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Just an old school hybrid spaceship/pony writing some stories.

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Spike figures out that Cheerilee is making up reasons to visit Twilight at the library, and Rarity further figures out that it's because she must have a crush on Twilight.

When Ponyville's dedicated fashionista combines forces with Ponyville's only dragon to bring two adorably awkward book loving mares together, nothing can go wrong! Except perhaps, everything!

Oh yeah, and some pony ordered 20 trampolines and a bunch of other stuff that keeps getting delivered to one wrong address after another because of the world's worst delivery pony, Blue Bonnet.. More on that later.

Re-tagged to reflect that it's a Twi/Cheerilee, Mane 6, CMC and Blue Bonnet (Background pony) story.

Also, it's fair to say this is also a AppleDash and Fluttershy / Background pony shipping story. Also ScootaBelle? .
ARTWORK BY WACKEDOUTPET

Chapters 3-10 have been edited by the amazing TheLastBrunnenG

Chapter 9-10, attention must also be paid to pre-readers Guy Incognito, Cola Bubble Gum, and SpaceCommie

Chapters 9-10 also edited by SpaceCommie

Featured May 2013! ADDED TO TWILIGHT'S LIBRARY NOVEMBER 2013! FAN-ART ADDED MARCH 2014!

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 856 )

First!!! And I enjoyed your story very much.

Kinda giving away the true owner of the trampolines early there.

But anyway I really like the prose in this and already the Cheerilee x Twilight vibe is strong. Good dialogue too. Will track and like.

Eip Eiknip is Pinkie Pie's name backwards.

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Agreed, love the story but the next chapter would probably do well to focus a bit more ;)

Eager to see more!

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Indeed, a common trick by Vamponies.....

:pinkiegasp:

Pinkie Pie is a VAMPONY!!!!! :pinkiecrazy:

Interesting. I'm willing to see where this goes.

i shall pursue this fable and see where it leads me

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i thought it was ringing some bells:trixieshiftleft:

you crafty fucker, mr author:moustache:

We're off to a good start! The writin style is excellent, the dialogue and shenanigans had me chuckling constantly. This should prove interesting! :twilightsmile:

Pinkie Pie with twenty trampolines... :rainbowderp:

...I feel a great --

(--agreatdisturbanceintheForce?Asifmillionsofponiescriedoutinterrorandweresuddenlysilenced?Thatkindadisturbancehuh?huh?huh?) :pinkiehappy:
(...no, just a little headache.)
(Ah know how ya feel, sugarcube, Ah usually need a couple o' aspirin after talkin' ta Pinkie too long, mahself.) :ajbemused:

With the trampoline thing, I couldn't help but remember The Emperor's New School.

Okay, in my read later list. when it has a few more chapters I'll be checkin this out

And this entire time Spike keeps thinking, 'Wow, these ponies are idiots. At least Rarity is beautiful, kind, generous, smells like vanilla...' This probably went on for a few minutes.

There's some definitely fluffy cuteness to this. It would be funny if Spike and Rarity go through all this and end up with Twi and Cheerlie are just friends and they blew it out of the water... maybe even got a little romantic themselves, but I don't see that happening with this setup. Twi and Cheerlie are playing well off each other, and this should be interesting. I'm still hoping for a little Sparity on this ride :moustache::heart::raritywink:

Response = overwhelming. Thanks, everypony! :raritywink:

Constructive Criticism = acknowledged and will be incorporated into next chapter (which is almost done, and will be a little less complicated- basically cutting a subplot for now) Also I plan to go back and do a little edit on Chapter One over the weekend, since there's some grammar stuff I didn't catch and feel silly about now. :facehoof:

Phone battery = constantly dying, since I'm writing this on a subway commute to and from work.:rainbowderp:

Current plan is about 7 chapters, plus or minus.

is it sad that it wasn't until the last line that I realized that Eip Eiknip was :pinkiehappy:

I am liking this alot. I'm a sucker for Twilight x Cheerilee and this one pulls at the heartstrings. They're both super adorkable and it's apparant right away that Cheerilee has a soothing effect on Twilight. Also props to Spike for figuring it out. I hate it when authors dismiss him too readily, considering him an obstacle in any kind of Twilight shipping. Using him as a catalyst is a much better alternative to dismissing him outright.

Tracked and liked.

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Also props to Spike for figuring it out. I hate it when authors dismiss him too readily, considering him an obstacle in any kind of Twilight shipping. Using him as a catalyst is a much better alternative to dismissing him outright.

Thanks! Yeah, I figure that almost any ship, unless it's Twilight x Rarity, Spike would be in favor of it. Twilight's basically all the family he has, and why wouldn't he want her to be happy?

Hope you enjoy the new chapter! :twilightsmile:

Adorkable is right, this is some great stuff! Earned yourself a gold star and a thumbs up with this one. It does need a good proofreading - there's a fair share of grammar and punctuation here needing clean-up. It's not enough to detract from the story, though, which is shaping up to be plenty of fun.

I'm gunna guess that the next chapter will have a package being delivered for a Ms. Jappleack :ajsmug:

" On hearts and hooves day, two stallions and three mares basically asked her out, and she had them all sit at the same table and drink Raspberry Lemonade and discuss the finer points of the history of the holiday. They were so sad and confused when they all left… well, not everyone, two the of mares had seemed to pair off and had an okay day."

That one almost caused a spit take of my own I'm really liking this fic so far cant wait for more.

sahib onward is an anagram of rainbow dash:rainbowlaugh:

All adorkableness aside, which is really good by the way, I'm feeling really bad for Blue Bonnet:raritycry:

Sahib Onward

so both of them are sending random items all over the town? i wonder what they are planning

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Yes... What 'they' are planning...

(Maniacal laugh)

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okay what i gathered from your comment, is that they are all send by a single pony, who encodes the name of the recipant in some way( Pinkie sure loves the Trampolines and Sahib Onward(don't want to give it away:twilightblush:) would surly love the googles)

And in the distance, if she squinted hard enough, Scootaloo could swear she could see a pink blur bouncing from spot to spot, and if you focused you could faintly hear:

“weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee………..”

I knew it. Pinkie Pie with twenty trampolines.
(WHEEEEEEE!Bouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncybouncy...) :pinkiehappy:
(PINKIE!)

Be afraid. Be very afraid.

("Mare-it-al" law? It's pronounced mar-shall law, you... you... stupid blank flank!)
(Then why isn't it spelled that way, huh?) :scootangel:
(Wow. Do you ever pay attention in class?)
(Probably too busy staring out the window trying to catch a peek at her mare-friend!)
(Oh, like you have room to talk, Silver Spoon. I saw you making those goooooooogly eyes at--)
(GIRLS!)
(...uh-oh.) (a-heh...) (eep!)
(...)
*whispers to Scootaloo* (wow, you were right... he does have a Stare-of-Doom just as good as Fluttershy's...)
(you three settle down and give...me...back...my...keyboard.)
(Yes, sir.) (Yes, sir.) (Yes, sir.)

(Dang... can y'all teach me an' Rarity how t' do that?) :applejackconfused:

Cheerilee and Twilight?

That sounds like it would make AWESOME clop.

*Sees Teen rating.*

Oh...Well, it still looks good. I'll read it.

More awesome Spike and he's acting pretty mature in this one. As for the Alicorn stuff, I honestly don't think anyone considers it canon, yet. We've only seen that she becomes an alicorn and we're left with zero knowledge on how that goes. You can only write canon when you know what canon is. No one's seen a single episode featuring Twilacorn. I guess we're all waiting for season 4 to either convince us that Twilacorn is indeed a bad move, or convince us that we've been hating on something for no reason.

I'm glad to see another chapter so soon. This is awesome and Cheerilee seems to have hit it off with Twilight. Hehe, Operation: Adorkable.

I think we all saw the real name there, but it's not like you tried THAT hard to hide it. X3

Anywho, I shall continue reading now...

2620680 For some reason I thought of "No! I don't want that!" when I read your comment

Thank you for putting Rainbow Dash's name right after Sahib Onward, otherwise I wouldn't have figured out that she mixed up her letters to make the name. Pinkie Pie's backwards one was easy. Now why are those two playing pranks on the poor mailpony? Did he do something wrong?

2620474 Anagram, I was right! I was trying to remember what the right term for that thingy was! :rainbowlaugh: Glad to know I was right! :duck:
(Took a few seconds, but yeah, still easy. (Though whai would Dashie and Pinks be pranking their friends like that? That's just weird, not funny, and it's making that stallion's life hell.))

Great chapter.

The whole postal mixup thing is okay as a running gag. Not worth putting into the story description, but funny enough. Hopefully it stays one mixed up delivery per chapter or less.

Derpy, why are you scrambling names and addresses?

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I did even worse.
I didn't get it until I read your comment:pinkiegasp:

Oh this is awesome. :rainbowlaugh:

And surprisingly touching with Rarity and Spike just then. :twilightsmile:

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The flying-suit from the next chapter's owner is an anagram of :rainbowdetermined2:. I wonder when we'll get a cipher of princess celestia...

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Because love can hurt, Rarity. It can be wonderful, but it can hurt if the other… pony doesn’t feel the same way. And it can hurt not knowing and letting it just be in your heart as a wonderful dream… but it hurts more if you know for SURE that it’s not going to happen.

Then Spike, I’ll say this: there is something worse than confessing one's love and knowing it’s not meant to be… and that’s realizing too late that something was possible, but being too blind to see.

Obvious foreshadowing is obvious.
I'll also note that Rarity seems rather oblivious here. I suppose we'll see how oblivious when it comes time for her to meet her client.

Also, I enjoy meta spit take humor way to much. :yay:

These shenanigans are cheeky and fun! :twilightsmile:

Awesome story, despite several grammar issues. Looking forward to more!

Umm...Pinkie...? What are you doing...? :unsuresweetie: Sorry the ending of this chapter really stuck out to me. The story certainly has me intrigued though. Better favorite it so I can keep up with it. :pinkiehappy:

"...crud." said Spike. "I'm sorry Rarity.

"

"Pinkie's just being pinkie." They send in tandem.
*Pinkie
*said

This is... madness. You have my attention.

That 70's Show reference FTW! This story has given me an extreme case of the giggles throughout. I appreciate that. :rainbowlaugh:

Well, Eip Eiknip is obviously Pinkie Pie. Sahib Onward? Drawno Bihas? ...Draconequus?

I am liking this... But an editor, you need one. :ajbemused:

A dyslexic mail pony, eh? :rainbowlaugh:
Loving this story so far. Definitely going to track it.
I must say, I hope you plan on continuing past the "And then they started dating" stage that most shipping fics tend to stop at. It's all well and good reading about what happened before they started dating, but I'd love to see some actual dates between Twilight and Cheerilee.
It would be adorkably awkward and adorably romantic. :rainbowkiss:

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