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Einhander


Just an old school hybrid spaceship/pony writing some stories.

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Ponies get older over time. They slow down. This is a part of life. But Rarity, Twilight, Applejack, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie can keep pursuing their dreams as they get older. Rainbow Dash can't. This is her last chance to be a Wonderbolt, and despite working her tail off, she's not getting any better. In fact, she's getting slower. She just wants things to be fair. She wants one last chance to achieve her dream.

She wants to be faster.

This is what happens when she gets her wish.

A three part story.

Featured 10/7-10/9/13. Posted to Equestria Daily on 5/2/14.

Now with a sequel.
MEDALS AND RIBBONS:

This story is part of Twilight's Library because of Skeeter the Lurker.

Twilight's Library Ribbon

And

It also won Skeeter the Lurker's medal.

Skeeter the Lurker's medal

Entry for the Writer's Group Contest & the Rainbow Dash Contest.

Winner, 2nd place, Rainbow Dash Contest.

Voted in by Twenty Great Stories on 11/3/13.

Voted in by The Royal Guard, March 2014

Edited by: SpaceCommie, Cola Bubble Gum


Artwork by: 2135D

An earlier draft of this cover art was featured on EQD.

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 384 )

This is definitely off to an interesting start. It's always interesting to see the very ways in the fact that magic granting your wishes can really come with a price. If you think about it, that pretty much is what happens if a wish is granted. You're being given something you didn't earn or work for. Of course it has its prices.

Rainbow Dash definitely does need to realize that. Sometimes life doesn't go the way you planned, but that doesn't mean it's a bad thing.

The cover is also really cool! It's very colourful and surreal, and I like how a bit of Fluttershy's face is showing up in her wings, that was a nice touch. :twilightsmile:

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Thanks for your feedback! 2135D did the coverart, and does great work. :twilightsmile:

3308813 You're welcome! :twilightsmile:

That's pretty cool, very talented work! :pinkiehappy:

Just the description of this story sends chills down my spine. I can't wait to see what you do with this because I can tell that it is going to be incredible. Best of luck with your series! I'll be watching.

~SolidFire

Actually if she had chosen the gift for Fluttershy, they could have lived a happy life forever and who knows what Fluttershy would have gained beyond the love of a special blue pegasus.

"Oh I know, Right Hoof.

No parent should ever call their son "Right Hoof" if you get what I mean.

Anyways we're off to a great start in this supposed interesting story here and it looks as if Rainbow will have much to pay, consider what we know from the Princesses and Queen Chrysalis. I'm fascinated by the journey to the heart's desire and the wish.

Choose Heart's desire- short path
Wish for Speed- longer path

Hmmm

I can kinda guess what's going to happen but I don't want to give away too much of my thoughts incase I giveaway a possible spoiler, unless of course you want my thoughts shared, until then I'll be keeping an eye on this piece. All I can say now is I enjoyed your story greatly. :twilightsmile:

TGM

Congrats on the feature Ein!

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Thanks! I didn't even know it was up. :yay:

“And how long do they let people try out for?”

That should be ponies. Easy mistake to make... no worries. It happens to me too.

“Rainbow., calm down, You’re not making sense..”

"Rainbow, calm down. You're not making sense..."
There shouldn't be any period and when trying to say a period of silence. You got to put 3 periods...

Now, what else do I have to say about this story... is that it's ingenious. I'm love this story and I can't wait for the next chapter. :raritystarry:

This was a blast to edit. I'm glad it's doing so well! :pinkiesmile:

The ship, I don't like, but hey! The other aspects of the story so far more than make up for it! Keep up the good work!

>>Talguy21 I agree however the rest I great.

Hey your story's on the mature feature box too!

Wait wait wait, feature box at thirty three likes? Damn, that must be─
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Post-read-edit:

Crystal... If I hurt you, I can't apologize enough. You disappeared halfway through the night, we, we thought you were dead/ Please, if I can make it up to you, I will, I just want to go home to my family."

dead Seem to have made a slash.

Anyway, what a headcanon this is. I can't help but wonder what Discord wished for. Maybe just to have everypony lighten up a bit. I imagine any number of Canterlot colts would wish for the same.

Still, "I want to be faster". That can end in so very many ways I just have to see where you're taking this. Personally I would have gone with a multi-conditional request complete with fully-necessary wording a five-year-old could shorten, but I can't say five words has ever made for a good contract. But if he could make "I want to be the sun" work then this just might have a chance.

I DO NOT like mane six pairings. I feel they should remain friends.

But I'll follow until that time actually comes.

You definitely have caught my interest here. The idea of her wish having more serious circumstances than she realizes is an intriguing concept and I wonder how this will go to her head.

The other part that I'm curious about is if Rainbow's newfound ability will overshadow her love for her friends.

But overall, excellent writing, nice use of Rainbow's thoughts. Let's see where this goes. :pinkiesmile:

Nice job on feature!

~Skeeter The Lurker

HOLY SHIT!
Le Sir. You have got my attention! XD
Immortal bad-ass, Rainbow Dash with a great destiny???? Where has this fic been all my life?!

This is actually one of the best fics, I've seen here, yet!
And even though I see a ship coming this way in the future, I even looked past that and kept reading. I mostly read for the shippings, so if there's a ship I don't like, I'm like, I'm gone; but you had me hooked from the beginning, ship or no ship,and I just couldn't stop reading. There is always something interesting about the next sentence.

I can't wait to read more <3

Colour me intrigued. I look forward to seeing more!

Did she travel in time? :rainbowhuh:

Finally read this.

This is gonna be epic.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Let me just start out by saying this.

...Oh my god.

It's been a long time since I've come to read a story on the front page, and you have no idea how glad I am to have done it. The sense of mystery you achieved with this story, the surreality. I think I literally made an O face at the Celestia and Luna reveal. This story was amazing. Just plain amazing. Out of almost everything I have read on this site, this story takes the cake.

You have my like, my favorite, and my watch.

I am honestly squirming to know what comes next.

THIS WAS THE RIGHT STORY TO PICK WHY ON EARTH DID PEOPLE PICK MINE DUB TEE EFF :twilightoops: :unsuresweetie:

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Gonna reserve judgement on a thumb, but you've got a fav for now.

Okay, this looks like it could go in a very interesting direction.

I have to say, I'm rather intrigued by Proteus. To me, it looks like there could be a lot of ways that this could be used in stories.

Well hell, this is pretty damn good. Looking forward to more. :pinkiehappy:

Editing-wise, this story is okay, but could have used a bit more work.

Content-wise...

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Why didn't this make the top five? :fluttercry::raritycry::pinkiesad2:

(Then again, the "Fluttershy & RD"-thing felt unnecessary... though that is probably because I have a general dislike for shipping within the mane six... :ajbemused:)

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(Although the Fluttershy + Rainbow Dash ship was unnecessary... :ajbemused:)

There's plenty of comments about this, but I'm just asking everyone to hold your fire on the shipping. It pays off.

Promise.

Otherwise THANK YOU EVERYPONY THIS IS OVERWHELMING.

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Edited myself... :raritywink:

And don't worry, it pisses me off almost everywhere... :trollestia:

3310944 Indeed, I can't imagine 6 friends liking each other.

It's interesting. I'm never big on Dash x Pinkie though, so that's got me a little off, but not enough to stop reading.

I want to see more of this before I consider favoring it though.

RETRO SHIP SPOTTED ON THE FEATURED BOX.

Congrats, dood. :twilightsmile:

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.... but this isn't PinkieDash? :rainbowderp:

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I wasn't talking about them being friends. I meant them being closer than that...

This fandom already produces too much of that stuff... :facehoof:

3311176 sorry I worded that wrong but yes, I agree.

I like this. Be careful what you wish for comes to mind.
I look forward to see where this goes.

The last time she pulled this off—and truth be told, only the third time ever— she was diving towards the ground, to save Rarity.

Will we be getting the details of Dash's second sonic rainboom in this story, or is that a reference to another work? :applejackunsure:


The world building you did with Celestia, Luna, and Chrysalis was a a nice touch. So was the moment when Dash finally thinks about how her death would affect her friends. :raritystarry:

Great, just great. Liked and faved, waiting for more. I love the idea of this.

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As did I. It could have easily been replaced with the canonical "Best friends since Flight Camp" thing.

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It's necessary for where it's going. Trust me on this. :fluttershysad:

3311985 All I'm saying is, it better be pulled off good. I already have a disdain for the more popular ships.

Ok, this was awesome. It had me interested from the first paragraph on down. The writing and the premise were all interesting and I love how Dash's first thoughts about how her freinds were going to suffer. This was a great way to get things started and I can't wait to see how it all comes to a head/;

Yup, I knew once this got out, this would likely hit a feature spot. One of those close calls in the contest, too so I'm glad this at least made it.

Live, Learn, Let go
~Cosmic

3309912 All that avatar needs is Kamina Glasses and you're good to go.
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This fic looks good, like, really good. It has a LOT of potential. It reminds me of the Golden Armor. Everyone KNEW it was going to go far, AND IT DID. So, DO IT! YOUR FIC WILL BE THE FIC THAT PIERCES THE RATING SYSTEM!
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This could be worst then double rainboom :rainbowderp:

I see an AU tag, but no explanation for ignoring the wedding's Sonic Rainbow. I thought, y'know, it'd be an actively older Dash. I stopped losing interest at the four year limit. The idea of an older Dash still going for it seemed interesting. A still-arguably-in-any-sense young Dash melding with a magic... Thing (sorry, didn't get that far), just seems kinda silly.

How many chapters do you plan on writing?

Faved, for awesome description and concept. I'm sure the writing is good too. Will read when I have time. Long weekend coming up. So pumped to chill and get's some reading and righting done. That is, if Final Fantasy XIV doesn't suck up all my free time like it has been since I bough the damn game.

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