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James Rye
Servus, name´s James Rye. I´m a mix of brony, geek, otaku and nerd. My goal is to write 100 MLP-fics. Dunno how many years that gonna take though. XD
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Aha! Here it is. I'll read this eventually.
Hmmmm.
Alright.
You have my interest.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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Thank you, if you happen find the time, please give me some criticism so that I can improve my writer skills.
Isn't there a group which does such critics though? I think I remember something similar like that.
i really want to read this, but i'm also afraid of what's gonna happen to twi or dash.
3327746 Equestrian Critics Society, but they are closed for submissions atm.
A promising start! Can't wait for more!
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Well, the competition forbids death so my "dark" hands are kind of bound. So if you're afraid that anypony will die, no, that will not happen. Will other bad stuff happen, yes, it will.
Will there be a happy ending? Eeeeeeh, who knows?
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Thank, I'll enter them and wait for the time they're open to submissions again.
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Thank you very much. Chapter 2 is written already and awaits proofreading, chapter 3 is in the writings. Once I get my eyes away from the linke/dislike ratio and the fav stats, that is.
I hope this isn't one of those "Rainbow Dash can't fly for rest of his life" stories, because they are just dump IMO
This looks good, I'll stick around.
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Thank you and be sure that ch.2 will ease your worries.
I have to say though that not all RD can never fly again fics are bad per se. If they are done right, like that this will really waste RD, losing the ability to fly, to be herself in that way, then it's good. if they just go and replace it with something else or go down right suicidal depression (which RD isnt either) then yeah, it's dumb.
A "RD can never fly again" fic would be to be slow, for the emotional mess RD will be after the loss of her wings/ability to fly and for the recovery of it. Either in a way that she can still enjoy life to an extend without flying (though I would just make the fic so that RD would start flying in other ways, like a ballon which would be too boring for her and then a airship which is not agil enough for her and then with the help of Twi and Pinkie creates the first aircraft of Equestria and impresses the nation and its habitans with its speed and agility and that even Unicorns and Earthponies can fly with it) or that she at least comes to terms with it in some way.
But yeah, many RD can never fly again fics are done in a way which I can't enjoy reading so I give you that. :/
I do hope though you will enjoy my story. As I said, next chapter will bring some new plot into this which will ease your worries. Or double them depending on how much you care for other characters besides RD.^^
Heh, who did you bribe to get this story past moderation with a cover image like this?
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I had to "eat a taco and a sausage with mayo".
Seriously though, it's just a bit salvia on Twi's horn and we all see Twi's horn in every episode besides other Unicorn horns so it's not a sexual part of her body, unlike lets say her plot or genitals. You could compare to a very messy peek to the cheek or forehead.
Besides that I have seen plently covers which were waaaay more suggestive than this one. Like one with two giant anthro ponies with huge breasts, both completely nude and the only censor was that they pressed their breasts against each other, hiding the nipples and raising the plump legs just the right way to hide the love mounds.
Then there are the covers with sexy lingerie, the "plot" covers, the "hide genitals behind censor bar or otehr convenient stuf in hte picture" covers, etc. Mine is pretty harmless in comparison.
3327746 criticism... Criticism... CRITICISM!!!!! MYAR DATS MY JOB
anyway i assume this also needs an editor... if so sign me up
p.s. yay like number 30
I await more, good sir. You have my utmost attention to this very interesting plot. Not to mention the writing's pretty good.
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Don't worry, i got it covered for now. If I got more chapters ready than my editor can handle I'll make sure to give you a call on the week-ends though. Till then please focus on your studies for your exams and the remaining chapters of Honey(on the)moon. Thank you very much for your help, Ody.
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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And my writings no good, if you had seen the rough stuff with all the spelling mistakes and grammar faults, you would have gone "nopenopenope" in a heartbeat.
I hope that I get word from my editor soon and can get up the second chapter today. Stay tuned.
3331965 k. p.s. MY exams are over in 2 days YAY
it took me a couple of lines to get used to your style(most of what I read the story teller is not as present in the telling letting the chatters do most of the work if that makes any scents at all) but after that I really like what you have and cant wait to see what happens next
Esta de poca madre su historia, porfavor siga XD
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Yay, I can make use of your editor skills 7/24 from tomorrow on!
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Thank you. Yeah, I like it more if the characters tells the story on their own or push the story forward with their thoughts and POVs. I guess that's due the well-made characters of MLP like our beloved Mane6 as I like to see how they would have view this or that event. I hope chapter 2 is to your likings.
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Thank you and don't worry there's hope on the horizon. Or more sadness depending on how you feel about chapters 2 ending.
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Gracias.
I mean, that was a compliment, right? It had a smiling Pinkie Pie after all.
Waiting to be edited? Good sir, nag your editor till he does it! do not say it's done and make us wait!
nicely done waiting will be the hardest part now and this star swirl fellow I do hope the makers of mlp read some of these fan made story's because the lot of you have really painted a picture of this pony it seems to me hes out of his gourd not so much in your story but in some of the others and im rambling arnt I? well any way cant wait for more
Atleast Rainbow isn't grounded forever, or i she?
So what the hell does this spell need to work? A sacrifice? Some kind of giving up ones magic to infuse it in the patient? A partial soul transfer?
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Relax, it's nearly 8.5k words to proofread, they should take their time to make sure to not overlook too many mistakes of mine.
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Thanks, you won't have to wait too long as I hope to upload ch.3 on sunday. And you're not rambling, I would also like to see more of Starswirl the bearded in MLP and hope for some stuff about him in S4.
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Chapter 3 will handle that "grounded forever" matter.
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.....Are you a spy?
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.....maybe?
Not really. But I can read between the lines and see hints. Having a lively imagination probably helps too...
Me needs more. Give it to me!!
I can't wait for the next chapter.
3339944 Well have no fear as I have read the chapter and it is awesome!
Your cover art....is RD giving Twi a hornjob?
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If any of my editors gave you the files to ch.3 you are allowed to whistleblow me who it was and I will deal with him.
Seriously though, enjoy chapter 3 and congrats to your imagination!
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I heard you. My editors heard you. MLP heard you. And you shall receive - Chapter 3! Fresh out of print! Enjoy!
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Then you don't need to wait anylonger, 'cause here it is.
Hope it's to your liking, have fun.
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Eh, yes?
I mean, it's not like the horn of a Unicorn or the tongue of a pegasus are explicit parts of their bodies in need of censorship, else the horns and tongues in the show would be black blocks, right?
I chosed this picture because it fit the premise for my idea so perfectly, read chapter 3 to see why exactly if you like to.
I hope this picture didn't turned you off to continue reading. I have chosen it 'cause I found it quite funny with its perfect fitting for my story.
Now this is just me, but I find the image to be a major turn-off. You should change it.
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I'm sorry, that it doesn't pleases you. But I will keep it for three reasons:
1) It fits the story like a clenched hand on a black eye and usually it's not that easy to find a great cover for your fic's premise.
2) I asked others and the Fimfic stuff if this picture is appropriate for Fimfic's standards. Turns out others likes it and that it's okay with the rules. And honestly, I've seen way more sexual pictures as covers than this one here. Even clop-pictures just with quickly added censor bars to them.
3) I like it.
I hope you can see past the cover and enjoy the fic for what it was written for.
After all, you don't see the cover anymore once you click on one of the chapters.
Thank you for taking your time to comment. :)
I gotta say im loving this story so far ^.^
Just dont cut it short like so many authors of good stories do
this is good as the last 2 and the use of the horn for healing like that is a nice idea it make since that such a wound could not be healed by a simple spell that twi's magic would need to be condensed in order for it to be more useful. (as some if not the bulk of it would have be burned up by dashes body in the changing from one aura to anther) a great balance between the act of helping a friend and pleasing a friend
Simplemente exelente historia, me encanta la convinacion que usa XD
3337797 Yeah MAKE HIM DO IT...
3338568 According to gdocs i did all teh work... and its odycay
Great story, love it, now MOAR for Celestia sake
MOAR
Also this remember me to Dawn of a new Day, the second TwiDash fic that I've read
I thing it should be unicorn , Twilight isn't an alicorn yet.
I think you may need to get your editors to recheck this chapter in particular. There are quite a few mistakes in here, and at points it was rather distracting.
I need more of this. It just got very interesting.
*sees cover art* If I didn't know any better I'd say this was going to be a clop..
*reads first two chapters* you're gonna go there, aren't you?
*reads this chapter* yep, you went there.
In all honesty, it's an interesting and original idea. Even if it is a tad predictable. On a side note, I really hope Rainbow will find out what Twi's doing before it's too late. I really don't want this to end with Twi without her magic. Then again, in it's own right that could be interesting, though you'd either have to end this on a cliff hanger or it'd end up being very, very long. I vote for options either 1 (Rainbow finds out and stops Twi) or three (Rainbow doesn't find out and you make this very long to deal with Twilight coping with the lack of magic).
But anyway, great chapter, I think you'd do well writing more adult themed chapters/fics, and I'll await the next chapter eagerly.
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Thank, I'm glad you love it.
I'm sorry to say though that this fic was planned and so far written to stay within 25k words. I hope that's not too short for your likings.
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Thanks, yeah I liked the idea that Dash had to do something to get her healing done and with I don't mean to lay still for Twi to use her spells on her wings to heal them. With magical wounds that can't be treated any other way than getting magic, I could make it so that RD had to do something to Twi to get her magical treatments to be able to fly again - the horn-sucking idea was born. XD
Also I liked it that RD would really be no longer a pegasus with such grave injuries, that she can't even nap on a cloud - unimaginable! In many other stories she "only" loses her ability to fly but she is still a pegasus in the end, here's she's just a pony, with no magical power whatsoever. A colored-up donkey if you want to mean.
And the idea to make magic become some sort of fluid which you can gulp up and even have a "magical" taste to it was too good to pass up. <3
I was a bit surprised though when I readed over the chapter and found it more perverted than I had it to be in my mind when I started writing it.
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Sorry for the misspelling, I'll change that then.
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Yeah, I've read that story too and I enjoyed it very much. You know that it got a comic too? It's on deviantart and on derpibooru if you want to search for it and got the same name as the fic.
With alicorn i didn't meant the race but the stuff Twilight's and all Unicorn's/Alicorn's horns are made of - alicorn. This had been one of the side-debates in hte bronydom whenever the writers meant with "alicorn amulett" an amulett "made of alicorn", the stuff, or an amulett "made with the image of an alicon=princess in mind". With S3Ep13 where Rarity spoke to Twilight that "she became an alicorn", the debate ended but I still like to use the word for the stuff their horns are made of which it was originally used for.
In male terms Twi's alicorn member would be a "meaty member".
Here's the link if you'd like to see it for yourself: Alicorn - one term for two means
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I understood that, yay!
¡Muchas gracias! :)
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Oh, I'm sorry for that. :c
I'll have either Timber or Ody once they have the time for it. Could you please point out some of the stuff for me so that I can send the examples to them? Thanks.
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You'll get more once I'll get notice of ch.4 being proofreaded. And chapter 5 is in the workings. Hopefully I can finish it in time before the competition ends.
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To be fair, it's not really clop, it's "cloppy" at best and "saucy" at second best. I tried to make sure that there wouldn't be any explicit words or sex scenes and with keeping it to horn and tongue, which we see in very MLP episode thus not "mature sensible" parts of their body, I could keep it teen. Though it ended up to be way more perverted than I had it expected it to be. ^^
Chapter 4 is on his way to be proofreaded, at least I'll poke my editors to speed up a little, then you can see for yourself what will happen next.
Also your comment gave me a nice extra idea for chapter 5, thank you very much both for the little muse kiss and the kind comment.
3346101 There's a few examples and most of them follow the same pattern; using the right word, but the wrong tense, so like "I didn't wanted her to feel like this," where it should be "I didn't want her to feel like this." I'll paste some examples below.
Should be "blame"
Should be "didn't find"
This one just strikes me as weird, a better way of putting it would probably be something like "Better get used to only being able to fly in my dreams."
Should be "thank you"
Should either be "Why did you thank me, Twi?"
Or "What did you thank me for, Twi?"
It's basically things like that. I hope I've helped in some way.
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For some examples, there were quite alot. Thank you for your help and taking your time to point me to my mistakes. So i noticed that after every "do another-do word" if I make it "didn't wanted" then it's wrong, but if it's "didn't want" then it's right? So changing the do into did or didn't is enough and I don't need to the other do-word in past tense anymore? In that case I made the work for my editors way harder than it should be.
But to be honest, I don't quite get the "thank you" part? How would that make sense in the context Spike speaks to Twi and RD?
I'll go and add those changes right away. Then other readers can have a more pleasing read than you had to endure.
Haha, they were minor distractions at best, they just sort of stuck out.
For the thank you part, "thank you" does work, if Spike is talking to Rainbow, if he's just speaking out loud, something like "Twilight can be thankful for whatever it is she feels thankful for" also works.
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Ooooh! That feels so much smoother than my "Twilight can thank for whatever it is she feels thankful for". Thanks for that one too!
Ehh slightly sad its gonna be so short but at least you plan on finishing it ^.^
Oh jesus I see a bad future that may harm twilight irreversibly
Im gonna take a big guess and say English isnt your first kanguage?
She didn't quite KNOW what she should tell Twilight
Theres a lot more than that, so many that i cant be bothered to go back and find em, some people have pointed them out though
Well, that was an arousing start of a chapter
EDIT: No, No, NO! That's not fair, why u do dis to me?!?
oh f
twi seems like she is not going to make this.