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Donnys Boy

My name is Donny's Boy. I ship ponies.


I am being stalked by a crazy girl with wild pink hair and laughing blue eyes. She says she knows me. She says we’re best friends. And sometimes ... sometimes I think she just might be right.

Maybe I’m going crazy too.

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Very beautiful story. I especially liked how you made the characters clear without using any names until the end, that was particularly well done.

>inb4 featured. Well done.

This... was... AWESOME. :raritystarry:

But a cliffhanger? Really?? :pinkiecrazy: I must envision a whole new universe in which Pinkie Pie and Rainbiw Dash live happily ever after!! :rainbowlaugh:

So Pony Hell is New Jersey?:rainbowhuh:

That was amazing - if this doesn't get featured I'll flip a table.

i felt like such a geinious when I realized it was pinkie and rainbow...

Really good story btw

I seriously felt a tingle on my back as imagined me having wings... haha self hypnosis

435819 What else would it be?

:eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup: best story so far

That was a beautiful story. Am I correct in assuming that the non italicised text with the two as humans is about Pinkie's journey back to save Rainbow Dash or is it just memories?

Of course I have to ask, does she succeed in saving Rainbow Dash?

Happy endings for the win! :yay:

This is one PinkieDash shipping story I genuinely like! :pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:
Beautiful idea, wonderful storytelling, awesome characterization and brilliant execution!

Not just beautiful, but chilling. After all, consider what Discord said: "They’ve all failed, you know."

Makes you think, doesn't it? Who else ventured into this world and never came back? Are you among them? Am I?


Oh.. my god. :trixieshiftleft:
...OH MY GOD. :trixieshiftright:

I HATE NOT KNOWING :fluttershbad:

I... That... This... Amazing. All I can say. Although, you COULD do a follow up chapter? I know it is a one-shot (or at least I think so), but, c'mon. PLEASE?:pinkiehappy:

I am not at all a fan of shipping fics. Yet... somehow... this story amazes me. I loved the plot, I loved how well written it was, and I loved the romance even more. There is just so much to this story and it is beautiful. Very very good job.
The fact that rainbow remembered pinkie's name at the end and that she always had that urge to fly was brilliant.
Keep up the great writing, man!
13 out of 10; without a doubt. :pinkiesad2::rainbowderp:

I think there should be a "Rainbow Dash Dies" Tag. This has to be at least the 30th fic in which RD dies... well, at least she supposedly comes back, even if we don't get to read about it.




(Note that that means this is my most favoritististist story ever.

Words..fail me, I can only really say this was brilliantly handled, the way you made who it was clear despite not really naming them properly; loved it.

My god!



Goodness! Brilliant. Extremely brilliant!

That was probably the best shipping story I have ever read.:rainbowderp:

That was -extremely- good, I loved it. One of the best fics I ever read.

....I hate you Donny's Boy. I hate you so much. You are the only author, the ONLY author, who can get me to read RainbowPie. I was even scared off of the Games We Play because I heard there was RainbowPie in it! But you, with your enticing sumarries and beautiful, heartfelt writing, you suck me in! And even worse.... I think I'm starting to like RainbowPie! :pinkiesick:

While I may be starting to like RainbowPie, it'll never be even near the top of my list of favorite ships. That, however, has nothing to do with your story. This story is original, beautiful, and well-written. The interactions are great, especially Rainbow at the beginning. She reminds me of Gilda, and she probably was like that at first before she met the rest of the Mane 6. I also like the allusions to the pony world, and th subtle wordplay, like this- My running slows down to a jog. Then my jog becomes a trot, LIKE A PONY. You sir, are a masterful writer. Maybe I'll give that other RainbowPie story of yours a shot.


That was... Wow!

From now on, you're one of the best writers of fiction ever!

Very nice.

it was so awesome


Bloody hell, how do you manage to come up with such great stories?

And damn you for leaving this story open ended. I both love and hate open endings for the exact same reason - they're open ended.

Another brilliant story.

:fluttercry::pinkiesad2: I can´t say anything else... :applecry::raritydespair:

Excellent. And it was just the right length, too.

My thoughts on the ending:
It occurs to me that Discord is a trickster and he never actually said that RD would be resurrected. I'm going to assume that the kiss only gave them their memories back and then they died. Again. And now they'll repeat the story from the beginning, FOOOREVEEER!

That complete tag makes me sad. Oh well. Great story in any case.


But I like this interpretation. Maybe it's my inner hate for RainbowPie and my never ending love for Discord talking, but this is now my headcanon for this story.

Well, I was right. You're incapable of writing anything I don't love, and this proves it.

My first thought was that you write a chillingly good Discord - he's just the right mix of jerk, complete monster and skilled if snarky conversationalist. Every one of his lines has such an aura of mockery and malice about it, right from the get go. Well done.

And then suddenly humans. That knocked me for six, and not in a bad way - there are very few human pony (pony human?) stories I really like, and this is easily my favourite of them - I adore the writing style. The whole narrative oozes Dash attitude, even if her spirit and good humour has been beaten away by being trapped in a drab, lonely world where she doesn't even have a name. Something about it makes even the funny, happy parts of the story beautifully heartbreaking. I also love the...I don't know the word. The switch between her and Pinkie. Both switches.

In Equestria Pinkie always struck me as content, happy. She wanted to enjoy each day and spend it with her friends, make people smile and not much else beyond that, where Dash is always striving - aiming to improve, get better and show the world what she has. If she's faced with a setback she kicks it in the face and keeps trying, just for the sake of it.

So I love that here, in this broken world where everything she loves has has been taken away from her, she's given up. She has nothing to strive for, nothing to be loyal to, and the only dream she has - flying - is one she can never live. And so she just lets life pass her by, not trying to remember who she was because to her the memories are unbearable.(Correct me if i'm misinterpreting all this.)

And Pinkie? She had everything that made her happy, and then she lost it - without Dash she couldn't find any joy in her life at all. So it makes perfect sense to me that after finding Dash, reattaching herself and never really letting go again - I thought her much increased clingyness was a beautiful, tragic touch by the way - she started trying to recapture the other things she'd lost. Like poor Gummy, all alone in a world without her. Pinkie had everything, and now she's regained the one thing she thought she'd never have again. It fits, I think, that she wants to remember - and better, wants Dash to remember because she was happy too.

It broke my heart that in the world she belonged in there wasn't a trace of what she had been left, but in a world that wasn't her own, with nothing but Rainbow Dash - a Rainbow Dash who may not love her, or even like her - she's so wonderfully, beautifully Pinkie.

And then the ending. I knew it was coming - but I have to admit I didn't expect her to. Ugh. Trying to make these spoilerless is hard. Here be spoilers, people who read the comments first. If there weren't some already.

I expected her to want to jump, but I thought Pinkie would stop her. That she didn't - couldn't - is an amazing touch. I hate myself for saying it, but it was the best ending the story could've had - the moment where Pinkie decides she'd rather die with her is tragic, and made so much more so when you realise that she never forgave herself for - as she sees it - letting it happen the first time. She's already lost everything once, and she'd rather die with the one she loves - knows she loves, never knowing why - than live without her, knowing she failed her (not my opinion, of course), again.

Do correct me if i'm wrong about everything, of course, but for what it's worth: I love all your stuff, but this is the most beautiful story i've ever read, bar none. Thank you for it. I'd say your experiment paid off. And I love the not knowing, in the end.

I'm gonna hafta agree with everything Piggie said.

This was amazingly beautiful and it is open to interpretation which is both frustrating and a great touch. Keep up the good work DB. :heart:

This was just incredible.

C-C-Celestia be darned, dude! That was amazing! And it was so wonderful, yet so awful at the same time. I just... I just...


Donny's Boy... I don't even know what to say.

An oddly appropriate song for pinkiedash shipping and/or this story


Awesome job. Yet another great one. I liked the suspense, characterization, and all the rest of it. The wordplay and allusion to ponydom were actually not subtle enough, in my opinion, but they were there; which is loads better than most stories. References like these are what make classic authors famous.

The ending isn't so much open to interpretation as it is to speculation. Either Discord kept his bargain (I'm assuming Rainbow loved Pinkie at the end) and returned the pair unharmed to Equestria, or he felt cheated by Pinkie and let them die in the human world. Whatever you want to believe. I, for one, see the lack of a tragedy tag and choose to believe that they made it back to Ponyville.

This is a great story. I was really able to get into it, and it's so visually written. Now I really feel like making an animation about this xD Perhaps I will do just that when my free time allows it.

You certainly deserve it, good sir. Bravo.

Hello, all you fine people! Thanks for all of the reviews and for so many of the kind words you've offered. I'm ... a bit surprised, actually. I joked on my blog when I was writing this story that this would be the story that caused all of my followers to shun me--but really, I was only half-joking. This is a quirky little story, I know, and I wasn't expecting it to go over as well as it has.

Not that I'm complaining, mind you! :pinkiehappy:

One of the best things about reading everyone's comments has been in seeing how everyone interprets the ending. That's been so, so cool for me, and I love all of the answers y'all have come up with. (I left off a lot of tags on this story for the express purpose of not swaying people's reading of the ending--I wanted the ending ambiguous and up for interpretation.) It's kind of like a Rorschach test, almost, seeing how the answers range from "they lived happily ever after" to "they keep dying in a never-ending loop of misery and futility."

Inspiring such discussion and analysis is one of the highest compliments I've ever received as a writer. Thank you, all.

Italicized text is flashbacks, and non-italicized text is "present day" events. Sorry that wasn't clear!

Thanks for giving it a go, even though you don't do shipping. :twilightsmile: I'm glad you liked it!

FOR REALSIES. The sad thing is, this isn't even the first time I've killed her off.

I have to admit, I was pretty surprised when I saw your user name, 'cause I know RainbowPie is basically your anti-OTP. I'm honored that you think so much of my writing that you read it anyway and even liked it--though you liked it more once you found a way to interpret it as ending badly for Pinkie and Dash, I see. Hee.

Thanks so much, Piggy. You leave the best reviews ever. I'm especially glad you thought Discord came across okay (my first time writing him) and that the ending worked (ambiguity and all), as those were the two points I was most unsure of.

Thanks much! Appreciate you mentioning that the allusions weren't subtle enough--that's really good to know, as it's a bit hard for me to gauge how best to strike the balance between subtlety and obscurity.

If you made an animation, I would probably explode from pure joy. No pressure and no obligation, though, of course. I'm just sayin'. :pinkiehappy:

I was thinking like when the two of them are falling, Dash will grow wings and she like fly off with Pinkie in her arms. Anyways, it sure was a delightful fan fic! :raritywink:

Damn... Just... Damn... 10/10.

Wow. This really is one of the most emotional stories I've ever read. You tried out something unique, and it's just beautiful.

As always, You just nailed the characters. Even as humans stuck in a colorless world, they're still recognizable. They're coping with the world in their own ways. Pinkie is reaching out for the things she knows are right. Trying to recapture Gummy in the alligator pit is a bit of a tragic moment, but it still just felt like Pinkie. Nothing in the world feels real to Rainbow Dash except Pinkie. There's really not much left for her, so she just wants to fly, even when "flying" would get her killed. Both of them are tragic without straying from what we know about them, and seeing them talk and hang out is cute and sad after everything they went through but don't remember.

The flashbacks were pretty great, too. Like Professor Piggy said, you really nailed Discord as a despicable and smooth talking villain. He doesn't just take things. He enjoys torturing his victims mentally (and physically in this case) first. It's never really clear whether he's lying about the bargain or he just thinks Pinkie will never succeed. What's great to me is that both ideas fit with what we know about him. Pinkie tricking him in the end was awesome (even if it was really sad :applecry:).

It can be tricky pulling off an open ending like you did, but it really worked. All of the buildup and uncertainty just enhances Pinkie's final decision. She really doesn't know what will happen and neither does the reader. It forces you to actually think about the decision.

It's just amazing how much feeling you managed to put into this story. I really was crying by the end. :fluttercry: Even if Discord was honest and brought them back (which is what I hope and believe), Pinkie choosing to fall with Dash is still beautiful. :heart:

435819 Is it really that much of a stretch?

I almost shouted at the computer when I got to the ending. This was just brilliant.

I am also going to argue that they do make it back. From Rainbow's realization of who Pinkie is serving as the climax of her realizing that she enjoys Pinkie's company, we can probably conclude that she does indeed love Pinkie back. (especially if they were in love as Ponies, as Pinkie claims, in which case the memories returning would have served to do so)

Looking at Discord's words, it seems like the deal is set, and it does not necessarily involve discord being back ("only then will you both be able to return") or at least Discord can't stop it ("the details are non-negotiable"). Thus, this probably should end with them both back in Equestria.

Hmm... a very interesting idea of a story. I love the change-up in everything, and while I absolutely HATE the ending, its not because the ending is bad, but merely because its SO DAMN OPEN ENDED. Damn, I need closure :pinkiecrazy:

That said, another story, another fav. Is there anything you can't do?

Hmmm... Cheerilee and Fluttershy?

Oh Donny. Oh, oh, oh Donny. You do terrible things to me, you know that right? (Took me long enough to get to this, haha.)

This was pretty impressive. History has given me the firm opinion that humanized fics generally do not hold my interest. Whether that is due to to flaw in the concept or a tendency for the idea to be taken up by mediocre writers, I do not know.

So I was a little surprised to see that you had written a humanized tale. But I thought, 'Hey, he's never let me down in the past, so I'm gonna give it a shot!' And I'm really glad I did.

Characterization and character development was spot on. Watching RD ever so slowly turn and become closer to Pinkie was done really well. However, I would suggest looking over lampshades a little more carefully in the future. There was one bit in the beginning, where some piegeons flew overhead, that was quite blunt. You don't have to mention that the birds are flying and then state RD is jealous of that in two separate clauses - make it obvious in the way you describe the birds flying. Emotive language within description should make her longing obvious and your writing about 20% stronger.

But now I am depressed. It seems I am incapable of accepting a 'happy' ending in the knowledge that the 'sad' ending is just as plausible. I am such a pessimist. D:

So, even though I really enjoyed this, can I pretty please have something happy next time? :pinkiehappy: < Like that. That's a good level of happy, haha.

Hello and THANK YOU, new reviewers! Really appreciate you dropping by to say a few words. :pinkiehappy:

Thanks for leaving such a detailed review and for the kind words! I'm glad the characterization was okay, even given the strange circumstances and setting. And I'm really happy that you liked the ending, open-endedness and all.

*laugh* Thanks! Is Cheerilee and Fluttershy that much of a stretch? They seem very workable, to me, but maybe I'm just weird.

I was really surprised to WRITE a humanized pony story. But the idea for this had gotten into my head months ago and just wouldn't leave, so I gave in. Thanks for taking a leap of faith and giving it a shot. I'm glad you enjoyed it and found the characterization was good. And thanks for pointing out the awkwardness of the allusions/lampshades--someone else mentioned that too, and it's good to know it came across heavy-handed. (Sorry about that, by the way.) Especially appreciate that you mentioned the thing about the birds, as it's really helpful to have a specific example. I agree with your assessment, and I'll try to adjust for more subtlety in my future writing.

And ha, I'll try to write some more happy stuff. :pinkiehappy:

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