The Shadow of the Mare

TThe Dark Mare
MLP: FiM
Adventure
After the events of The Shadow of the Mare, Loop D'Loop takes up the cape and cowl of Mare Do Well again for her own selfish reasons. But her actions have consequences and soon she's in over her head.
OC
Mare Do Well
Other
Changelings
MagnetBolt · 83k words · 84 5 · 1.8k views

Loop D'Loop is a changeling who has tried her best to integrate into the small town of Liveryburg. She has friends, a job, and she's happy. Now more changelings are attacking the town, and she's going to have to find a way to save everyone without revealing that she's the same as the monsters they're afraid of.

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Mangaman 47

Mangaman 47 #1 · Feb 27th, 2014 · · ·

Sequel? (Sorry is I spelt it wrong )

Perteks

Perteks #2 · Feb 28th, 2014 · · ·

Yea its good story, sequel would be delightful.
Drop that story in few groups that for sure will give you more attention
Example
Queen Chrysalis changeling swarm
changelings need love too
Or maybe
changelings are awesome
queen chrysalis feeding grounds

Best is to throw it to all of them ;)

Sphaget

Sphaget #3 · Feb 28th, 2014 · · ·

This was a good read

Unknownlight

Unknownlight #4 · Mar 11th, 2014 · · ·

Fun story. I liked it.

Crystal Static

Crystal Static #5 · Mar 11th, 2014 · · 1 ·

Sequel to this, where loop's secret comes out, how she was mare-do-well, and how she is a changeling.

Do it.

McDronePone

McDronePone #6 · Mar 30th, 2014 · · ·

Love it!

SPark

SPark #7 · Apr 5th, 2014 · · ·

This is criminally under-rated. Loved it!

Flare Blacksmith

Flare Blacksmith #8 · Apr 10th, 2014 · · ·

you seriously need to make more chapters to this

Blobskin

Blobskin #9 · Apr 25th, 2014 · · ·

Halfway through, I forgot that Loop was supposed to be a girl. So when it got to the part where she's putting her disguise together and it said she had a dress...I was like...What? Then i was like OH!

That was a good story though

Swashbucklist

Swashbucklist #10 · May 13th, 2014 · 5 · 1 ·

This is a very, very cool concept, and a pretty sweet origin story. It could really use some work in building an atmosphere, though. In the absence of any senses or vivid descriptions, the action scenes especially were little more than a list of steps that weren't as exciting as they could've been. In spite of that, I do believe Loop D'Loop just became one of my new favorite OC's. The Batman Beyond reference was pretty fun, too.

“How did you know I like to read those?” She asked, confused. Whoops. I think I was the only one who knew about Jet's embarrassing habit of reading soppy tragedies and crying while eating large volumes of chocolate. Instead of answering I pointed to the other ponies.

"I...didn't. I was making a quip."

"Oh."

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