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Yukito


Trixie and Twilight are best ponies! (Diamond Tiara is best filly :D )

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In an attempt to end the constant war between the Cutie Mark Crusaders and their biggest enemies, Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon, or at the very least tone it down a bit, Cheerilee decides to put the five of them together in the same group for the upcoming camping trip. What's the worst that could possibly happen?

Sweetie Belle and Silver Spoon shipping inside. Thou hath been warned...eth.

This fic was originally inspired by Your Antagonist's 'The Serenade of Silver Belles', which you should all go and read.

Was originally going to be just a SilverBelle fic, but decided to expand it to also include background stories for Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon.

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 177 )

AND THEN THEY FUCKED

1685479 Dude, how do you find time to comment on every story I look at? Is it...toomuchfreetimeitus? :trollestia:

1685623 :moustache: I need to visit your page.

EDIT: This page. I like it! ANOTHER!

1685650 :pinkiegasp: I LOVE NIRVANA!
:yay: You rock! Woohoo.......


See what I did there?

1685713 You should read my story. NOT THE MATURE ONE but the other one. :twilightsheepish::twilightblush:

Okay, well aside from the little chat thread you've got going on above, I'm certain you'd like some actual feedback! This story was fucking good, and I'm looking for more. The constant squabbling, regular and expected fights, the "oh shit did she really just say that?" moments, Cheerilee's shittastic judgement, all makes for delicious conflict to overshadow the slowly emerging dawtasticness that is the main Silver Belle (friend?)shipping storyline! A really promising start to a really awesome fanfiction! Also, you had fencing, and while my inner action writer says you should've gone way more in depth with the actual fencing between AB and Silvers ( page length sword fight would've been sweet!), ya did good. Ya did damn good. Aside from some minor phrasing issues that I don't care to point out I can honestly say

Please write more!

Loathe,
Your Antagonist

This is already proving to be a good story, I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Nice work.

I like it :)You captured the spirit of their useless fights well.
Too bad there's no mature rating (yet?) :p

Not bad so far. I'll read the 2nd chapter after I get back from a few errands.
Word of advice? Don't use parentheses, they just look bad and there's a reason nopony uses them.

Nice Slender referance in there. I can't wait for more.

This is good. Very good. I wanna see more so keep it up! :pinkiehappy:

Yes, tracking with the force of a thousand suns!! :pinkiehappy:

Aww, sweet of... Sweetie Belle. :unsuresweetie: Well, okay. But it was still nice. :pinkiehappy:

Damn, this is good! Very organic and natural-feeling flow to the two. I approve heartily.

New story update? Check.

It's that one shipping story I like? Check.

17,000 thousand words? Check.

Reading this while I have more productive things to do? Double check.

Wonderful except-how can hooves tickle? :rainbowlaugh::heart:

Christ, that was long. Good but long.

1740255
Don't you know? All ponies, even Earth Ponies, have at least 50 types of magic in them, and one of the prominent magics in an average ponies system is Tickle Magic. Unless they have TMDS (Tickle Magic Deficiency Syndrome) or UTMD (Uncontrollable Tickle Magic Disorder) you can harness this Tickle Magic at will and spread it over another ponies body in a motion called "tickling." Through some really hard to explain magical reaction between the foreign Tickle Magic and the various magics of the body it is entering we get the end result- a laugh.

Remind me not to pissed off Cheerilee.

hehehe i love silver belle pairings. keep up the good work.
will diamond and one of the other cmc end up together? if so i'd like to see diamond and scoots.:pinkiehappy:

Good chapter, but it was way too long. If at all possible, could you make it do that I can read the next chapter in under 45 minutes, please?

Man twi must have receive a lot of love :twilightblush:
Beside exellent story

1741492
I personally like to ship DT and AB. However, DT won't be shipped in this story. I have another project planned for a DT shipfic, after this one's finished.

With so many 'hate' fics written about Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon recently it was nice to see something portraying them in a somewhat more pleasant way, hope you choose to continue this.

L4

:heart:

i have no word, just all is perfect.

Okay, this was chock full of win. :yay: It's late here, so for the moment, that's all I'll say. But seriously, WIN!

1740255
You're gazing into the world of magical talking ponies. Your argument is invalid. :trollestia:

Damn this chapter was long, and that makes me happy.
I love longer chapters and this one was just awesome.
Very well done.

1743934 DT and SL ship is will know, be becasue of there stoger will.

You don't mind if I advertise this kickass story in the next chapter of The Serenade of Silver Belles do you:raritywink:?

Loathe,
Your Antagonist

1814346

I don't mind at all. In fact, I'd be quite honoured :D If it wasn't for that story, I never would've thought to ship SB and SS together, and if I had never started working on this story, I never would have discovered how much I actually like writing about these five fillies :pinkiehappy:

1831485
For those who want to wait to see, I'll spoilerise this. For those who don't mind, highlight to view:
It'll be a love-triangle kinda thing. AB and Scoots both fall for DT, and she falls for both of them at the same time. Basically, conflicts on both sides.

New chapter, just in time for the world to end! :D

In the event that the world doesn't end, there will be an epligoue after this chapter for you all to look forward to, and then that'll be it! Hope you've all enjoyed this story, and thank you to everypony that's stuck through it :3

yay another awesome chapter, so happy to see Sweetie Belle and Silver Spoon together. now if only diamond and scootaloo ended up together. that would be awesome, especially considering how well they worked together on the paintball game, that and all the fights they have just scream romantic tension.:scootangel:

So cute :rainbowkiss: Glad I read it before the world ends!

Sweet Celestia's tits I love this fanfic. It's so damn cute! And I'm absolutely loving these ultra-long chapters. I wish more people did that.
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There were quite a few spelling issues but nothing serious or distracting.
I thought I should point this out though...

“You should at [i[least be able to count that high.”

It was pretty early in the chapter. I make that same mistake all the time:twilightsmile:


EDIT: How does only have 31 likes? It deserves way more than that!

Loved it from beginning to end. Excellent job and loved the progression. DT and the CMC are still enemies but that is to be expected. Any possibility of a sequel with DT and Alula?

Fantastic from beginning to end.

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