'Big Mac'

All the Cow in Applejack's farm go missing, and while it starts there, soon, Cow's all over Equestria start going missing! Applejack asks her friends to help her discover why. Meanwhile, Big Mac seemed to have been bringing in a lot of bits in for the farm with that new "secret" job of his...

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The Big Mac Picture · 6th Feb 2014 · 1,624 words
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That annoying voice · 7th Feb 2014 · 1,422 words
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Herr Director

Herr Director #1 · Feb 6th, 2014 · · · The Big Mac Picture ·

Ahh... the fourth wall... it hurts! Do you know who has to keep on fixing that thing?

Anyways, I like this story. Is funny to me.

Zeyon The Green

Zeyon The Green #2 · Feb 7th, 2014 · · · The Big Mac Picture ·

I think it might need a dark tag if it's what it looks like, but I guess I'll read to find out.

After reading, nope kind of meh though... Who do you think you are Pinkie Pie on Speed?

Gustauve

Gustauve #3 · Feb 7th, 2014 · · · The Big Mac Picture ·

I love Beef.

Didlsbrony4evah

Didlsbrony4evah #4 · Mar 15th, 2014 · · · That annoying voice ·

Your use of comedic Quasi-Meta is interesting. It's a style I could write pages about, though I'll refrain from doing so as I'm only really reading this to get a better feel for your methods.

Once again, an interesting concept that would be fun to see come to fruition. The afforementioned comedic Quasi-Meta is a good way to free yourself from criticisms aimed at characterization while your attempts at describing classic visual gags are similarly granted freedom of simplicity.

However, there are noticeable instances where the grammar pushes beyond even the leeway allowed it by your choice of writing theme. I'll get back to that later on as I continue to delve into your works in progress.

Primalhunter