. From the first sentence, we know that it's summer. So, it's fine just to put, season instead of summer season.
That's overkill. We can infer she's yelling via the all caps and exclamation point. I'd replace the "said-ism" with a thought, observation, or action.
Ditto.
This line just read off to me. Maybe reword it.
Cloven not coven.
To emphasize the ellipses, and improve readability, add a space between each dot, so it would be
Generally we don't add bits like this. Kindly is something that comes from the dialogue itself, you don't say something "kindly." Try something like this instead,
Personal nitpick here, but the whole fish paste thing threw me off. I just don't see ponies eating fish or even attempting to eat fish. Just a random thought.
Hope that helps.
I edit stories on occasion, so I notice little things when I read.
5588849 Thanks so much! Everything has been fixed. And if it happens again, I know who to blame.
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Giraffes speak Haiku?
I accept this headcanon.
I shall wait for more.
I hope you don't mind me asking this, but why was this a difficult dialogue decision for you to make? Personally, I always enjoy a nice haiku.
5588946 They're fun until you need to keep the story going and have a specific direction of dialogue be contained within a preset parameter, then it gets hard
5588959
There's truth in your words.
But if you can pull it off,
It will be worth it.
5588946 *reads your comment*
okay...
*scrolls away*
wait...
*scrolls back*
was that a Haiku?
Extra space.
This is eight syllables.
I see what you did there. This is a haiku.
I am a brony,
so if I call you horse-faced,
it's a compliment.
Anybody can
write haiku just stop at the
seventeenth syllab.
It's too bad that you
posted this minutes after
Abyss' story.
I look forward to
what else you have in store I
cannot wait for more.
~KBO.
5589151 No... that's seven... I keep coming up with seven... o.o
And who is Abyss?
5589164 You are right. Weird. I kept coming up with eight. I am so sorry about that.
The Abyss is another writer that I follow. He posted his most recent story twenty minutes before you posted this story. He is a reasonably popular writer whose stories are... saucy, to put it mildly. His story that he posted twenty minutes before yours is no exception. And because of the content matter, and the tastes of the frequenters of this site, it will likely end up in the feature box before the night is over. It is just unfortunate that this story could get overlooked or passed over because of the proximity of the releases.
5589279
I don't write for the Feature Box, although I'm overjoyed when it happens. I write because I like writing, and because it pleases wonderful people like you, who for some reason I will never understand, actually WANT to read my crap.
5589147
Most definitely.
Count the syllables once more.
Five, seven, and five.
5589350 Hey! Do YOU want to write this story? Sit down and be quiet. I WILL TURN THIS FIC AROUND.
5589370
*sits down and zips lips shut*
Sorry!
5589374
Good. Now make sure you use the rest area cause the next stop isn't for... I lied! THERE ARE NO STOPS ON THE HYPE TRAIN! 
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5589397 Zebras speak in rhymes, Giraffes in haikus. Cat's in limericks? Head cannon accepted
--On an iPad, I'm too lazy to write my signature
Something intriguing definitely. I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.
5589151 Haikus can be fun
But sometimes they don't make sense
Refrigerator
Makes me wonder how many dignitaries actually visit Ponyville. I mean, there were the horses from Saddle Arabia, but I think it was more Twilight's presence that drove Celestia's decision to send them there. Ponyville is suppose to be a random small town, after all.
Also, Neighfrica, I take it the zebras chose the name. I wonder what the hippos, lions, gazelle, giraffes, elephants, and any other potentially sapiant species in that country think about that.
5595904 I was really pushing when I chose that, nothing else would fit ._.
...Giraffe-rica? No?
Hmm.
I'd suggest finding an individual country in Africa, see if you can adjust that name to fit.
Awweeee! This chapter had me smiling the whole way through.
Super cute! I think Neighfrica is decent. After all, the other countries have ponified names. Anyway, amazing job with this one, I can't wait for more.
I see what you did there. Another haiku.
Extra space. Also, this is another haiku.
Another haiku.
Extra space. Also, this is another haiku.
Zecora not only rhymes when she speaks, she also speaks in haiku.
If you continue
down this path, haiku are all
you will ever write.
It gets easier
and easier the more you
write them. Be careful.
Soon, all you will be
able to write in is the
style of haiku.
Soon, all you will be
able to speak in is the
style of haiku.
It has already
started, you have five haiku
without meaning to.
It's a slippery
slope that you do not want to
go careening down.
But because of that,
this chapter was good and I
look forward to more.
KBO.
5596415 GIRAFFRICA. God damn I wanna use that so badly now.
5597176 Are you literally just counting every sentence I write? Unless it's set aside specifically, any non Mzungu line haikus are merely coincidental.
5597813
Yes. it seems like that
now, because you're already
lost to the art form.
Interesting...
The past catches up,
(Pretend syllables are here)
With the here and now...
I know I was wrong
last time, but this time there are
eight syllables here.
Very: two. Away:
two. The rest one each. I am
wrong twice? Unlikely.
1.) "Soon."
2.) "Themselves."
Zecora's special
talent is kicking so hard,
she sends foes spinning?
That is so bad ass.
What a unique idea.
My cap doffs for you.
~KBO.
Wait...oh, no fucking way.
*Counts syllables on fingers like a second grader*
3, 4, 5...AH, HAIKU!!! HOLY SHIT, THAT'S AWESOME!!!!
All my yes!!!
Interesting concept, I have read a little, and while its not my Particular cup of tea i must say it is very well written; good job! Additionally, i went to the artists page on divient art like you suggested, and it says you cant use the art "for any reason whatsoever"
The only reason i bring this up is because i don't want you to get someone who is really upset at you later on. Trust me, from experience! i accidentally used a piece of art that i thought they would be cool with, NOT for profit or anything, and i got a really nastily worded letter and ripped apart on an older website even though i publicly apologized and even cited for credit.
You probably got permission or something so don't worry to much about this, but it might be good if you have not to simply PM the artist and let them know.
Oh well, seems like someone else tackled giraffes... and way better than me.... oh well. This is a really good story.
Haikus huh? Good luck with that.
You forgot to Zebra-ify this. Or did you retcon it?
Oddly enough, this quotation mark is unneeded.
Perhaps you meant "Rarity"?
Congratulations!
I saw that Home was featured.
I hoped it would be.
Our favorite Witch
Doctor is going home. She
will be greatly missed.
Twilight, Pinkie and
Rarity will probably
follow Zecora.
Home really holds my
attention and draws me in.
I hope to read more.
I forgot how much
I like playing with haiku.
You reminded me.
~KBO.
That... was incredibly sudden. "Go with you? Sure."
5635918 You're right, and it's going to be a large part of the next chapter. She's not getting away that easily!
5635249 Thanks! Fixed!
So, the Giraffe speaks in haiku's?
It's required that at some point you need to put "It's snowing on mt fugi" into one of them.
XD
Oh. My. God! Zecora totally went through a big, dramatic love story with mzungu!
5661760 Uh... why? o.o
5661771 It's from the game grumps.
Dat's racist Rarity for ya.
Extra space.
It's also a good
excuse for the author not
having to make rhymes.
"Was", perhaps?
Homeward Bound was one
of my favorite movies
when I was a kid.
This incredible
journey may be just as good.
I shall wait and see.
Zecora now speaks
in haiku. Anything to
avoid rhyming, huh?
It's easier to
write haiku than it is to
rhyme with Zebrabwe.
So it is easy
to see why you went that way.
I bare you no grudge.
~KBO.
5663676 She's not speaking in haiku now. She only did it the once to impress him, maybe even be a bit flirty.
is there a missing word? was maybe hmmm?
Damn the amount of emotions Zecora just went though within the span of probably ten to twenty minutes. That's rough.