Rarity's Revenge

Rarity and her friends are invited to the Gala and unfortunately she bumps into Blueblood. This time he is interested in her but she has plans other than dancing the night away, plans that won't be so pretty.

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The Invite · 3rd Mar 2014 · 1,067 words
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A Better Beginning · 3rd Mar 2014 · 1,547 words
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A Brutal "Princess" · 3rd Mar 2014 · 1,950 words
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A Gruesome Discovery · 3rd Mar 2014 · 1,387 words
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The Interrogations · 3rd Mar 2014 · 1,721 words
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The Arrests · 4th Mar 2014 · 1,147 words
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The Prosecution's Questions · 4th Mar 2014 · 1,704 words
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Defense Mode · 4th Mar 2014 · 1,913 words
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The Verdicts and the Truth · 5th Mar 2014 · 1,331 words
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tocsin1990

tocsin1990 #1 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 4 · 2 · A Brutal "Princess" ·

well, chapters 1-3 were brilliant. lets see what the rest has in mind.

tocsin1990

tocsin1990 #2 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 3 · 5 · The Verdicts and the Truth ·

Why is this getting so much hate?

it was great. no inexplicable turns of events, just cold hard truths.

Liked and Faved. keep up the good work!

sunnybun

sunnybun #3 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 2 · 1 · A Brutal "Princess" ·

Most probably disliked this due to the amount of gore, but it isn't anything major. Cupcakes and Rainbow Factory still exist, you know.

sunnybun

sunnybun #4 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 7 · 3 · A Gruesome Discovery ·

Luna is terribly OOC, she would care more if somepony in her family was killed!
I don't know what to think of this story.

Charzoid

Charzoid #5 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 6 · 2 · A Gruesome Discovery ·

I agree with Jessiburro.I get people dislike prince blueblood for being rude to rarity but stories where they make everyone or in this case the princesses over the top cruel to him is just disgusting to me. To add insult to injury you added the point that he actually tried to be friends with his new aunt which I actually could see him doing even with his snobby ways and you decide to make her sadistically happy over seeing his corpse later.

Charzoid

Charzoid #6 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 4 · · The Verdicts and the Truth ·

Wow,why don't people at least tag things like this as alternate universes when they write them?

sunnybun

sunnybun #7 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 4 · · The Verdicts and the Truth ·

I believe everypony is a bit OOC. No dislike, but no like either.

StormLuna

StormLuna #8 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 1 · 2 · The Verdicts and the Truth ·

Thanks tocsin, I appreciate your comments. I don't know why this one is getting so many thumbs down. So many people claim to hate Blueblood yet when a story where Rarity gets revenge, brutal revenge, it gets a lot of thumbs down

Charzoid, Blueblood simply said that Luna gives him the cold shoulder, he never actually tried to be friends with her and he didn't become a corpse until Celestia slipped when trying to levitate him off of the spear.

I guess a story inspired by Vlad the Impaler, the ruler of Romania in the 1400s, just didn't go over that well.

StormLuna

StormLuna #9 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 1 · · A Gruesome Discovery ·

4037101 Rarity was not his new aunt. She claimed to be Princess Platinum, a princess from the Equine Empire. She figured that if she could make him think he had a chance to get on the throne over there that he would be easy to lull into a false sense of security and then punish severely, and obviously it worked. Luna wasn't a new aunt, she just found it hysterically funny and Celestia was very distraught over it, so technically it was only one aunt who found humor in this. I do have a question, what does OOC stand for anyway?

StormLuna

StormLuna #10 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 3 · 4 · A Gruesome Discovery ·

4037035 Blueblood was part of Luna's family and she didn't care.

Charzoid

Charzoid #11 · Mar 5th, 2014 · 8 · · The Verdicts and the Truth ·

4038418 I meant luna as his new aunt because she only appeared recently in his life and equestria after being imprisoned on the moon and he mentioned while talking with the disguised rarity that he had tried hanging out with luna but she just ignored him. When she returned in Lunar eclipsed she said she wanted ponies to see her as normal,understanding,and friendly thus why I called it OOC.
OOC stands for Out of character. Like say if twilight just woke up one day and decided to burn all her books,write a letter to celestia saying she hates her and wants her to burn in hell,then took the CMC out of school to play hooky while telling them learning is stupid. That's not the kind of character she is or would behave as unless her mind had been magically warped to be the complete opposite of herself. The only character in this that seemed in character were celestia and twilight,and even then just slightly.
Blueblood spat out applejack's food and got cake on rarity's dress,revenge at most for something petty like that I could see as getting apple pie on his suit or telling his aunt he couldn't go to the next gala as equally petty but effective insults back at him. Punishment should fit the crime level. Its like me getting tripped on purpose in the hall by one person and then someone else different stabbing me in the leg with a knife but I go to the police to have the guy who tripped me arrested and beaten up.

JakeTheRipper

JakeTheRipper #12 · Mar 26th, 2014 · 1 · · A Brutal "Princess" ·

uuuuummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmuuuuuuuuuuuuuhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh....
that was.... something..........

nodamnbrakes

nodamnbrakes #13 · May 2nd, 2014 · 4 · 2 · The Verdicts and the Truth ·

4037035

Remember, it's a cartoon character. There is no "She would do this " or "She wouldn't do this " because she doesn't exist and we can't find out what she'd do.

Snow123

Snow123 #14 · Jul 6th, 2014 · 3 · 1 · The Verdicts and the Truth ·

Unlike you, StormLuna, author biased in favor of a story you have written -what writer isn't?- I as reader can see why this was Thumbs-Downed so much... It's not that Blueblood was killed for being a prick... It's that he was murdered brutally and the murderers get off scot-free, along with the shameless amount of character-bashing, and either making the prosecution incompetent or mind-controlling them to make the story bend over backwards for this version of Rarity and Spike... and Luna the Tyrant, seizing power unlawfully by abusing said law or otherwise ignoring it.

Sure, Blueblood may not have been attempting to be Luna's friend... but we don't know that, as readers, because you never told us anything more than Luna giving him the cold shoulder... which, in that case, explains just where Blueblood, in blood, got his snobbishness from. Basically, the problem is that you portray Blueblood and those aligned with him as no better than dirt, and then you turn around and praise characters in your story for being even WORSE than he ever was.

StormLuna

StormLuna #15 · Jul 7th, 2014 · 3 · 2 · The Verdicts and the Truth ·

4650386 Snow, Luna did not seize power unlawfully. If you would have paid more attention to detail, you would have read that Luna is the one who handles the judicial affairs in Equestria while Celestia sits on her throne and looks pretty. In fact, that is the way it is in ALL of my stories where ponies have to go to court. It is the same way in The Price of Cider and Rarity and the Thief. Also, the name calling at the end of your comment was unwarranted. You can hate the way I ended this but you could also find a more tactful way to show your hate for me than "you self-righteous sick bastard." Oh well, it just allows all who see it to see that you as a person are most unpleasant.

Snow123