Rarity has always been the kind of pony to be generous and nice to everyone she knows; however, the unicorn has become especially kind towards Zecora, the Zebra outside of town who she shunned for so long. Not wanting the mare to keep her around just because of long-forgiven guilt, Zecora creates a special plan to help Rarity overcome her tensions for good.
However, as connections strengthen and bond between them, what else might occur?
I want to give a quick thanks to Bad_Seed_72 for her editing assistance.
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Really interesting premise, but the execution is kinda lackluster. If you could polish this up, you'd have a potentially great fic.
This seems like a potentially cute idea -- but your paragraph formatting is really screwy and hard to read. Rules which need to be observed:
(1) If you're going to indent the first line your paragraphs, you must do this for all paragraphs. Right now, you're leaving all of the dialogue un-indented.
(2) If you're going to put a blank line between paragraphs, again, you must put one between every paragraph. Again, you're leaving no separation between consecutive lines of dialogue.
(3) If a line of dialoghe is meant to go together with an action or an attribution, don't do a line break to put the dialogue on a separate line without indentation.
In other words, don't do this:
Do this:
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I just re-formatted it as much as I could. Thanks for the advice.
Nice idea. I really like the idea of such a pristine lady getting it on with a smoky, sultry zebra. Zecora's teasing sure was fun. But this bothered me:
How could she looks at "all" her friends and then at Spike? It sure would be cold and prejudiced of her if he's not her friend after doing so much for her.
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Edited it. Thanks.
If Spike knew about this then Rarity knew of Spike's feelings and has been leading him on all this time!!!!!
i don't really like the sense of entitlement all her friends seem to have for what is rightfully none of their goddamn business
As much as I like the drama filled action, GET TO THE POINT!!!!
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Patience.
Not a bad start and I look forward to seeing more, I can say I sort of like how you wrote out the Mane 6 reacting to Rarity being in a relationship with Zecora. It at least doesn't default to three are happy/proud, one is mixed, and Applejack being a homophobe.
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Favoriting the story cuz I love this concept. Keep going.
Thumbs up for Zecority alone. We need more M6 x Zecora. Will read soon. Or in a couple days. I dunno. Gonna play payday 2 now.
Not a bad action scene, and great to see Rarity do some action for once!
Is it possible to say Zecora is just as generous and even more so than the element of generosity herself?
Love it.Btw in the idw comic it reveal that one of her fears was to be replaced with someone with none of her fault. which suggest she does know them and fear one day her friend might abandon and shun her because of them.
Sapphire Shores + Rarity's parents x Rarity's baby pictures(Sweetie Belle) = TWPT!!!!!
good chap.
A true tragedy has occurred!
Sir, I compliment you. You get me to read romance that's out if my comfort zone. Thank you
Where's Opal?
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Fluttershy was looking after her while Rarity was in the Everfree Forest.
bet you ten to oe she accidentally thrown a bag of radish in excitrement and cause a chain of events, that might had set something on fire.
I have a feeling that this is something akin to the Noodle Incident... something so horrible, we must never speak of it again!
Awesome chapter! You definitely earned the Comedy tag in this one. Can't wait to see how Sweetie behaves at Zecora's...
Hooray for Zecorarity! I can't fathom why this has such a high percentage of downvotes. The few grammar goofs and typos don't warrant it, I think, and the story feels good. Rarity is spot-on, although Zecora feels a little bit thin. Maybe it's that? Or just the regular raid-shipfics-we-don't-like drive-by downvoting?
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Pretty much. This site is notorious for that, unfortunately...
just up to date, and wow, just trying to wright a story with Zeccora being a main charictor is a challenge, and i have to say you're pulling that off quite nicely, and the story's amazing too
You, sir, are a genius.
I swear she (Zecora) has to be psychic to get the rhymes she does. Oh and I'm enjoying the story.
Okay who here aside from me thought that the glue incident should've happened to Angel?
BWAHAHAHA! I'm sorry but that's hilarious
Getting close, even Sapphire can tell.
God. I love this story. The fact that it's Rarity gives it a point. The fact that it's Zecora with one of the M6 gives it a point. The fact it's Raricora gives it like five hundred points.
Rarity is obviously familiar with the Exact Words trope.
Great chapter! They're getting close already... nice little hints there.
And you have the rhyming scheme down perfectly!
Dayum!
So much d'aww and lulz in this one. Rarity has some 'splainin' to do...
Sweetie Belle is best chef.
Seriously though, that filly is like a one-man wrecking team...
Anyhoo, great chapter! Can't wait for the morning-after!
Okay you have got to tell us the Relish Incident.
Romance and drinking DOES NOT make a relationship.
I love crazy pairings. Probably helps that this story is actually good.
not trying to be demanding but, i want next chapter and i want it now!
Thunderlane has a black coat not grey.
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Meh... I would say either one works.
I laughed so hard when Rarity didn't remember the whole night at first.
I have a feeling there's gonna be a bunch of shenanigans on this date!
And poor Zecora...
"Dreams, why must you haunt me so? Keep it up, and I'll tell you where to go!"
... Now I'm doing it...
Oh... COME THE FUCK ON RARITY!
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Ummm...
A comma might be helpful for a statement like that.
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It's Rarity's fault... FUCKING RARITY.
"Rarity and Zecora really need to get into gear an bang already."-Cloud Kicker
Thunderlane shouting at Rarity out of nervousness was absolutely hilarious.
And Zecora finally realizes it!
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He was following the Shining Armor guide to flirting.
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