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scoots2


I'm a writer of fluff, kibitzer, and especially interested in canon AU: Equestria Girls, the comics, etc. They are fun to play with.

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First Base takes his brother, Flash Sentry, to Luna Park. Flash hasn’t been the same since the terrible events at the Fall Formal, and he’s even broken up his band. If throwing baseballs at him doesn’t cheer him up, maybe the arguing between one very odd couple will.

An Equestria Girls Cheese Sandwich/Pinkie Pie story. Takes place after some months after the events of Equestria Girls: canon-compliant up to Rainbow Rocks.

This is a teaser and a sort of prologue for my upcoming multi-chapter Equestria Girls CheesePie fic. See Author’s Note and blog entry for further details. The art is a commission from the fabulous WhiteStar1802.

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Ooh, yay, scoots has a new story! :pinkiehappy:

Cheese X Flash OTP :heart:

Huh. Interesting. I hear the idea for the upcoming story, and I can't help but think "Equestria Girls meets UHF." Probably nothing like what's going to happen, but I'm certainly intrigued. I look forward to it, especially if it explains the party people's prodigious prestidigitation.

As for this story, I quite enjoyed it. The aftermath of the movie isn't a scenario I've thought much about, but I doubt Flash is the only one who's been somewhat traumatized. As for First Base, I remember the feeling of knowing my loved ones were upset and having no idea how to help. You captured the dilemma of the little brother very well.
Also, I'm hoping he and Scootaloo connect over their shared admiration/hero worship of Rainbow Dash. :scootangel:

Thank you for this story. I look forward to the sequel. Oh, and one last thought:

It wasn’t a polka, or even particularly upbeat. It was definitely very mushy.

I found this to be a very charming story, great job on this!!

This looks like it will be awesome! :pinkiehappy: I'm really looking forward to seeing the full-length fic!

"... And that's how Equestria was made." :pinkiehappy:

I'll confess it was a rather slow start. Flash was... well, Flash, and First Base was a cute kid, but I think Flash rubbed off on him... :unsuresweetie:

I'm glad I stuck with it though. Cheese and Pinkie were awesome as ever; he was especially adorable at the end. I would give Cheese bus fare if I could. At least a bus ride with him wouldn't suck as much... I think. But oh that poor young man, forced to travel by bus. :twilightsheepish:

Wait ... How does Pinkie travel? Auuughh... my brain just imploded. I... I can't imagine her on anything, but a school bus, maybe. Maaayyybe. :applejackconfused:

Anyway, I hope Cheese has lots of friends, eventually. I'll be sad if Flash stays the only other one besides Pinkie. Although I guess Rainbow Dash and the rest of the girls are his friends too. :yay:

I'm sorry, Flash Sentry. You are... a little boring. :trollestia:

Although I hope Trixie never finds out that Pinkie and Cheese have better acts. :trixieshiftright: Or maybe I want that! Mwahahahaha... they will rue the day they out-did the Great and Powerful Trixie! :trixieshiftleft: I am crazy with love. :pinkiecrazy:

Sneaky edit: Won't lie, looking forward to the next one, but I'm really not into Flash or his li'l bro.

First of all, THANK YOU to everyone who liked or faved! I chose a toughie on purpose, but I probably bit off more than I could chew. Your support means a lot, and I'll happily toss in a tad of guaranteed 100% CheesePie fluff *with actual ponies* down the line, so it will be worth your while, I hope!

4158780 That's an interesting idea, but it's certainly no worse than anything I've heard before (NB: Flash is not good enough for him.)

4159049 I don't know UHF. I'll have to look it up. Dash just inspires hero worship, doesn't she? I don't know what they're going to do with the next movie/book, but I don't know how they can get around this without dealing with it somehow. I guess they left giant plot holes in the first one, so this wouldn't be anything new, but either everyone remembers it (weird) or no one has a problem with it (weirder.) I figure Flash would have a rougher time than most, since he was closest to it, but also had no particular things that would help (i.e., not connected with the Elements of Harmony, etc. ) For some reason, though, I don't think Scootaloo's brief flight with her favorite sports idol would hurt her a bit. She'd just have a vague super-happy memory.

And yes, it's probably musette, although there's quite a lot of mushy possibilities. I know I have an idea of what it is--not standard accordion repertoire--but I think it's better to let readers fill it in for themselves. I just like dropping it in that accordion doesn't always equal goofy polkas!

4159112 Aw, thanks!

4163163 Thanks! Hope it's worthwhile. I've been planning it for a while now--at least a month.

4163759 Yeah--I was afraid of that. It was slow for me to get started, too. You can imagine how tough it was when I was trying to narrate it from Flash's POV! I just needed an outside observer of both Pinkie and Cheese, one who didn't quite have all the puzzle pieces.

What, you think anyone would let Cheese have a car? No way. There seems to be a bus stop right outside CHS, but students also seem to walk, although we never do see how they all get to school. A lot of them hang out at the equivalent of Sugarcube Corner, which looks a lot like Starbucks, including in the morning before class (I think?) For my purposes, the Cakes bake all their stuff on site, thank you, and yes, they do live in the same building. From what I can tell, it's actually equivalent to Canterlot, not Ponyville (there's a Canterlot Animal Shelter as well.) I always do better if I base things on places I know, so for me, it's a mix of several college towns I've lived in, including the one I live in now; and we've got at least two bakery/coffee shop combos (one specializes only in pie.)

No insult intended to Flash, but I think this is the most we're going to see of him. Cheese already explained that he can't join his band, and honestly, he probably doesn't want to. Besides, he and Pinkie already took care of the problem by blasting through his depression and getting First Base to laugh. It was more about First Base than Flash, anyway. Making people smile, especially sad little kids, is their job. Still, I think Flash Drive might very well make an appearance. We'll need it. If it makes you feel better, though, Cheese may have arrived at CHS without any friends (local ones, anyway), but he's not going to stay that way.

I dropped in a lot of hints, and that's all I'm gonna say! :trixieshiftright:

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UHF was a movie in the 80's that starred Weird Al. It gave us this:

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Oh man, I loved UHF. I can only hope they do something like that, but it probably won't be nearly as good. :derpytongue2:

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Your support means a lot, and I'll happily toss in a tad of guaranteed 100% CheesePie fluff *with actual ponies* down the line, so it will be worth your while, I hope!

You're gonna spoil me rotten. :ajsmug:

That's an interesting idea, but it's certainly no worse than anything I've heard before (NB: Flash is not good enough for him.)

Heh heh heh. I can come up with much better pairings that Cheese might be horrified by. Heck, I have already written/inspired some more that he probably isn't wild about. Nothing is sacred to me. :trollestia:

But I do love my CheesePie. :heart:

I just needed an outside observer of both Pinkie and Cheese, one who didn't quite have all the puzzle pieces.

... ... ... Don't ask why. I have sudden thoughts of Rarity being flustered over her lack of a love life and deciding to meddle in Pinkie's. And Cheese gets to feel the repercussions. Much better ones than I have planned for him, mind you, but he'll... he'll have an interesting time, if Rarity can convince Pinkie of some crazy shenanigans (from Cheese's perspective.)

I have a Plot Bunny Farm in my backyard. They breed like crazy. :yay:

What, you think anyone would let Cheese have a car? No way. There seems to be a bus stop right outside CHS, but students also seem to walk, although we never do see how they all get to school. A lot of them hang out at the equivalent of Sugarcube Corner, which looks a lot like Starbucks, including in the morning before class (I think?) For my purposes, the Cakes bake all their stuff on site, thank you, and yes, they do live in the same building. From what I can tell, it's actually equivalent to Canterlot, not Ponyville (there's a Canterlot Animal Shelter as well.) I always do better if I base things on places I know, so for me, it's a mix of several college towns I've lived in, including the one I live in now; and we've got at least two bakery/coffee shop combos (one specializes only in pie.)

I'm now imagining Cheese and Pinkie sitting in tiny cars and wearing their respective fezzes. :trollestia:

But yeah, he would not have a car. I bet that means Pinkie has most places in walking distance though. Which is awesome.

Cheese probably covers the whole town each week though. I bet he's never home, except when he's sleeping. 'Cause as far as he's concerned, curfew might as well be bedtime. Ma won't let him have any fun. :pinkiecrazy:

I'm betting there's a rumor going around the school that he lives in the park or sleeps under the bridge, but of course he doesn't. He almost wants to, but his mother would kill him if he tried it. Pinkie knows the truth, of course. She's probably the only one who even knows he has a mother, though I doubt they've met. There would be a second crater if they had. :rainbowlaugh:

I'm sure most of his class mates think he's a drifter who just shows up to class so he doesn't get incarcerated or whatever they think the cops do to homeless kids who skip school. If Cheese didn't shave for awhile (or perhaps could actually grow some facial hair, depends on your ideas there), they'd think he was cool... But then he's such a huge party dork. Cheese defies all high school classification and I'm sure he takes great pride in that.

Then he meets EQG Trenderhoof and the world ends. :pinkiecrazy:

I'm sorry. You give me thoughts. :unsuresweetie:

Sneaky Edit: that pie specialty coffee/bakery sounds awesome btw. :yay:

No insult intended to Flash, but I think this is the most we're going to see of him. Cheese already explained that he can't join his band, and honestly, he probably doesn't want to. Besides, he and Pinkie already took care of the problem by blasting through his depression and getting First Base to laugh. It was more about First Base than Flash, anyway. Making people smile, especially sad little kids, is their job.

True, true. And yeah... I don't really wanna see too much more of Flash. He's just not where the conflict is. Well, story-wise. He's always a source of contention fandom-wise. :trollestia:

If it makes you feel better, though, Cheese may have arrived at CHS without any friends (local ones, anyway), but he's not going to stay that way.

I dropped in a lot of hints, and that's all I'm gonna say! :trixieshiftright:

Wahoo! :yay:

I can't wait. :raritystarry:

Also... :trixieshiftleft: :trixieshiftright:

Bulk Biceps decides that Cheese needs to build up some muscles and he convinces Cheese to go with him to a gym, because what else did they have planned that day? :ajsmug:

His plan doesn't work. :derpytongue2:

Really good story, really well-characterized, and in particular you did them as actual recognizable teens, not the uber-cool teens of teen dramas nor the anvil targets of after-school specials. Really well done! :twilightsmile:

I though it was excellent, which isn't a surprise considering how good a writer you are.

Would love to see more stuff like this, though would seem hard to pull off considering the characters pretty much have their own strata that don't entirely mingle. Dosen't mean they can't be friends that occassionally hang out, or something along those lines. As for the human Pinkie/Cheese fluff? Fluffy and awesome! Characterization was spot on, and made me emotionally invested enough in First Base enough I just wanted to shake the milase out of Flash's head.
I can't hit the like button hard enough.

I love this! Although I ship SombraPie, you've made this ship become of one my favorites!

4171505 Thank you very much! The funny thing is, I wasn't trying to make them like any kind of teens. I was trying to make them like ponies! I have to admit that Human Cheese owes a lot to the guys I was friends with in high school, drama nerds to a man, some of whom actually DID find it easier just to learn how to juggle as a conversation starter.

4172525 Thank you very much! I seem to write a lot of fluff, don't I? EG is a challenge. It's not so much that it's bad--it's just that there's less of an established framework to build on.

4175957 HAH! The thing every shipper most wants to hear! Anyway, thank you. They're just so much fun to write.

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Welll I am enjoying what you've done with the EG stuff, small amount you have. Besides, it gives you the chance to write some things for yourself to build the world. Won't be canon, probably, but definetley more interesting the what we'll probably see.

MOAR! I WANT MORE!:pinkiehappy:

Sweets! ( dat's wat I say instead of sweet )!:pinkiehappy:

I love the cover of this story!:coolphoto:

4166742 I love UHF! I literally rented it like two days ago

a long piece set in the Universe of Equestrian Girls would be hard:

Every pony in Ponyville being an High-Schooler in Canterlot except the Cakes, Granny Smith, and the Royal PonySisters does not make much sense. This is the fault of Hasbro who ordered Megan McCarthy to write it that way. For short stories which offer only a brief look into the world, it does not matter, but for long stories, it presents problems because one must try to find a way to explain every human who is a pony in the other Universe being an eternal High-Schooler in the Universe of Equestrian Girls.

4925589 Welp, if you haven't read the long-running EG fic yet, I'll let you read it and decide for yourself!

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I shall read.

Awesome :pinkiehappy:
I loved then way Cheesy grinned while Pinks was talking :rainbowlaugh:
And I really should try to argue like that with my brother too :pinkiecrazy:

When he noticed what sounded like a circus, I had JUST started listening to Sing, Sing, Sing by Benny Goodman.

That actually comes in in The Looking Glass World of Cheese and Pie!

From the Author's Note:

I have a blog entry with some further notes and an FAQ, if you’re interested.

But there's no link. :fluttershysad:

6323455 That would be here. I'll edit that in later. The next entry is relevant, too.

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