Miss Cheerilee is hosting 'Meet the Family' week in school. Each pony has a family member show up in class and tell the class about their lives. Diamond Tiara's farther has had his turn, now it is the Cutie Mark Crusaders turn. And, it looks like Scootaloo family is all alone.
Not bad but please please go back and reread this you have a bunch of Murphies finest lurking in the story. Examples
they were force
the ponies that open the box
fibulas outfit
coould picking on
Scootaloo turn
know form Pipsqueak
police and reuse ponies
And so forth, they are a real jolt when you are reading this. Good luck on the edit.