Aha! Here it is. I'll read this eventually.

Hmmmm.

Alright.

You have my interest.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Thank you, if you happen find the time, please give me some criticism so that I can improve my writer skills.
Isn't there a group which does such critics though? I think I remember something similar like that.

i really want to read this, but i'm also afraid of what's gonna happen to twi or dash.

3327746 Equestrian Critics Society, but they are closed for submissions atm.

A promising start! Can't wait for more!

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Well, the competition forbids death so my "dark" hands are kind of bound. So if you're afraid that anypony will die, no, that will not happen. Will other bad stuff happen, yes, it will.
Will there be a happy ending? Eeeeeeh, who knows?

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Thank, I'll enter them and wait for the time they're open to submissions again.

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Thank you very much. Chapter 2 is written already and awaits proofreading, chapter 3 is in the writings. Once I get my eyes away from the linke/dislike ratio and the fav stats, that is.

I hope this isn't one of those "Rainbow Dash can't fly for rest of his life" stories, because they are just dump IMO This looks good, I'll stick around.

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Thank you and be sure that ch.2 will ease your worries.
I have to say though that not all RD can never fly again fics are bad per se. If they are done right, like that this will really waste RD, losing the ability to fly, to be herself in that way, then it's good. if they just go and replace it with something else or go down right suicidal depression (which RD isnt either) then yeah, it's dumb.
A "RD can never fly again" fic would be to be slow, for the emotional mess RD will be after the loss of her wings/ability to fly and for the recovery of it. Either in a way that she can still enjoy life to an extend without flying (though I would just make the fic so that RD would start flying in other ways, like a ballon which would be too boring for her and then a airship which is not agil enough for her and then with the help of Twi and Pinkie creates the first aircraft of Equestria and impresses the nation and its habitans with its speed and agility and that even Unicorns and Earthponies can fly with it) or that she at least comes to terms with it in some way.
But yeah, many RD can never fly again fics are done in a way which I can't enjoy reading so I give you that. :/

I do hope though you will enjoy my story. As I said, next chapter will bring some new plot into this which will ease your worries. Or double them depending on how much you care for other characters besides RD.^^

Heh, who did you bribe to get this story past moderation with a cover image like this?

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I had to "eat a taco and a sausage with mayo".

Seriously though, it's just a bit salvia on Twi's horn and we all see Twi's horn in every episode besides other Unicorn horns so it's not a sexual part of her body, unlike lets say her plot or genitals. You could compare to a very messy peek to the cheek or forehead.
Besides that I have seen plently covers which were waaaay more suggestive than this one. Like one with two giant anthro ponies with huge breasts, both completely nude and the only censor was that they pressed their breasts against each other, hiding the nipples and raising the plump legs just the right way to hide the love mounds.
Then there are the covers with sexy lingerie, the "plot" covers, the "hide genitals behind censor bar or otehr convenient stuf in hte picture" covers, etc. Mine is pretty harmless in comparison.

3327746 criticism... Criticism... CRITICISM!!!!! MYAR DATS MY JOB
anyway i assume this also needs an editor... if so sign me up

p.s. yay like number 30

I await more, good sir. You have my utmost attention to this very interesting plot. Not to mention the writing's pretty good.

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Don't worry, i got it covered for now. If I got more chapters ready than my editor can handle I'll make sure to give you a call on the week-ends though. Till then please focus on your studies for your exams and the remaining chapters of Honey(on the)moon. Thank you very much for your help, Ody.

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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And my writings no good, if you had seen the rough stuff with all the spelling mistakes and grammar faults, you would have gone "nopenopenope" in a heartbeat.

I hope that I get word from my editor soon and can get up the second chapter today. Stay tuned.

3331965 k. p.s. MY exams are over in 2 days YAY

it took me a couple of lines to get used to your style(most of what I read the story teller is not as present in the telling letting the chatters do most of the work if that makes any scents at all) but after that I really like what you have and cant wait to see what happens next

Esta de poca madre su historia, porfavor siga XD

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Um....En ingles?