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Twilight has always preferred indoor activities like reading, to outdoor ones. But after not leaving her home for a long time, her friends decide they need to try to get the bookworm out of her shell. And out of her house.
A Royal Canterlot Library nominee.
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I feel like I've been trolled =\
4861968 I've always wanted to do one of these stories from the other point of view.
Whoa.
Didn't see that coming.
I did not see that coming.
Good job sir, I did not see that coming.
what the fuck?! nice job. its a rare time i get caught off gaurd like that.
One does not typically surprise me, and yet here you are.
Bravo, sir. Bravo.
Oh my god. Your username has been proven, once again, o-mighty-one!
Here is a few mistakes. The second one isn't that errant though.
It just bothered me a little that sentences weren't combined.
This story was seriously hilarious, by the way. I like it when you make short comedies like this one
What the fuck? I was really enjoying it until that ending.
4863337 Thank you for your positive comment! However:
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Lets keep spoilers to a minimum.
I didn't expect this would ever get to the feature box. Non-sex isn't really my strong suit.
Yay!
But hey, it's at the top of the popular section which is less than I hoped for, but more than I expected.
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...Heh.
Clever go, dude.
~Skeeter The Lurker
4864633 Sorry. Spoilers.
And no. Twilight wasn't crazy. The ponies really were as you said. It was written from their point of view. Just trying to mix it up a little.
So, were they actually still able to communicate with each other and perform acts of dexterity such as lock picking or were they in some sort of mass hallucination?
4864697 Mass hallucination for lack of a better description. And I doubt that Rarity actually did what she thought.
4864294 Oh my gosh, I know right?
All I can write is sex and comedy 
4864294
Don't sell yourself short. You have your non-sexual moments. I for one really liked "A Shining Example". Course even then you still managed to put in a Simpsons reference.
The title and chapter title are just creepy after reading it...
... huh... well, I'll admit, I was surprised. Well played, sir!
4864274 My bad let me try again
one thing I loved about this one is how with the revelation at the end you question previous events
I kinda wonder how a story telling the whole events would turn out 
4866553 Filling in too much of the detail would spoil the ending or give away the mystery too soon. This was just a little something I whipped up the other day when I was bored. (And after listening to that great song again).
But if you want to try and write a more complete story, I say go for it! I did what I had set out to accomplish with this short little number. I didn't want to pad it out too much, for fear of it feeling like contrived filler. And even if I add another chapter, the cat is already out of the bag. It would be just like all the other stories, that would be (in this case) from Twilight's point of view.
Due! Great job...very bent
. Loved it!
So basically this is Warm Bodies without the romance?
4866936 Sort of. I was thinking more along the lines of 'Aaahh Zombies' https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Mnq86FAj1tA
4867264 I've gotta watch that now.
As much as this may spoil it (and I don't know how to hide spoilers please don't judge me) the first paragraph did strike me a bit odd at first.
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Well done. Also teleporting.
Suuuuure they did.
I was going to say that the characterization for pretty much everyone was weird, especially Zecora's "kiss," but now I understand, and I fucking love you for it.
I have a bunch of logical problems with the plot that would be exposed if it displayed the usual side of the narrative, but this was basically a vehicle for the plot twist. Although it doesn't really seem like being a zombie is too bad, at least if things seem pretty unchanged after you're turned.
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The ending side of the tag is without the slash.
Not a bad concept, but I think Twilight is more than powerful enough to deal with something like that if it came down to it. (Also Spike, because firebreath.) Same goes for Celestia, whom I additionally don't think would be that careless.
Over-all, I think it would have worked better with, say, Fluttershy.
That ending
Faved
4871177 All good points.
"What a twist!"
4871406 Seriously? With saying that, of all the emoticons you missed the most obvious one!
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4872166 Darn! You're right!
Ah this song.
I think that, given that this is essentially a punchline, the ending wasn't funny enough.
It may be too nitpicky for a story like this, but if Celestia came in having been forewarned how the heck did she get "hugged"?
Could have used a Dark tag.
Epicly dramatic.
4873387 Ah, but that would have spoiled it. It's the same reason why I dislike the sad tag. A sad story doesn't have the same impact when you go into it expecting it. Or maybe I'm just a sucker for sucker punches.
4876315 It would give an idea that there's something going on that we don't see which may spoil some of the humor for you, but the ending was so out of nowhere i doubt it would be guessed correctly before the final bit unless comments were read.
It would also hint to others that this story may not be for them, as not all readers like such a brutal turnabout.
4878133 Sort of. But then I wouldn't call Shawn of the Dead a horror movie, as that wasn't the main theme. It's really more of a rom-com. And in this case, the one sentence at the end wouldn't justify dictating the entire tone of the story, no matter how abruptly it may rustle the readers jimmies.
Besides, the author's notes shows that despite the change in story direction, it maintains a more light-hearted tone than a dark tag would require, or vis a versa.
I didn't get it the first time. But after re-reading, it all made sense.
4883116 <<< This guy gets it.
Wow. Just. Wow. Did not see that coming. Congratulations. Favourite for you.
That was one hell of a twist. I never in a million years would have seen that coming, which is not bad, but I felt like there should have been more vague hints so that the ending didn't quite cause such whiplash.
A good twist should make you go "Oh, so that's what was going on." not "Wait where the fuck did that come from?"
Still, very good story, quite enjoyable.
Any fic based off of "Re: Your Brains" gets a favorite from me.