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To celebrate moving into her new castle, Twilight holds a slumber party for her friends. Spike is ill with dragonpox, so Fluttershy decides to invite someone else to make up the numbers. Twilight is not best pleased with her friend's choice...
Set shortly after the conclusion of Season 4.
Joint runner-up in the July 2014 UK of Equestria fanfic contest, which had the theme "Slumber Party".
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Was that... was that intentional?
As soon as I saw the character tags, I could see where this thing was going. And I must say, you didn't disappoint. Bravo! And as for the ending... icwutudidthar!
4703448 Oh yes, very intentional indeed! Though the credit has to go to the original show team. The G1 Tirek doesn't really have much in the way of black in his colouring (it's more greyish) so I have a sneaking feeling that the G4 team made him red and black deliberately. I think it just might have been a little in-joke for the fandom.
And thank you for your kind words!
I knew that a certain character tag would be a bit of a giveaway, which is why the opening scene is short; it's basically the pre-credits section. The ending came to me halfway through, and I was too weak to resist using it...
An enjoyable read. Best of luck in the contest!
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4703974 Thank you! I'll be giving your story a look before long, too. And to think, that "red and black" line (though intentional) was an afterthought on my part!
What an evil TorD challenge! I'll be keeping that one in mind :)
Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it. I also really appreciate that you explained what you meant by "daring". As an author, there's nothing I like more than an interesting comment.
This one had to go straight in the favourites. I thought it was a great piece of writing, and one of the funniest short stories I've read for a long time. The characterisation was spot-on, as far as I'm concerned, especially with Twilight. Even that moment at the very start, where she bellows "You did what?" was just the kind of thing you could easily picture her doing in the cartoon. (Followed by her trademark angry "huff huff huff!") But I also thought Pinkie was written just right too, with her conjuring up not just a portal, but a portal in a handy box. (After all, it would never do for Pinkie to just create one. That would be far too ordinary. It has to go in a box. All makes Perfect Pinkie Sense.
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Something else that I really liked in particular was Twilight's complex explanation of the portal she planned to open, and to her it undoubtedly was a simple explanation. Interesting that Applejack was the one that explained it in simple terms before the others even asked, which proves she's been listening.
I didn't quite get the "red and black" thing that Rarity mentioned, regarding Tirek's colours, and Google didn't help much, so I'm not sure what that was? Probably something really obvious, knowing me. 
Also, I thought Tirek was portrayed well, bearing in mind that he was only in those two episodes. He seemed to be still somewhat devious, as you'd expect, even though he can't escape. Revelling in the fact that he's got Twilight to annoy. And the thought of Discord listening in, unseen at that one point and not being able to resist commenting... that certainly raised a grin.
It seemed a good idea to end it there too. That leaves plenty for the imagination and you can only begin to guess what other silly little mind games Tirek would have dreamt up as the night went along. I just hope he didn't insist on a singsong!
All in all, I'd love to see something like this story turned into a little animation, as I'm sure some of the facial expressions would be priceless.
4765356 Wow, I wasn't expecting a review as detailed as that! Thank you ever so much!
And more to the point, I'm really happy that you liked it so much.
That was a silly fandom in-joke. So many people have had red-and-black villains that it's become a cliché, a bit like having an alicorn OC. But since Tirek really is red and black, I couldn't resist the line.
4769265 Ah, you're very welcome. I'm really glad to have the chance to review your stories where they've actually been published. And I'll try to do more reviews once you have more new stories here, I promise.
Oh yes, I see. That immediately makes me think of Captain Hook, or Freddie Kruger.
Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.
5100153 Well, I wasn't going to -- but a couple more people have now suggested I try, so maybe it would be worth a go. I'll think about it, and maybe do a little revision and polishing, though don't hold your breath!
This one was nice^^ I laughed my ass of at the "Get Tirekt!"-part
But I didn´t quite get the Firefly-joke at the end... could you help me?^^
7004108 Thanks! The "Get Tirekt" joke is very silly, and one person who read it advised me to lose it because it was too meme-ish, but I'm quite glad I left it in.
As for the other thing: it's a reference to the G1 special, "Rescue at Midnight Castle", which was where Tirek first appeared. An important G1 pony, basically the G1 version of Rainbow Dash, was called Firefly.
7004601 Yeah I am happy that you left it in, too
About Firefly, okay now that you say it I remember. Those G1 characters were so one-dimensional (okay, I only watched RaMC so far, still gave to go through the original Smooze^^) that I forgot the older names of the characters 2 minutes after I closed the tab with the movie
7006218 G1 has some surprisingly decent bits. Tirek himself is darker than the G4 version (eg threatening to behead Spike) and there are a few other things. It's not as consistently good as G4 IMO, but it's my second favourite generation of MLP.
7006826 Yeah, I remember that part. But anyway, I like the Tirek at the begin of the new episode the most. A centaur good with words, with manipulation, not this monstrosity he later became. Don´t get me wrong, the DB:Z-fight was awesome, but we need more smart and manipulating characters in the show, ponies that lure you in a trap while selling it to you as a honeypot
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I know she's reformed now, but Starlight Glimmer was probably the best pony ever at doing that.
7007226 Hm, nah, I would still call the early Tirek the Master of Manipulation, but Starlight is a good 2nd choise. (Not like we had any other choises. Sunset does not count. She bullied herself on top, that had not much to do with manipulation--except for her first days, when she drove the human 5 apart...).
I think we need more characters that play with you and manipulate you. It´s more like that than magical kaboom in real live, so the show should show more like it as well.
7007441 *Grins* That's why I specified "...the best pony ever at doing that".
7007447 Hahaha, okay. Silly me *grins*
You can has review!
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Thanks!
That was a good story.
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Thanks!