Are You in There?
"Twilight! Twilight!" Rainbow Dash called through the door of Twilight's home as she knocked excitedly. She'd ran here as fast as she could. She couldn't wait to tell her the news. "Twilight! You'll never guess what happened today! Zecora came to town, and I was the first pony to see her at the edge of the Everfree Forest, and as soon as she saw me, she came right up to me and gave me a kiss!" Dash was giddy with excitement. Her first kiss! She wanted to tell all her friends about it. "Twilight! Are you in there?"
Twilight Sparkle came to the door to see what all the noise was about. She opened the door and saw Rainbow Dash. Before Dash could even say anything, Twilight slammed the door shut.
"Well that was rude!" Dash said to herself. "Hey Twilight! What gives?" she asked. She heard nothing from inside. Dash tried to open the door. She'd only gotten it open an inch before the door became aglow with a purple aura, pushing it closed with a strong shove. Dash tried the knob again only to find that it had now been locked. Rainbow Dash walked over to the window to see what was up, but Twilight had already drawn the curtains.
"Hmm. I'll go get Pinkie Pie," Dash decided. "Whatever is wrong with Twilight, she'll be able to help improve her mood."
Rainbow Dash returned a short time later. This time with Pinkie Pie along side her. "She's being weird," Dash said to Pinkie. "She hasn't left her house all day, and when I came to see her, she slammed the door in my face."
"That doesn't sound like Twilight," Pinkie said. "Maybe she's just grumpy. I'll cheer her up. I love to see my friends smile." She got to Twilight's door and tried the knob. Just as Rainbow Dash had told her, the door was still locked. "Twilight are you in there?" she called through the door. There was no answer. But she thought she saw some movement through the blinds of the window. She walked over and tried to look though. She still couldn't see anything. She knocked on the window. "Twilight! Are you being grumpy? It's okay if you are, but you should apologize to Rainbow Dash for slamming the door in her face. She's your friend and that wasn't very nice!"
She knocked again, harder. Perhaps a little too hard. Her hoof broke the glass pane as it shattered and fell to the ground. "Oops! Sorry!" Pinkie said. But not one to waste an opportunity, she reached through to try to push the blinds aside. But before she could see anything, a table came flying at her.
She stumbled backwards away from the window sill as the blinds were pressed against the frame of the window by the tabletop. A moment later, she heard a hammering from the inside. Nails jutted out from the wall around the window frame, locking the table in place. When the noise stopped, Pinkie tried beating against the table. But it didn't budge.
"She must really hate a draft," Dash said behind Pinkie. Pinkie turned to her cyan friend.
"I can't deal with Twilight when she's using her magic like this," she said.
"What we need is another unicorn who can understand her freaky magic fits," Dash suggested.
"I know what to do!" Pinkie said. "We'll go get Rarity!"
"Now really you two, I think you're just over-reacting," Rarity said as she escorted her friends back to Twilight's house. "It can't possibly be as bad as you're saying it is." When the trio arrived outside of her home, the other ground-floor window had been boarded up from the inside too. "Oh. It's worse." Rarity went up to the door and tried to reason with her lavender friend, presumably somewhere inside.
"Twilight dear, are you in there?" Rarity asked in a polite tone. "Twilight, it's us, your friends. Whatever is wrong dear? You can tell us." There was no response. Rarity turned to Rainbow Dash. "Rainbow, darling, tell me again exactly what happened." Dash ran her hoof through her mane, thinking carefully about the details of what had happened.
"Well, I came over here after seeing Zecora," Dash explained, "and I knocked on the door. And when she opened it, she slammed it in my face."
"And then?" Rarity asked.
"And then I went to get Pinkie Pie to help. And then we came to get you." Dash said. Rarity thought for a moment.
"Rainbow dear, you were the last pony to see Twilight. How did she look? Was she alright? Was she sick, or hurt?" Rarity asked.
"She looked pretty upset when I saw her," Dash said.
"Was she upset with you?" Rarity asked. "Rainbow Dash, did you prank our friend Twilight?"
"NO!" Dash said defensively. "I mean, not recently," she amended. "And definitely nothing bad enough to cause her to act like this."
"Hmm. Well, just the same, why don't you go over there, behind that building, and we'll see it that's what it is," Rarity said. Dash gave her a bit of a defensive glare. But she was willing to try anything to try to get Twilight to open the door and talk to them. She trotted away, behind a nearby house, out of sight of the tree.
"Twilight dear!" Rarity said again, knocking on the door. "Rainbow Dash is gone. She left. It's just me and Pinkie Pie. You can talk to us now. Tell us what's wrong. Did Dashie do something to upset you?" She listened intently for a response. Nothing. She tried turning the knob.
"Don't bother." Pinkie said. "She locked it." Rarity pulled a hairpin from her mane.
"A lady is always prepared." She said with a smirk. She began to pick the lock. "I don't like breaking into her home like this," she said. "I respect Twilight's privacy. And I promise that we'll give her just as much time as she needs once we find out what's wrong." Pinkie nodded in agreement. After a moment, the lock popped undone. Rarity pushed on the door. But it didn't budge. "I think something is blocking it from the inside." She said to Pinkie. She waved to Rainbow Dash, beckoning her to rejoin them.
"She's not upset with you specifically," Rarity said to Dash. "But I still don't know what's wrong with her."
"Well, we're obviously not going to be able to get in. We'll have to try to get her to come out." Dash suggested.
"I know! We'll throw a party!" Pinkie Pie said.
"That's your answer for everything," Dash huffed.
"Yeah, but hear me out!" Pinkie said. "I'll go around town, and get everypony I can for a block party! We'll have it right here outside her house! And we'll dance and sing! She'll want to come out and join the party!"
"Or tell us all to leave her in peace," Rarity said.
"Rarity's right," Dash said. "Twilight hates noise. She'll come out and tell us all to be quiet, and then we can find out what's wrong. Either way, it should work!"
"Okay! I'll go get everypony I can!" Pinkie said, taking off into town.
Before long, the grounds around the Golden Oak Library were filled with citizens of Ponyville, eager to participate in the impromptu block party hosted by Ponyville's premiere party pony. As the sun set, the party was in full swing. Almost everypony in town was in attendance. Rainbow Dash had even talked Fluttershy into going. The shy pegasus usually wasn't one for parties, but she wanted to help do what she could for her friend Twilight.
Rarity returned from her trip to Sweet Apple Acres. Applejack strode alongside her, happy to join in on the shindig. Rarity had explained the situation on the way back. Applejack walked up to the door and shouted over the noise of the crowd.
"Hey sugar cube, are you gonna join the party or what?" Applejack asked. "Yer friends are all here. And we're just dying for the guest of honor to join. Oh, speaking of which-"
"Twilight, I got your letter," Princess Celestia said, having waded her way through the crowd. "Your letter was asking for help, so I came as fast as I could. As soon as I arrived in Ponyville, your friends all came and gave me a big hug. They're so worried about you. They wanted me to come see what was wrong." Still, no response came from inside.
"This calls for extreme measures. Pinkie Pie style!" Pinkie said. Everypony watched as she climbed up the side of Twilight's house and kicked her second-floor window in. She started to climb inside when a blast of purple magic shot out at her, hitting her square in the chest, and sending her tumbling to the ground in a crumpled heap.
"Oh my stars!" Rarity cried out in horror.
"That tears it!" Applejack yelled. "Outta my way!" She turned her back to the door and reared up, ready to buck it harder than any tree she'd ever bucked before. With a solid kick, The door blew into splinters as everypony rushed inside to confront Twilight. She had a lot to answer for.
Twilight ran up the stairs as they chased after her. The purple unicorn looked down at the ponies running up towards her. She'd heard them outside all day and into the night, at the door and windows, trying to get in. There were too many now for her to fight them all. She watched as the ponies that were once her friends came after her. First it was Rainbow Dash, then Pinkie, then everypony. Even Princess Celestia was after her now.
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A single tear rolled down her cheek as the horde of zombie ponies poured into her home to take her too.
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I feel like I've been trolled =\
4861968 I've always wanted to do one of these stories from the other point of view.
Whoa.
Didn't see that coming.
I did not see that coming.
Good job sir, I did not see that coming.
what the fuck?! nice job. its a rare time i get caught off gaurd like that.
One does not typically surprise me, and yet here you are.
Bravo, sir. Bravo.
Oh my god. Your username has been proven, once again, o-mighty-one!
Here is a few mistakes. The second one isn't that errant though.
It just bothered me a little that sentences weren't combined.
This story was seriously hilarious, by the way. I like it when you make short comedies like this one
What the fuck? I was really enjoying it until that ending.
4863337 Thank you for your positive comment! However:
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Lets keep spoilers to a minimum.
I didn't expect this would ever get to the feature box. Non-sex isn't really my strong suit.
Yay!
But hey, it's at the top of the popular section which is less than I hoped for, but more than I expected.
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...Heh.
Clever go, dude.
~Skeeter The Lurker
4864633 Sorry. Spoilers.
And no. Twilight wasn't crazy. The ponies really were as you said. It was written from their point of view. Just trying to mix it up a little.
So, were they actually still able to communicate with each other and perform acts of dexterity such as lock picking or were they in some sort of mass hallucination?
4864697 Mass hallucination for lack of a better description. And I doubt that Rarity actually did what she thought.
4864294 Oh my gosh, I know right?
All I can write is sex and comedy 
4864294
Don't sell yourself short. You have your non-sexual moments. I for one really liked "A Shining Example". Course even then you still managed to put in a Simpsons reference.
The title and chapter title are just creepy after reading it...
... huh... well, I'll admit, I was surprised. Well played, sir!
4864274 My bad let me try again
one thing I loved about this one is how with the revelation at the end you question previous events
I kinda wonder how a story telling the whole events would turn out 
4866553 Filling in too much of the detail would spoil the ending or give away the mystery too soon. This was just a little something I whipped up the other day when I was bored. (And after listening to that great song again).
But if you want to try and write a more complete story, I say go for it! I did what I had set out to accomplish with this short little number. I didn't want to pad it out too much, for fear of it feeling like contrived filler. And even if I add another chapter, the cat is already out of the bag. It would be just like all the other stories, that would be (in this case) from Twilight's point of view.
Due! Great job...very bent
. Loved it!
So basically this is Warm Bodies without the romance?
4866936 Sort of. I was thinking more along the lines of 'Aaahh Zombies' https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Mnq86FAj1tA
4867264 I've gotta watch that now.
As much as this may spoil it (and I don't know how to hide spoilers please don't judge me) the first paragraph did strike me a bit odd at first.
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Well done. Also teleporting.
Suuuuure they did.
I was going to say that the characterization for pretty much everyone was weird, especially Zecora's "kiss," but now I understand, and I fucking love you for it.
I have a bunch of logical problems with the plot that would be exposed if it displayed the usual side of the narrative, but this was basically a vehicle for the plot twist. Although it doesn't really seem like being a zombie is too bad, at least if things seem pretty unchanged after you're turned.
4867609
The ending side of the tag is without the slash.
Not a bad concept, but I think Twilight is more than powerful enough to deal with something like that if it came down to it. (Also Spike, because firebreath.) Same goes for Celestia, whom I additionally don't think would be that careless.
Over-all, I think it would have worked better with, say, Fluttershy.
That ending
Faved
4871177 All good points.
"What a twist!"
4871406 Seriously? With saying that, of all the emoticons you missed the most obvious one!
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4872166 Darn! You're right!
Ah this song.
I think that, given that this is essentially a punchline, the ending wasn't funny enough.
It may be too nitpicky for a story like this, but if Celestia came in having been forewarned how the heck did she get "hugged"?
Could have used a Dark tag.
Epicly dramatic.
4873387 Ah, but that would have spoiled it. It's the same reason why I dislike the sad tag. A sad story doesn't have the same impact when you go into it expecting it. Or maybe I'm just a sucker for sucker punches.
4876315 It would give an idea that there's something going on that we don't see which may spoil some of the humor for you, but the ending was so out of nowhere i doubt it would be guessed correctly before the final bit unless comments were read.
It would also hint to others that this story may not be for them, as not all readers like such a brutal turnabout.
4878133 Sort of. But then I wouldn't call Shawn of the Dead a horror movie, as that wasn't the main theme. It's really more of a rom-com. And in this case, the one sentence at the end wouldn't justify dictating the entire tone of the story, no matter how abruptly it may rustle the readers jimmies.
Besides, the author's notes shows that despite the change in story direction, it maintains a more light-hearted tone than a dark tag would require, or vis a versa.
I didn't get it the first time. But after re-reading, it all made sense.
4883116 <<< This guy gets it.
Wow. Just. Wow. Did not see that coming. Congratulations. Favourite for you.
That was one hell of a twist. I never in a million years would have seen that coming, which is not bad, but I felt like there should have been more vague hints so that the ending didn't quite cause such whiplash.
A good twist should make you go "Oh, so that's what was going on." not "Wait where the fuck did that come from?"
Still, very good story, quite enjoyable.
Any fic based off of "Re: Your Brains" gets a favorite from me.