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Russell Dickson


I am Russell Dickson. I live and work in Maysville, KY with my family at Magee's Bakery. I like to write stories form time to time and thought I would try MLP

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On his pie delivery, Big McIntosh, meets a mysteries filly name Mirage tries to temp Big McIntosh away form Cheerilee and all the things he loves.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 8 )

It's kind of a sad plot, but you got me to read so it worked.

The only thing I'd tell you is to fix Big Mac's name on the top.
"Macintosh" :pinkiesmile:

All in all keep it up.

This is a real interesting premise that could benefit from an editor and, in my opinion, not giving away the reveal that Mirage is a ghost in the description. And...

4070412
...I believe McIntosh is the spelling on enough merch that it might be the official one.

4071024 Thank you. I want to grow as a writter. I am happy that you enjoy yourself.

You did a excellent job of telling this story, I really enjoyed it, but it's sort of interesting, in a few of my stories I've had ghosts also, in the country sited, and in the royal palace.

Looking forward to more stories

4132112 Thank you for your kind words. The story I base my on the urban legend of the vanishing hitchiker.

A lot of stories are, but this one was much better...

Interesting. Sort of reminds me of the song, "Phantom 409."

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