• Member Since 24th Jun, 2012
  • offline last seen Last Thursday

scoots2


I'm a writer of fluff, kibitzer, and especially interested in canon AU: Equestria Girls, the comics, etc. They are fun to play with.

E
Source

Cheese Sandwich babysits and plans a very small and very important party. Some unexpected guests appear.
His in-laws.
And they are not in a party mood.

Written for the CheesePie contest/prompt, “What Does Pinkie Most Wish For?” CheesePie, obviously, and fluff. Lots and lots of fluff. And disgustingly sentimental. You've been warned.

Cover art by DragonFoxGirl.

Chapters (1)
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!
Comments ( 52 )

Squeeeeeeee~! :heart: *rides Hype Train and commences read*

I feel so bummed out that I can't upvote more than once. :raritydespair:

Wow. You're writing is truly impressive; I'm humbled. Amazing job, and I loved the sappy goodness. Always a treat to get comments from you, and I'm excited to give you one in turn. You played out the scenes so well, and made the characters so believable that I became completely immersed in the story. I especially loved how Pinkie's family accepted that Pinkie was married with foals, and went on to have a great time with everypony. So adorable! A definite upvote and favorite from me :pinkiehappy:

Well, it seems that none of the emotes are good enough to convey how much my heart is melting.

This. Is. So. CUTE. I was not prepared for this level of cuteness.

I especially like how the Pies pretty much fell in love with the triplets. :twilightsmile:

Very cute, bravo. Though do you deliberately not state the foals' pony types?

“You are all absolutely ridiculous,” he said sternly, “and Daddy is extremely proud of you.”

:rainbowlaugh:Bwahahaha of course

“Pinkie,” he called, his voice soaring up an octave, “did you invite your family to the birthday party?”

“Yep!”

“Did you mention to them that we got married two years ago?”

“Oops! No, I forgot. Silly me! Why? Is it important?”

“Kinda, yeah.”

:ajbemused:Why am I'm not surprise Pinkie did not tell her family about the marriage.

“Grandma Surprise,” said Cloudy Quartz, glancing up at Cheese, “was a Pegasus.”

Ironic since Pinkie was suppose to be a Pegasus in the show during early production.

I really love this, although I kinda wish this was longer but I'm probably just spoiled (I really love your Cheesepie fic by the way). But what it shown is very sweet and funny.

Also, Cheesecake Surprise I LOVE YOU LITTLE FILLY!

Love it

Omg for the first time thus cheese pie story made me squeeeeee all the way to the finish!!!!! Keep up the good work!!!!

This is several kinds of adorable. Thank you for it. :twilightsmile:

(Also, until notified otherwise, I'm assuming Sachertorte somehow goes back in time and becomes Discord. Because chaos.)

I dunno, you guys. I think maybe I didn't make it cute enough.


4312367 Aw. Glad you liked it!

4312443 Thank you! It is definitely nice to be able to read each other's work again, isn't it? That's one of the challenging things about writing for the same ship--on the one hand, you WANT to read it, but sometimes you can't. The current thing's been tough to get going and I'm always afraid I'll let something drop. Yes, well--they were cool with it once they realized that the Pie version of a shotgun wedding wouldn't be necessary!

4312467 I still think it could have used more cute.:rainbowwild: Oh, sure. Actually, one thing I like about your version of Cloudy Quartz is that she's relatively approachable--for a tough as nails rock farmer lady. Plus, the triplets are adorable.

4312571 Thanks! They're all Earth Ponies. Cheesecake Surprise just has a little bit of extra loft. Like Mom, only more so.
4312635 Aw, thanks! Yeah, Pinkie was basically supposed to be Surprise. I love the idea that she's Surprise's great-granddaughter or something. And I adore Cheesecake Surprise. :pinkiesmile:

4312905 Thanks!

4313037 Thank you!

4314460 Aw, thanks. And well, why not. Given his mom and dad, anything could happen, I guess!

Oh my gosh! :pinkiegasp: Sounds so cute! Must read later! I really wish I could right now hnnngh

This was so sweet. I have to say you made a good use for my picture.

I loved it. It made me warm and happy.

4316087 Hope you like it!

4317021 Aw, that is GREAT. I love to hear that from artists: I always hope they'll feel that I used their art in a good way and one that feels right to them. (I enjoy some of your other CheesePie pictures, and they fit a bit with this story, too, so I hope people reading this will check them out.)

:pinkiegasp: :pinkiehappy:

I loved this. No words... So happy you wrote it. All those warm fuzzies have me grinning from ear to ear. They're all so cute. I love this entire family! And of course she would have triplets on her own birthday.

Gotta love being related to Surprise (even though she sort of exists in canon, but that stuff isn't nearly so official and there is probably more than one Surprise.) I think Pinkie probably has the most amazing lineage in the history of lineages. That's my theory.

Cheese is best daddy. :yay:

4312367
Same here. :fluttershysad:

AWWWWWWW!!!:heart: The.Cheese.can.cook. Maybe not that well, BUT I CAN COOK!!(Kinda...):twilightblush:

Wait she tripped down the stairs!? :rainbowlaugh::pinkiegasp:

4317985 Oh, I dunno. I think the cute could have been jacked up a bit more.

Agreed. If he got around to it, he would be an exceptionally affectionate daddy, although I can't help thinking both of them are a bit on the flighty side for it at the moment. The main problem I could foresee with both him and Pinkie is that their kids would get the worst nutrition ever.

4334227 It's a slightly less well known use of the word, meaning to dance or walk with light steps, and I think it describes her walk when she isn't pronking pretty well. I was afraid that if I had her skip down the stairs, she really WOULD trip down the stairs and fall.

4338453

The main problem I could foresee with both him and Pinkie is that their kids would get the worst nutrition ever.

I think the Cakes might help. Or pretty much any of Pinkie's friends. Mommy would certainly give them tons of treats and so would daddy, but I'm pretty sure Ponyville in its entirety would make sure they don't live on cake, cookies, and ice cream. Like, neighbors sneak them some spinach and healthier flowers and somewhat healthier hayfries. Kind of the reverse of what you'd expect. :trollestia:

Pinkie: Now don't ruin your appetites with all those delicious daisies. I have chocolate frosting for the chocolate chip muffins we'll be eating for dinner! :pinkiehappy:

Depending on what their kids are like, they might get tired of all the sugar after awhile. They beg the neighbors for alfalfa and get strange looks from the neighbors' foals. :rainbowlaugh:

I bet those kids were fed mostly on ice cream instead of mashed up baby food. The apple sauce was drenched in sugar too. Applejack cried a few times while watching Pinkie feed them or when asked to baby sit them once or twice. It was a crime against apples. :yay:

4338676 I was thinking specifically of "tired of eating snacks made by your Mom?" but Pinkie clearly thrives on a diet that would kill most other ponies. Look at the stuff she eats in Maud Pie, including an entire bag of sugar. Cheese is probably wired along the same lines, only the guy version: less sugar, more salt.

I understand that early in development, Pinkie was supposed to have Sugar Rush superpowers and the Cakes would be constantly replacing their front door because she'd be breaking it down, but for some reason, they dropped it.

4338740

I was thinking specifically of "tired of eating snacks made by your Mom?" but Pinkie clearly thrives on a diet that would kill most other ponies. Look at the stuff she eats in Maud Pie, including an entire bag of sugar. Cheese is probably wired along the same lines, only the guy version: less sugar, more salt.

He supports a lively addition of popcorn, chips, and that most important of vegetables: pizza. Preferably not from Slice of Life. :trollestia:

Pinkie will make sure all pizza slices contain the necessary amount of cupcakes on them.

I understand that early in development, Pinkie was supposed to have Sugar Rush superpowers and the Cakes would be constantly replacing their front door because she'd be breaking it down, but for some reason, they dropped it.

It was supposed to be like a "hummingbird" mode, so when she lost the wings, she lost that ability. I'm sure the Cakes are grateful and have no idea why. :pinkiecrazy:

I definitely liked this, but it feels like the beginning of a story - incomplete. Is this being added to in some fashion?

4352159 It was a short vignette for a contest with a prompt. I don't intend to extend it for now, except to the extent that almost all my CheesePie stories work together. Right now, I've got the big thing going on!

I should probably note that this isn't a certain future for them. It's cute, but I reserve the right for other stuff to happen instead, and building on it would make it more real.

“Pinkie,” he called, his voice soaring up an octave, “did you invite your family to the birthday party?”

“Yep!”

“Did you mention to them that we got married two years ago?”

“Oops! No, I forgot. Silly me! Why? Is it important?”

“Kinda, yeah.”

Well yes, that would explain why they were less than happy with Cheese when they opened the door to behold their three, year-old children frisking around them. :rainbowlaugh:

4378213 Still, they should know their own daughter better than that. Tsk, tsk. I've always agreed with you that Promiscuous Pinkie is about as believable as Alicorn Tank. It's just that in all the flurry of exchanging rock candy necklaces, things like marital status is a minor detail.

I'm only half-kidding. I think it IS the kind of thing Pinkie might overlook as unimportant, whereas it is something Rarity would never forget to mention!

4381462

Oh, and let me add that this was a very funny scene. Even funnier because I could just envision Pinkie's family glaring daggers at their daughter's "evil seducer" and Cheese, in an increasingly-worried version of Weird Al Yankovic's voice, speaking those lines.

Dawwwwwwwwwwwww! :pinkiesmile::heart:

Aww, this story is just too cute! I love the part that you say that the triplets fall under "oops", I laughed out loud and scared my mum when I read that!

I have an idea for what Sachertorte looks like. I'm currently drawing that, so I'll post a link once that's done, but for now I'll describe her.

She has Pinkie's pink mane, but with a few brown parts. It's also straight like Pinkamena, but not cause she's depressed or anything. It just is. Plus it looks really pretty. She has Cheese's yellow coat and Pinkie's blue eyes. (When she's older, obviously,) her cutie mark consists of six lines ending in stars, sorta like a firework (it'll be clearer when the drawing is done) and her special talent is explosives, which she obviously uses for the joke shop products and enhancing the party cannons and bomb. She takes her talent very seriously. When she's doing cool sciencey explodey things, she wears a white labcoat (for the look), glasses (she got that from her dad), and goggles ('cause, y'know, explosions) and ties her hair back in a ponytail.

D'ya like her?

4571243 That sounds neat! I don't think I've ever seen a CheesePie foal that looked like that, let alone a scientist, although Sachertorte's actually a colt. Let me know when he's done. And I'm very glad you liked it.

4381515 Cheese is Worst Evil Seducer. The post-party shenanigans and the "oops" was mutual, but the triplet part is all on her, and besides, they were quite married by then.

4571307
Oh, alright. I can't recall you using pronouns, I just sorta assumed they were all girls. I'll change her gender. (But this drawing's super cute. I'll keep it as his r63 version) :pinkiesmile:

4593976 now you have to send me the link!

Oh dear, why haven't I read this before? So sweet and happy. :pinkiesad2:

(Although I have to mention: If this would be the ending of your main arc it would be... abrupt? Disappointing? I don't know. It's just too short...)

4765781 Nope, it's not! It's just a humorous glimpse at a possible future. You're just in time to see two short fics related to this, but they're out of continuity--not really part of the main arc. That's all I'm going to say about that right now, but I think one of them will surprise people quite a lot.

I'd like to think that there's a lot more to love than getting married and having adorable foals, and assuming I do get them there, there will be more to it than this. I just thought it would be a cute idea on its own.

4765998

I'd like to think that there's a lot more to love than getting married and having adorable foals

Well, you left out the part that requires a mature tag, but even if you add that, there is still a lot more to love. I'm glad you see it that way. Looking forward to your new stories. :twilightsmile:

4766008 Let's put it this way: I know exactly how they wound up with triplets, and it begins with "Cheese travels a lot" and probably involves kitchen utensils and frosting, but I'm probably not going to write that!

EDIT: I forgot to mention that this was written for a contest with the prompt: "What does Pinkie most wish for?"

4766025 I never said you should! Please don't even think on it. If you ruin your beautiful CheesiePie love story arc with a clop story, I'll... I'll... cry. :fluttershyouch:

4766040 no worries. It's not going to happen.

4766040 Oh, and here's why it's not going to happen:
1. I know I have readers who like things the way they are, and I don't want them to feel uncomfortable or as though they have to stop reading;
2. I have a seven year old nephew and a four year old niece, and Pinkie Pie is their favorite pony. I don't want to write anything I'd be ashamed of if they found it.

. . . also, I'm vain enough to think I can write a good story without it. :twilightsmile:

That was a sweet story. I approve. Great job.

Aww, cute! I love it!
And the trip at the end :pinkiehappy: so great.
Another job well done, glad I finally got around to reading it!

Its beautiful.... I like how Pinkie and Cheese would act as a married couple, almost as if they were still dating. Love it, you did this so well :raritystarry: the OTP feels are too much for me, I'm gonna go and scream internally as I eat chocolate.:heart::derpyderp1:

This is sooo cute! X3 :raritystarry:

So adorable!

6210644 Thank you! Glad you liked it!

This story gave me diabetes.

Login or register to comment
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!