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Yukito


Trixie and Twilight are best ponies! (Diamond Tiara is best filly :D )

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Trixie Lulamoon is causing trouble in Ponyville once again, in more ways than one. As somepony who would like to be Trixie's friend, and who doesn't want to push the problem onto somepony else, Twilight Sparkle agrees to help.

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Comments ( 85 )

Those are some damn big chapters.

Fuck it, I'll bite.

Added to the ole' read later list.

Gonna read it nao !! Drop ALL the fanfics for this one :pinkiehappy:

great goomba...how long did you work on this? :twilightoops::rainbowderp::pinkiegasp:

That was pretty nice, some big chapters but still I enjoyed it.

One time I separated myself into sins and virtues. All of them were Greed and Lust. I guess hedonism runs deep in me.

This was awesome! Though reading in the dark doesn't damage your eyes, that has been proven false.

Reading later just cause it has Trixie.

"Friendship is magic" i see what you did there.

Finally finished. This is amazing

Nice story so far! Part 2 will have to wait until tomorrow, but you got me sold with this chapter. I thought you did a really good job depicting the various aspects of Trixie's personality as separate and distinct, but clearly with a common point of origin so that for the most part, they very much felt like Trixie with an element of her personality exaggerated, rather than generic manifestations of the sin they represent. The interactions with their various hosts certainly help in that regard.

Of course, Pride was probably the easiest to write there, since you didn't have to change much at all. :raritywink:

oh you had me so interested in reading this... then those tags.

“Eeyup,” the red pony replied, sniffing as he wiped a lone tear off of his face.

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Aaah, but does Spike-wikey know that? :ajsmug:

This was amazing! :pinkiehappy:

Somehow I remembered Fullmetal Alchemist, might be because of the Eastern Magic))

Envy needs urgent hug!

*finishes part 2* Well done! :pinkiesmile: If it weren't for Lust's behavior and Wrath's language, I wouldn't have a hard time picturing an actual episode along these lines.

Didn't know you could have so many characters / be in so many places at once in a relatively short story, and still be really enjoyable !
And a tear was close to be shed in the end :raritycry:
Very nice. Now I need a longer story :p

My reaction after finishing this fic:
*Squeeee!* So awesome! :rainbowkiss: I wonder if he wrote anything else. :rainbowderp:
30 stories.... welp, there goes my weekend. :twilightoops:

I read so many of your stories by pure coincidence that I'm starting to believe I'm subconsciously stalking you.

A very touching ending. Now I just want to know if Gluttony made Trixie even fatter! That would suck.

This is going to be one of those stories that feels as if it sets itself up for a sequel, but never will have one, isn't it?

Enjoyable enough read. Doesn't need a sex tag though, since its only implied, not described. Of course its good to be better safe then sorry, but on the other hand, the tag might scare away readers without that needing to be so.

A darn good tale here and literally deconstructs Trixie down to every facet of her personality! I enjoyed it as a good tale of friendship and learning to be friends.

If I were to offer some criticism, it's that your portrayal of Trixie is very redundant throughout all of your stories. She always has a sad back story and usually reacts to each of the main characters the same way. In future stories, perhaps think of mixing up Trixie's encounters with the others and maybe think up a different back story to keep things fresh.

That's all I got! Till next time!

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You'd have to be pretty one-dimensional to care about weight so much. Luckily, Trixie is fourteen-dimensional. Besides, Celestia is fat, and I'm betting she's a standard other mares aspire to.

Comment posted by batran deleted Feb 13th, 2013

this should be continued in

Celestia's Split Personality

or

Luna's Split Personality.

I would love how they run the kingdom.... probably splitting it into 14 sectors with 1 emotion as the ruler...lol that would be cool... whos with me?

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exactly how is spike, a baby dragon supposed to know that?:ajbemused:

2114034 Seeing as Spike lives with Twilight, I would have thought the subject would have been brought up eventually. Besides it's not like I'm hating on the story, I was just pointing out what I perceived to be an error.

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Nothing, really. Just a set up for the 14-D joke. But otherwise, one-dimensional means that someone's entire personality or ambitions are all based on minimal traits. Like, if everything Rarity said was a fashion related pun, or she valued fashion over her friends. That's how I see it, and it mostly pertains to works of fiction.

You did it again. Another great Trixie story.

Okay, so just to clarify, the pairings for the Mane 6 and Trixie Sins go as followed:

* Rarity: Pride
* Applejack: Wrath
* Rainbow Dash: Lust
* Fluttershy: Envy
* Pinkie Pie: Gluttony
* Twilight Sparkle: Greed & Sloth

Hey, Yukito. Is it me or were you trying to match each Trixie sin with a Mane 6 character who demonstrate said sin to an extent?

Absolute epicosity! Well done my good sir.

; ; Poor Trixies...

I enjoyed this immensely. Props. :pinkiesmile:

How fitting that I find this story after re-watching FMA: Brotherhood. Seven deadly sins making up the aspects of Trixie, magic from the east causing it, this story was awesome. Gotta say I was not expecting the 'mirrors' to the seven negative aspects to be a thing, pleasant surprise there. All in all I have to say this is one of the best fics involving Trixie I've ever read, and that's saying something considering how good 'A Twixie Love Story' is.:raritywink: Keep up the great work, you really do Trixie some great justice.

we have ejoyed 'tis

wants seconds!

I keep them straight in my head via Full Metal Alchemist...:twilightoops:
This is highly entertaining. :rainbowkiss:

Trixie Lulamoon is causing trouble in Ponyville once again, in more ways than one.

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I think if you'd decided to describe the mayhem in a little more detail the story could have improved beyond it's already Great and Pow'rful status.

Well done!:twilightsmile:

Good stuff! I second the motion to make this a thing with Celestia. Always like seeing an exploration of Celly's character, but in the meantime, this was pretty awesome. :rainbowkiss: Why haven't I watched you yet? :rainbowderp:

Pride is best Trixie. :pinkiehappy:

SO LONG. Totally worth the time though.

lust and wrath are the greatest trixies
i just love their antics

2114777 That's pretty danged insightful, there. *Nods*

Ahh man, this was a great and fun Trixie story. I just love the heck out of it :heart:

I give it 5 out of 5 Spike Swagstaches :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Well, great little/big story, here. I loved the virtues and vices running around like that. :pinkiecrazy:

Hah, I might headcanon this from now on. That was quite a good read, and will read again, lol. :twistnerd:

2114777 For an effort to demonstrate something, you missed a pretty damned important detail:

* Spike & Twilight Sparkle: Greed & Sloth

:rainbowderp:

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