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Hmm this looks promising I like it
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I'll be updating this daily if I can help it!
Last time Tirek was defeated by the Magic of Friendship... this time he shall be defeated by tantric sex magic!
And I do hope he shares his recordings of his sexcapades with Tirek.
*BURP*
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Erm...my last fic was pre-season 4 finale... Hense them being the LIBRARY.
This will be their first encounter with Tirek according to this story plotline.
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Oh, the 'last time' referred to the show. The 'this time' refers to your alternate take on it.
You know, I think Discord's home videos could convince Tirek to just go back to Tartarus. At least the only bodily fluids he'd have to worry about there would be his own.
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Haha, everyone assumes that because it's labeled Mature: Sex that it's going to be a clop fic...
Well, it probably will include SOME cloppy content but no where near as much as it's prequel.
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Truly?
I was expecting Tirek to bang someone or something at least. In order to convince him of the magic of friendship of benefits.
I think there will be some Tirek/Luna/Celestia reformation time
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This is a good follow up for the last fic. Hopefully Discord doesn't go traitor now that he's a dad ... and I can't wait to see your take on Tirek [do you do G1, G3, L!Verse, or a hybrid take of Tirek?] although him getting lucky would be rather mentally scarring
. I eagerly await to see what happens next.
Hmm I wonder how Pinkie is going to fit into this. Every other main character has a plot of some sort in the description except her.
good chapter
Who needs sanity anyway
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Why do I now get the feeling that's Fluttershy is scoots Mom now.
curse you writers and your incredible ability to tease
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ERM, I MEAN:
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100th upvote! Yeah!
Good story. The only thing I don't get is why there seems to be a LOT of italicizing going on. Italicies are usually only used for emphasis on single words or if a phrase is very important. A lot f the sentences italicized don't feel all that important. Sure, someone might be shouting or even muttering under their breath, but it still should be the same.
Also, when somepony's thinking, use 'xxx' instead of "xxx". It's easier to tell before even starting the sentence that the character is not speaking aloud.
That's all I got, edit wise. The story's pretty good so far. I can't wait to see where you go with it.
Loving it so far,loving you 2
(no homo if a guy) 
or do you want homo 0.0 
So this is gonna be one of those stories where Scootaloo is Celestia's daughter but doesn't know it.
So both Fluttershy and Celestia know something about Scootaloo... Did they both somehow manage to have a child together?
Yay sequals!
Why all the italics?
Also..
Ancient evils keep popping up like clockwork. Given this established trend, how could she possibly be surprised that yet another force of evil from ages past has shown up?
Fluttershy being her mom was kind of predictable unless theres more twists to it.
Oh so now Celestia join the group of suspects that may be Scootaloo's parent.
Although seeing how Rainbow Dash was active sexually i would guess she has more chance to get knocked up.
Fluttershy in on any conspiracy isn't that hard to understand, but Celestia?
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I like italics for thoughts.
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Oh-Ho-Ho! It seems people are noticing the plot points I subtly put in now! XD
And by "subtly" I mean it's secondary meaning:
sub·tle (stl)
adj. sub·tler, sub·tlest
1.
a. So slight as to be difficult to detect or describe; elusive: a subtle smile.
b. Difficult to understand; abstruse
Remember, this is a SEQUEL. Don't be forgetting what happened in the last story you lot because some events from it will become VERY IMPORTANT in later chapters.
I was laughing the whole time poor Fluttershy was trying so desperately not to laugh.
Just got to this chapter today. Congrats on getting featured so soon. I'm happy for you.
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I'd be more awesome if one of Dash's experiments while she was pulling a Nanase, and feeling like she was too young to have a kid + it potentially ruining her ambition to be a Wonderbolt. As well as her not being as mature as Ditzy Doo gave her up for adoption. That and you don't sleep with all of Cloudsdale and Ponyville without some consequences.
That and I can't see Flutters abandoning a child, not when she's overly motherly with her animals. But I'm excited to see who Scoots real parents are.
Scootamom is story canon! I withdraw my previous statement of Dash being Scoots mom. I want to hear how Tia got knocked up and abandoned her foal, and not only that but ignored her very existence for most of Scootaloo's life. Scoots is going to be pissed! [Must see of fic of this some day [Tia and Scootaloo interacting after this train wreck of a reveal comes out would be more epic than Luna flavored Icecreme].
*sigh* Discord made the same mistake he did in the show. He listened to Tirek! He should have just sent him back to Tartarus straight away. Personally I wouldn't have even said a word to the guy, just zap, bang, straight to Tartarus.
Discord will have to please himself with a paw after this betrayal
dang it 4 chapters and only 15 minutes till work, gonna add this to favorites and get back to this after work.
needs beginning " marks.
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Dissy should've done what he did in This one chapter fic. Seriously when in doubt call Fluttershy. Get some insight to your mental hiccups, and have her help get things in persepective. This is really a horrible way to be a parent. I just hope the baby survives.
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But if he did that we wouldn't get to see Twilight beating up Tirek. Seriously, that was probably one of the best episodes ever!
4722447 True, except for that part withDiscord, it just felt a bit forced to me. The version in this story is just as bad. It was a pretty impressive episode though. Although what's up a tree growing a castle, that was just weird. I hope they fix the library.
dash really messed up she had the perfect moment to score with AJ. all she needed to do was tell her the stallions come to her for the best tasting pussy in equestria. AJ would say it isn't all that great and then they could compete to see who's tasted better. oh well her loss. also luna and tia are liars. ~"P.S. And by “Your earliest convenience”, we DO NOT mean whenever you feel like it Discord" uhmmm hello princesses that is his earliest convenience. there just mad because he called off the 4 way orgy last tuesday so he could watch paint dry on grass while it grew.
but all joking aside I'm liking this so far something tells me this is going to be like a filly's tale. starts out cute and fun and soon turns into a dark horror of fighting to save the world and each others lives.... sprinkled with love and bonding. but mostly extreme action.
I'm getting a really strong vibe of this from fluttershy's behavior and I'm hoping it is true because that would be the best. also that giddy red heart lol I loved that she was so adorable as was twily too about her baby questions lol. she just needs to bang her bro and have his foal and get over with it, hell if she's lucky cadence will join in we all know how much twily loves them threesomes just ask discord ^^
ahem... TIA IS LYING HER TEATS OFF! ^^ that sun butt knows something and so help her she better tell or it will destroy all of equestria. looking forward to seeing how this turns out, knowing how you write I know it's going to be an awesome ride.
4723293 Gotta agree, the problem with this though is so much deeper than just the fact that Discord listened to Tirek because if this goes where I think it's going Pinkie's not gonna get to plan that Fluttershy's gonna be a mommy party.
4723528 Wait, you think that... No, that couldn't happen, could it?
4723636 Well when you think about it, if the story plays out the same way it did, then Tirek drains the mane 6 plus Discord when he betrays Discord. And I don't think a just starting out pregnancy could handle the stress of such an event.
4725740 ...Yeah, you're right....
For now, this is a much more tame story than the prequel, and I'm enjoying this a lot more. One little nit-pick that I have so far is that you are using too much existing dialogue from the actual show. Sure, you're putting your own spin on things by adding thoughts and emotions that weren't directly expressed in the show, as well as changing a few lines, but I personally feel as though this story is becoming less original, and more copy and paste.
I don't mind a line or two here and there to help tie the story in with the official canon of the show, as well as to help give a better sense of time as to exactly when things are happening, but half of this chapter is a scene directly from the show, and I think that's just a little too much, and to be honest... a little lazy. I'm not saying these things to be aggressive or mean, but I'm trying to help you become a better writer.
Anyway. this story is faved, and I'll keep an eye out for updates. I will properly review and rate this story once it's finished.
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Everything you said here is a lingering fear I've had while I've been writing this whole story. I didn't want it to seem as if I was trying to be "lazy" because that was the exact opposite of my goal here. My goal with adding episode dialogue was not only to give you an idea of where the episode the scene was playing out in, but also to portray that scene in the way that I envisioned it.
My constant struggle with this method however isn't changing the dialogue but rather deviating from the cannon itself. Something I am COMPLETELY AND UTTERLY OCD about is staying true to the cannon in just about ANYTHING.
It's because of this that I portray the characters so close to their cannon personalities. This is a double-edged sword however when it comes down to using cannon episode lines. My mind recoils at the mere idea of changing cannon episode dialogue.
In fact, it took a friend of mine nearly an HOUR to make me realize that we don't know that much about Tirek and therefore what he may assume to be impossible or inconceivable. It then took them another ten minutes to convince me to ADD dialogue to the cannon scene that was playing out between Discord.(I'm referring to the part where Discord brags about screwing Fluttershy.) Adding lines just before the end of the scene was much easier for me though.
It's hard to explain but I fully understand what your talking about.
it would be so funny if princess celestia was scootaloos mom
yay flutters and discord are going to be parents
That's four of the mane 6. Who's the plus one? Spike?
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Ah, thanks for pointing that out!