Trees
Some ponies love children, some ponies hate them, and it's almost impossible to convince somepony who already knows how they feel about foals to change their mind. Or so one would think, because that very morning, Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle had managed to single-handely convince fifteen different Ponyville citizens to change sides.
After all, when you’re trying to enjoy your meal at Sugarcube Corner, the last thing you want is a foal screaming at the top of her lungs and running in circles for no reason whatsoever right next to you.
“They’re so full of energy today, aren’t they?” Twilight said, smiling at the sight of Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom playing together under the summer sun. Then she took a better look and frowned. “Uh. Girls?”
“Hmm?” Rarity didn’t bother opening her eyes, apparently too busy tasting her purple-ish tea to bother. “What is it, dear?”
“I think you should go and stop Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom,” Twilight replied. “I mean, I’m not really sure if they’re hugging or wrestling, but at this rate they’re gonna hurt each other.”
“Nah, let’em be,” Applejack said, eyeing the two foals and then taking a sip of her cider. “They’re just excited like a cat surrounded by sleepin’ birds. It’ll be good for them to burn off some energy.”
“...Are you sure?”
“Twilight, you don’t have a little sister.” Rarity smiled at her. “Believe us: little foals are like daisies. The more sun there is, the more energy they have.”
“Who can blame’em for being excited, though?” Applejack chuckled. “Going to the clouds for the first time, for a whole weekend? Ah’ll be damned, Ah would’ve been more excited than a male goat on Milkin’ Week, if you get what Ah mean.”
Twilight arched an eyebrow. “I actually don’t get it.”
“Believe me, dear.” Rarity took another sip of tea. “You don’t want to.”
“Although I don’t know if you would have been more excited than them, Applejack.” Twilight looked at the two foals again. “What are they even doing now?”
“Aside from screaming, I believe they’re trying to dance,” Rarity said. “Sweetie Belle is whirling around quite a lot. She’ll do the Sweetie Shuffle any moment now, I’m sure.”
“The Sweetie Shuffle? What is that?”
“You’ll recognize it when you see it, dear.”
“Hmm. They’re lost without Scootaloo, aren’t they?” Applejack turned to her two friends. “Rainbow Dash sure is runnin’ late. She should’ve been here twenty minutes ago!”
“Oh, dear, you know how Dash is. She’ll probably be sleeping on a cloud.” Rarity raised an eyebrow. “In all honesty, I’m still a little baffled at the fact that she offered her services as a foalsitter.”
“Oh, that would be me.” Applejack winked at her friend. “Ah just happened to mention how difficult it was to take care of Apple Bloom, y’see. She immediately offered to take care of’er and the rest of them Cutie Mark Crusaders for a whole week, just to prove she’s better than me.”
“You tricked her?” Twilight frowned. “May I ask why?”
“Because with Big Mac and Granny Smith goin’ to Appleloosa and Apple Buck Season over, Ah get two days entirely to myself if Ah can get rid of Apple Bloom.” Applejack took another sip of her cider. “Ah love my family more than anythin’, but Ah never get time to myself without Equestria bein’ endangered by seven dragons or somethin’ like that.”
“Oh. Yes, I guess you might be right there,” Twilight said, nodding. “Everypony needs some alone time.”
“A shame Scootaloo couldn’t go,” Rarity said. “The poor filly must be heartbroken.”
“She’s spent more weekends at Dash’s than the rest of us put together, Rares.” Applejack snortled. “She’ll survive.”
“It’s better for her to rest, Rarity. Colds can be really nasty,” Twilight said. “Anyway, Big Mac and Granny Smith are gone for two weeks, aren’t they?” Twilight remembered that she had also ordered a drink and took a sip of her coffee, only to find it cold. “Yuck,” she said, wrinkling her muzzle at the thing before lighting up her horn and sending a little spark of magic to the cup. A faint trace of steam rose from the coffee.
“Sure they are,” AJ said. “Braeburn wanted to see’em.”
“But then why did you ask Dash to take care of your sister just for two days?” Twilight asked. She took another sip of her drink and smiled. “Ooh, that’s better. Anyway, why just the weekend?”
“Because, and I believe Applejack thinks the same as me here,” Rarity said, “we love our privacy, but setting Dash’s house on fire for the sake of it seems a little bit extreme.”
Twilight blinked. “Wow. That was just mean, Rarity.”
“I wouldn’t say it was ‘mean’. I prefer the term ‘realistic’, thank you very much.” Rarity rolled her eyes. “I mean, no offense, Twilight, dear, but… How much does Twilight Time last, again? One hour?”
“...An hour and a half.”
“Exactly. Once you get past the three hour mark, those two get wild. A pack of wolves would be easier to control.” Rarity chuckled. “And just so you know, that last bit is as true as it can be. I’m paraphrasing Fluttershy.”
“Fluttershy…?” Twilight took another sip. “I thought she was able to control them?”
“Yes. Because they saw the Stare, although she didn’t use it on them,” Rarity said. “You might remember that ability as the one we threatened Discord with when we reformed him.”
“Oh.” Twilight licked her lips. “Yeah, I can see your point, I guess.”
Smack!
Silence.
Applejack looked at the two foals again. “Huh. Seems like Sweetie Belle just kicked Apple Bloom in the mouth, Rares.”
“Yeah, that’s the Sweetie Shuffle for you. Is Apple Bloom fine?”
“It seems so,” AJ answered. “Now she’s trying to show your sister how to properly do a shuffle.”
“Oh?” Rarity turned around too. “Is she?”
Smack!
“Yep, she was.”
“...Shouldn’t you be a little more concerned about your sisters’ safety?” Twilight asked. “I mean, they are hurting themselves!”
“They’re used to such a thing.” Rarity shrugged. “We can’t protect them from everything, Twilight. They need to learn how life is.”
“Yes, well, that sounds pretty good when you talk about more general things, like dealing with some kids their age,” Twilight said, “but they’re literally kicking each other in the mouth.” She arched an eyebrow. “Which life lesson are they going to learn through that?”
“Hmm. Good question.” Rarity tapped her chin. “I’m guessing something among the lines of ‘don’t kick each other in the face’.”
Smack!
“A lesson that apparently they’ve not learned yet,” Rarity added. “Applejack?”
“Hm.” The farmer was still facing Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle. “Sweetie Belle tried the Sweetie Shuffle again.”
Smack!
“And there goes Apple Bloom’s turn.” Applejack sighed and turned around to face the table. “At least they’re having fun. And where the heck is Rainbow Dash?”
“Napping on a cloud.” Rarity took a sip of her tea. “But seeing how she’s offering some free foalsitting for the whole weekend, I’m not complaining. Plus, it’s not like Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle seem to mind the wait, do they?”
“Nah. Too busy kickin’ each other.”
“Charming.”
“You know, you can ask me to foalsit them any time you want,” Twilight said after taking another sip of her coffee. “I mean, if you want some alone time so desperately…”
“Oh, Twilight, you’re such a dear.” Rarity shot a smile at her friend. “However, I wouldn’t dare. You’re a princess now, and…” She coughed. “Well, I don’t think it would be really, um. How to say it?” She licked her lips. “I think ‘safe’ is the best way to put it.”
“What?!” Twilight frowned. “Rarity, are you kidding? You’re worried about your sister’s safety when she’s with me? And you allow her to go near Rainbow Dash?! Hah!” She crossed her legs. “I’d be surprised if they don’t fall from her house at least twice while she’s foalsitting them!”
“Probably, but Dash will catch them before they hit the ground. We already took care of that.” Applejack chuckled. “Don’t take it as a personal thing, Twi. Ah’m sure Rares wasn’t talkin’ about you, but about yer house.”
Rarity nodded. “You have a lot of books, and some of them might be dangerous.” She smirked. “You know, black magic?”
“Oh.” Twilight un-crossed her legs. “...Yeah, I see your point.”
“And call me picky, but a house made out of crystal just feels wrong, Twi. Especially with those two near it.”
Plaf!
This time, it was Rarity’s turn to look at the two foals playing. “No kick this time,” she informed. “Sweetie Belle just ran face-first onto the only tree for miles.”
Plaf!
“And Apple Bloom followed.”
Twilight blinked. “...Why would she do that?”
“A mystery for the ages,” Rarity replied, still looking at her sister. “Now they’re yelling at the tree. And now it seems like they’re going to—”
“Dumb tree!” came the voice of Sweetie Belle. And then...
Planck!
“Yep. My sister punched the tree,” Rarity said.
“Ah bet Apple Bloom will try to buck it,” AJ said, smirking.
Thump!
“And just like that, you won your bet,” Rarity said, facing Twilight and Applejack again. “Apple Bloom is more experienced about trees, I guess.”
“Eeyup. Family tradition and all that,” Applejack said. “Apple Bloom is learning how to properly buck pretty fast, actually.” She took a huge mouthful of cider and swallowed it in one gulp. “In no time, she’ll be able to work on the fields like me and Big Mac.”
“They grow up so fast…” Rarity sighed and rested her head on her hooves. “It feels like it was only yesterday when Sweetie Belle still didn’t know how to talk.”
“Tell me ‘bout it. Did I tell you about that freakout Ah went through?” Applejack shook her head. “Ah got all scared ‘bout my baby sis turnin’ into an adult all of a sudden. Like, it went so fast! She was just a lil’ child and then…”
“Aaw.” Twilight smiled and tapped one of Applejack’s hooves. “You got all melancholic about that? How tender.”
“Yeah, Ah guess Ah got the blues,” AJ said.
“And I believe you reacted like a rational adult?” Rarity asked.
“Ah bubble-wrapped the house and then kicked a chimera’s butt.”
Silence.
“Well, I guess it’s as mature as you can get.”
“No, but really,” Applejack said, “They grow up so fast! Apple Bloom is gonna be the smartest pony in town, let me tell ya. That girl has more brains than all of us together.” A pause. “Well, ‘cept for Twi.”
Twilight chuckled. “You know, my brother used to say the same.” She put her hoof against her chest and talked in a deeper tone than usual. “‘You’re gonna be the smartest pony in the kingdom!’”
“And he was right!”
“Aw, shucks. You’re making me blush.” Twilight waved a hoof. “That’s not what I wanted to say, though.”
Plaf!
“There goes the tree again,” Rarity said. “Anyway, Twilight, I understand what you meant. Everypony thinks the best of their younger siblings.”
“Huh.” Applejack frowned. “Well, Big Mac used to tell me Ah was smarter than him, too, now that Ah think about it.”
“See?” Twilight smiled. “Of course Apple Bloom is smart, but it’s cute to see you get so affectionate with her.”
“And what about you, Rares?” Applejack eyed Rarity. “You think Sweetie Belle is the smartest in the family?”
“Hm? What?” Rarity raised her eyes from her cup of tea. “Sweetie Belle?”
“Yeah.”
“Goodness, no. I’m the smartest one.” She took a sip of tea. “By far.”
Silence.
Rarity blinked. “What? Why are you looking at me like that?”
“Rares.” Applejack frowned. “That wasn’t very kind of you.”
“What? Oh, no! I mean, don’t get me wrong, I’m not calling my sister dumb.” Rarity shook her head. “Far from it! It’s just that, well…” She cleared her throat with a cough and turned around to face the two foals. “Sweetie Belle!” she yelled, “come here for a second!”
“Yes!” Less than two seconds later, a gleaming Sweetie Belle was standing next to the table. “What’s the matter, Rarity?”
“Oh, it’s nothing important, dear,” Rarity said, patting her sister’s head. “It’s just a little doubt… How many times have you hit your face against a wall today?” A pause. “Or against a tree?”
“Only eight!”
“Wow, only eight times?” Rarity nodded. “Impressive.”
“I know!”
“Hmm. Anyway, that was all, Sweetie Belle. You can go play with Apple Bloom again.” She smiled. “I see a particularly muddy puddle in there.”
“Hey, you’re right! Apple Bloom! Look at that!”
Rarity took another sip of tea as Sweetie Belle ran away. “See?” she said. “I’m not saying she’s dumb. I’m just saying that she hits her face against walls eight times a day and loves playing in the mud. I love her with all my heart, don’t get me wrong, but thank Celestia she’s pretty.”
Silence.
“Cutest foal in town, though,” Rarity added. “I can’t deny that.”
“You know,” Twilight said, looking at Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle, “I would try to tell you how smart your sister can be now and then, but right now she’s desperately fighting against the mud puddle and losing. Like, really losing against it. We’re talking crushing defeat here.”
“Wonderful.”
Applejack took another mouthful of cider. “But at least Sweetie Belle knows how to behave, right?”
“Oh, yes. She’s an amazing sister,” Rarity agreed. “A little temperamental now and then, but I wouldn’t change her for anything. And she can be very helpful, when she’s not destroying absolutely everything I love or hold dear.”
“Yeah, sisters do that sometimes.”
“Shining Armor never did any of that,” Twilight said. “He would always be helpful.”
“Well, yes, but he’s older than you, isn’t he?” Applejack shook her hoof. “The younger siblings are the ones who cause trouble, not the older ones. Big Mac was always the responsible one at my house.”
“Hmm.” Twilight squinted. “Maybe. But I’m sure that Shining Armor would be amazing even as a younger brother.”
“Big Mac would be more or less the same, Ah reckon,” Applejack said. “Still, Ah wouldn’t change it for nothin’.”
“Same with me and Shining Armor.”
“Pfft. That’s a younger sister for you.” Rarity rolled her eyes. “I would change Big Mac for Shining Armor any time.”
“What?!”
Twilight snickered.
“You take that back, Rares!”
“Oh, come on. Don’t be a child, Applejack.” Rarity waved her hoof. “I won’t deny Big Mac honors his name pretty well, but I particularly find Shining Armor more handsome.”
Twilight’s snicker died immediately.
“Well, my brother is handsome too!”
“Why, yes. Good luck finding a mare that doesn’t agree with you,” Rarity said. “But it’s all about tastes, isn’t it?”
“Uh. Rarity,” Twilight said, frowning, “he’s married.”
“So? I can look at the menu, I just can’t order.” Rarity smirked. “I don’t mean to make you feel uncomfortable, dear, but Shining Armor has this feminine touch that really adds a lot to his charm.”
Applejack chewed her lip. “Hmm. Ah guess you do have a point in there.”
“Wait, what?” Twilight put her hooves on the table. “My brother is not feminine!”
“Well, he’s not completely feminine, I give you that,” Rarity said.
“Yeah, he’s just…” Applejack tapped her chin. “Y’know, a little fairy-like, if you get what Ah mean.”
“A little like a f—Shining Armor is very masculine!”
“Heh.” Rarity looked to the side. “...For a Royal Guard, he might be.”
“Are you saying the Royal Guards are feminine?!”
“Of course not!” Rarity said.
“...Well, they’re a little too graceful sometimes,” Applejack said, playing with her glass of cider.
“And that golden armor is certainly fabulous,” Rarity added.
Twilight arched an eyebrow. “Girls.”
“Not to mention how they sway their hips while walkin’.”
Rarity nodded. “And they always have a perfect hooficure.”
“And they actually dye their coats…”
“Girls,” Twilight repeated. “No.”
“No what, dear?”
“The Royal Guard is not like that!” She blinked. “I mean, nothing wrong with being feminine, I guess. It’s just that—”
“Twi,” Applejack interrupted, “the Royal Guard has better eyelashes than Rarity here. And no offense, but your brother was their captain.”
“Shining Armor has no eyelashes!”
“He does.”
“He totally does.”
Silence.
“He has manly eyelashes!”
“Why are we even arguing about this?” Rarity rolled her eyes. “Twilight, dear, calm down. We didn’t mean any harm. It’s just an observation.”
“Yeah. Your brother is still a hunk.”
“AJ!”
“What?” The farmpony shrugged. “Ah have eyes. You think Cadance is with him for his brains?”
Twilight’s frown didn’t disappear. “He’s not that dumb.”
“Of course he’s not, dear,” Rarity said. “He just forgot to invite his only sister to his wedding.”
Silence.
“Okay, he might be a little slow.”
“He’s the masculine equivalent of Sweetie Belle,” Rarity said. “Wonderful pony, but he won’t be able to solve a puzzle without setting it on fire somehow.”
“Ah bet he’ll throw his wife through the window,” Applejack added with a smirk. “Though it worked the last time, so what do Ah know?”
Twilight shook her head. “I still love my brother.”
“Don’t we all?” Rarity raised her cup of tea. “But where’s the fun in having a family if you can’t be familiar with them?”
Applejack nodded and lifted her glass of cider too. “Never heard truer words outta that mouth o’ yours, Rares!”
They both looked at Twilight, who eventually sighed and used her magic to levitate her coffee. “I guess you’re right.”
And, with a clink, they made a toast.
“Oh, look who’s there!” Applejack said, getting up from the table. “Hey, Dash!” she yelled to the sky. “Down here, you lazy mule! We said we’d meet an hour ago!”
Rainbow Dash landed right next to Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle, who started jumping around her like two bunnies with a huge caffeine overdose. Applejack walked towards her, still yelling something about punctuality.
“You’re sure your spell can last for more than forty-eight hours, right?” Rarity asked after finishing her tea. “I mean—”
“Don’t worry,” Twilight interrupted. “Sweetie Belle will be able to walk on clouds for a whole week once I’m done with it. I was planning to manually uncast it on Monday, in fact.”
Rarity smiled. “Thanks, Twilight.”
Twilight finished her coffee too in two big gulps. “It’s a very easy spell, you know? You could have cast it yourself.”
“I wouldn’t dare to. Unless it’s about rocks, my magic is not that great.” Rarity shook her head. “And I know Sweetie Belle is meticulously testing the resilience of her skull every day, but I’m sure we wouldn’t like her falling from such a high height.”
“Sure.”
“Say, do you want to come with us to Fluttershy’s once Dash has taken the girls?”
Twilight arched an eyebrow. “To Fluttershy’s?”
“Of course. As Applejack said, we’re pretty sure Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom will fall down that cloud mansion at least once.” Rarity rolled her eyes. “And I know Dash is a fast flier, but I would like somepony who’s actually responsible to be up there too.”
“Makes sense,” Twilight said. They both walked towards Dash and Applejack. “Does Rainbow know about that?”
“Applejack and I have chosen to hide our backup plan from her,” Rarity said. “Fluttershy will just go there and act as if she didn’t know Dash was foalsitting. By the time she arrives, we’re sure Dash will be desperate for help.”
Twilight smirked. “You really know your sister, huh?”
“Foals are like a hurricane,” Rarity said.
“Full of energy?”
“Extremely unpleasant when they catch you unprepared.”
Silence.
“My brother is very manly, though.”
“Darling, his legs are curvier than mine.”
Twilight opened her mouth to reply, but was interrupted by a familiar sound.
Plaf! “Ow!”
Rarity sighed. “For goodness’ sake, Sweetie Belle, get away from that tree.”
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God dammit, it feels so weird to see a new story by you that doesn't have my name on its description...
I would like to state that I hate the author for writing this. Not your fault, but I visualise everything I read and now I've got that picture stuck in my head.
Celestia damn it, you had to make that pun in the Author's note, didn't you?
DIDN'T YOU‽
That's right! I used an interrobang! I went there!
Oops, sorry about that. I don't know what came over me.
Seriously though, great story, as always.
That was wonderful. Sassy Rarity is best Rarity.
That was wonderful. I am in full agreement about Sassy Rarity.
And thanks a lot for making me look at Shining Armor and the Guard in a whole different light.
The "of" is too close to this contraction.
There seems to be a word missing here.
The "see" is too close to this contraction.
"His."
Cool. It was different. I kept thinking in rule sixty-three with every mention of Shining Armor. Sexy, sexy Shining Armor. Mmmmm...
...Sorry, I lost my train of thought there. You, sir, get a favorite and an up vote.
KBO.
This is brilliant. I really have nothing to say otherwise. It's perfect the way it is.
SimplyElegantly beautifulI was laughing the entire time I read this, and as soon as I was done I immediately double checked whether or not Shining Armor had eyebrows. Once again you've written a story that I'd follow you for if I wasn't already doing it
Okay, this story is so funny that I'm laughing my but of in mid class!
This begs for a sequel where Rainbow and Fluttershy details their experience.
Why no Twilicorn Tag?
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Aaargh. I always forget that the tag is not the same for the two. Given how I always write Twilicorn, one would think I'd already learn my lesson.
Anyway, fixed.
Mi línea favorita.
Very good.
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Yep.
In the part that Rarity explain she is the smartest in the family, I think you mean "Rarity blinked" instead of winked.
Also, in the last line "cutest foal in town", should have been said by Rarity or by the others?, because it's sound too redundant that she affirms her own affirmation of sweetie bell.
Besides that, one of the best one-shots/comedy style in the entire fandom. The way you portrayed rarity is forever now in my personal canon. Funny, witty, sweet and in line with the humor you can find in Equestria.
10/10
Thanks for giving me the mental image of a goat getting a handjob.
4414250 Rainbow Dash (curled in corner): The horror.... The horror...
Fluttershy: I don't know; they behaved perfectly fine for me.
Buckig swetiebelle and a tree. Fight for the greatist victor. Or atleast a onesided fight, trees favor.
I never thought of the Royal Gaurds as feminine before...
This is fantastic. I mean that very seriously. The characters feel... well, in-character, the general quality of the writing is good, and the general humor is rather dry, yet it feels very fitting and amusing to read.
What I think is worth noting is how natural the conversation seems to flow. It's not necessary for chatter to do that to be good (plenty of other stories I like don't), but the way the topic moves from subject to related subject, so on and so forth is really beneficial for something like this. It helps to make things more lively and easier to picture or even relate to while reading, which is something to pat yourself on the back for. Nicely done!
I probably should have waited to read this. I'm not saying that I necessarily woke up my family, I'm just saying that it wouldn't be for an accidental lack of trying.
This was too funny and entertaining, I just loved it. One of my favorite fanfics by far.
So this just made my night. Very well written and even had my crying a bit at the thought of Sweetie losing against a mud puddle
Thanks for the laughs!
Ah the joys of family.
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Hey, thanks for the kind words! Although:
Huh. No offense, but if there's anything in this world of ours worse than wooden or unnatural dialogue in a story, then I sure don't want to know what it is. A minimum flow in a written conversation is a must, I believe, or else absolutely nothing makes any sense, from a character's POV.
4419241 No no, I know what you mean. I meant that it's because this story is primarily dialogue, and that the flow is very, very good as opposed to just... er, good. Things like action stories or second-person narrations run on a different type of wheel (so to speak), and lesser flow isn't quite as noticeable. With something like this, where the conversation spans the whole shebang, the fact that it never felt like someone suddenly changed the subject is what impressed me. Bringing up Shining Armor when you did, for example. If he'd cropped up earlier it wouldn't have felt quite as natural. To me, anyway.
There's also a difference between the dialogue's flow and the... "lifelike-ness" of dialogue, I guess. I'm full of metaphors today. Anyway, even if there isn't flow in a conversation, if the dialogue feels lively it's normally not as problematic. I suppose that's what I meant by my previous thing; a lot of stories I've read (not just some Pone ones, but others as well) tend to have well-written dialogue, but the flow can kind of be in stops and starts or jump around. This is one of the uncommon times where something hits both marks right on target.
This was agonisingly funny. I may have to sell my ribs for spares, they are no longer in usable condition.
These are strangely yet amusingly appropriate to the lack of masculinity in the royal guard:
Ha!
Eh, it was okay.
ALL THE UPVOTES!
That was hilarious. Being the younger sibling myself, I slipped into Twilight's part of the conversation far too easily.
Being a middle child with a "run into trees" younger sister and older brother idol I see where everyone is coming from here.
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Yeah, the author has a big sister and a little brother too. I guess it shows. Write what you know and all that.
Weirdly enough, I haven't seen many "sibling fics" that aren't straight-out incest. There's no nice "Shining Armor and Twilight hang out and have a hell of a time together while being as dumb as siblings can be" fic in which they don't end up hooking up romantically, and that's a shame.
I mean, the whole adoration/facepalming relationship you get with people you grow up with is something very cool to see in written form, AND YET...
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"The Misadventures of Shining Armor and the CMC."
Shining comes to visit Twilight in Ponyville. Twilight accidentally turns Shining into a filly, and can't change him back right away. Shining - under the name Gleaming Shield - ends up joining the CMC.
That count?
This is amazing. I kinda want to see a long running slice of life story like this.
"Misadventures of the stupid" Or some such.
As much as I loved this story, I don't quite get what it has to do with the chapter title "Trees".
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Read the last line of the story again.
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Oh, now I feel stupid. Sorry.
Eheh... well...
Heh. Sassy Rare.
I guess being an only child makes me unable to truly understand. ...but if I'm like RD and get to live in a cloud mansion, I'll take it.
I GOTTA beef about portraying Sweetie Belle as dumb. Over the past four seasons, she's been the mastermind of the trio as often as any of them.
And really. Shining Armor as girly? He's the blockiest drawn stallion on the show next to Big Mac.
It is true when taking care of the younger members of the family, you have to just kind of stand back and let them play, een if it means they get hurt. Just a part of life, as long as it's not too serious that is. Can't put rubber on every sharp edge in existance.
Very cute story. Fun to hear Rarity and AJ talk about their sisters, though it seems like it's more to the benefit of Twilight in this story. I didn't see much bonding between the two, though that probably wasn't the point of the story. Seemed to imply that any sort of comraderie that the two shared, both having sisters, was already established before the story. I would like to see a different approach to this some day, but here it's fine.
Now, i know kids can't be that absent minded, but the slapstick still works to keep the reader entertained and engaged through the dialogue. Ending it with a laugh is also a great way to keep your reader happyand keep your fiction that much more memorable.
Not bad, don't regret reading this, and i t left me with a chuckle. Thank you for creating this.
*Grins* Very nice
My little sister and I aren't like that at all... *thinks for a moment*... oh wait. I antagonized her into putting a foot through my bedroom door
I love how you captured the relationship between younger and older sisters in this. Your descriptions and dialogue left me laughing so hard I had tears in my eyes!
I dunno my younger brother has the brains, my even younger brother acts like he's 40 (he's in kinder garden) and my friend and I keep on fighting a tree...
Oh my god I died laughing.