Ever since the first vessels managed to reach beyond the planet's atmosphere, Equis has experienced a golden age. United in their desire to learn and explore, the people of this world have reached higher and higher, becoming one of the most promising new players in the great galactic world stage. Into this new era comes Sunset Shimmer, newly-appointed Captain of Equis' latest vessel. With her is her loyal crew, and together, they will go forth and see what wonders, curiosities and dangers the vast reaches of the cosmos has to offer.
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Chapters (11)
Hmmmm, maybe Sunset should remind Rainbow that she's at the starting line in a track meet, how many times can she jump the gun?
Typo spotted:
And she, Sunset Shimmer, had been tasted with being the one who led both it and its crew.
tasted should be tasked
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Don't phrase it like that, or Dash might take it as a challenge.
aweome start to the story, hope we also get to see some of the crystal prep characters on board
A little too Star Trek, but that is not a bad thing.
Waiting to see how this will be more hard sci-fi or not, either will be fine by me.
A little more description of the ships or maybe an image would help to set the tone for the technology and the feel of this universe.
I am eagerly awaiting the adventures of the Phoenix.
11745536 Thanks for telling me
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Hopefully, they fare a bit better than the USS Phoenix has been.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/490591/star-trek-phoenix
Interesting to see where this goes. So far, everypony matches their personality, except Pinkie. Maybe a little jolt or incident down the line will make her system go alittle haywire and turn her into the adorable ball of hyper that we all know and love?
Wonder what P-N-K-I stands for anyway?
Spike is secret stowaway maybe? He's not mentioned, but his tag is on the story description, so he must enter the fray at some point.
Looks pretty interesting
Wondering how Spike would be doing?
Spike I guess.
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One of these days, it’s going to be a Barney egg, and we’re all going to be horrified and seeking the nearest source of fire starting material.
Another good chapter! Good action, good drama, good characterization (not that there was much room for it this time, but there were still some nice quirks, like Rainbows need for speed and Twilight carrying around a regulations book), and good grammar overall. I wouldn't have guessed Caballeron for the first antagonist, but it makes sense considering the big reveal!
Speaking of, nice plot twist at the end! I guess Spike is technically an extraterrestrial in this one! Hmm, I'm guessing that when he hatches, the first one he sees is Twilight, whom he imprints on. Instant mother!
Looking forward to how this'll turn out.
There a few (very minor) science-y quips I noticed though:
Um, since it's not orbiting a planetary body (or at least none was mentioned), then it's not an orbital outpost.
This is actually a common mistake/creative license in a wide variety of sci-fi media (along with weapons fire having sound in space, despite there being no medium for sound to travel through). The ship wouldn't cease movement because it was hit. Space, being a near-frictionless and microgravity environment, wouldn't arrest the ship's movement once the propulsion systems went offline. The ship wouldn't increase speed, mind you, but it wouldn't stop either. It'd just keep going unless something like a tractor beam halted it.
11751908 To clarify the first point, the outpost was orbiting the system as a whole, much like the ring of Kuiper Belt around the edge of ours in real life. Sorry if that wasn't clear 😅
So Spike is gonna be a "googoo gaga" plot device instead of a actual character(similar to Sparky in Gen 5)?
That...was actually alot rolled up for a single chapter. Drama, mystery, intrigue, character development, and good heavens the pure emotion.
Good job!
Also, apparently the Phoenix is equipped with some kinda FTL drive, unless Volcanus was still inside their home solar system?
11757306 Yeah, much like a lot of my favourite sci-fi stories, the details of where everything is and how far apart they are is gonna be somewhat fuzzy
Yay! Spike intro - done ...
The fact that Spike is the last of his kind just like that is just.. yikes...
Will he be aged up enough eventually or is he just "googoo gaga" for the entire story or most of it?
Scans show four life signs on the smuggler's ship, they're expecting a hostage, instead they find an egg. Now that's some classic Star Trek plot twist right there.
Ah, a visit from Little Miss Marker Q, with the surprise gift to be revealed.
The moment the computer said this, I was glad to know that Sunset would get the Q-Janeway with a mix of Picard treatment 😆
"Yay, I love Q"
So, guessing that in this verse Discord is some sort of Progenitor, or their leader?
Heh, I was wondering when/how Pinkie would become, well, Pinkie. This is actually rather ingenius considering how Pinkie in the show is somewhat chaotic. Plus, this'll allow the AI to have limited ability to break the 4th wall and other physics somewhat at times.
Now, how will Sunset convince Equis command not to immediately recall the ship to wipe out the newly rogue AI program? Maybe convince them that it's a sentient lifeform and that would kill it? But then that still leaves a new lifeform in charge of a highly advanced ship with access to all the space command's data and secrets.
And also Sunset now has to worry if their traveling through Travel-Space might be harming the others that actually live there.
...She's so lucky that Eris didn't turn one of them into a jumble of ears.
Sooo, not that you need one, but was there any particular reason you decided to genderswap Discord?
The bit about Sunset wanting to bring back the Drakkons was very sweet of her to try, though.
11766654 Well, the main reason why I genderswapped was because I didn't want to just copy/paste the character as-is. Everyone else had been tweaked in some way, so I figured I'd do the same with our favourite chaos boy
Seeing Gallus makes me wonder if the rest of the Young Six will show up?
Like Smolder?
I like your take on the griffins. They have the classic Klingon warrior PRIDE! But they're also flat broke, scrounging up whatever they can get their talons on. A very interesting antagonist.
So the Griffons have a mentality similar to the Romulans, but unlike the Romulans, who are more-or-less a technological match to the Federation, the Griffons are far less so.
...I'm not sure if that makes the situation better or worse. An opponent that knows they're outclassed will often resort to dangerous or unconventional tactics.
Heh, I kinda guessed Spike would mature quickly in this fic. In fact, I had him pegged to be a full-out pre-teen within a few weeks, but I wasn't expecting Gallus to be Twilight's assistant before Spike!
Wow! This is fun! Definitely a new favorite. Thank you for sharing this.
ok i am liking this story.
to be honest i am rather surprised this is good.
amazing chapter and Spike is coming along in his growth.
wonder what the next big event is going to be?
Rarirty and AJ were lucky they didn't mess up history.
Also about Spike earlier, I am glad he's quickly growing up(so he can be a actual character).
A pair of glasses (Star Trek The Voyage Home), a fez (Doctor Who The Day of the Doctor), and a toolbox.
Quote Captain Janeway: Temporal mechanics give me a headache.
I quite like this chapter, and how you framed the relationship between Twilight and Spike. In the series, sometimes Spike was overlooked by Twilight because she was so involved in her studies. Here, Spike is the main focus of her studies, and she'll never really ignore him.
This...is actually a very interesting point. On the one hand, Pinkie can multi-task and computate so quickly, that the crew seem to almost be in slow-motion to her. But on the other, time is relative as far as non-AIs are concerned. Pinkie evolves and grows as an artificial lifeform, but she never really ages; to her, so long as her systems and hardware are running at efficiency, then her lifespan is theoretically near-infinite. In seemingly a blink of an eye to us, our children grow up and mature into adults, despite it really taking years. From Pinkie's perspective, it takes forever, and she's lived a thousand lifetimes worth of experience along the way.
"Now, can you say "ma-ma"? Say ma-ma! How about "mom-my"? Hmm?"
"Um, Twilight, it's great that you've formed a bond with Spike, but aren't you worried that Command back on the homeworld might think that you've become too emotionally attached to-"
"Now this is a tough one, Spike. Can you say, "computer memory erasure protocol"? Hmm?"
"...I'll shut up now."
"Mmm-hmm."
Children Learn What They Live
by Dorothy Law Nolte
If children live with criticism,
They learn to condemn.
If children live with hostility,
They learn to fight.
If children live with ridicule,
They learn to be shy.
If children live with shame,
They learn to feel guilty.
If children live with encouragement,
They learn confidence.
If children live with tolerance,
They learn to be patient.
If children live with praise,
They learn to appreciate.
If children live with acceptance,
They learn to love.
If children live with approval,
They learn to like themselves.
If children live with honesty,
They learn truthfulness.
If children live with security,
They learn to have faith in themselves and others.
If children live with friendliness,
They learn the world is a nice place in which to live.
...I don't think you have anything to worry about, Twilight.
Hmm, a happy chapter with no life-or-death trauma. Sunset must be eep-ing with joy internally!
It would be interesting to see what had happened if Twilight had encountered a door and was flung far enough back that she could reasonably try and warn someone that Spike's homeworld was about to destroyed. What would she do? Say nothing and know his world and people would be destroyed and his egg would be orphaned, or try and save them but risk the chances of a far greater, unknown calamity happening as a result?
I knew an anomaly was going to occur this chapter 😂 My trans-temporal-dimensional senses were tingling
Now that Yona has entered the stage, all that is left is Ocellus, Smolder and Sandbar.
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i was thinking the same thing.
but trying to get Yona to accept her los is going to be hard.
Why do I feel like that man Sunset was talking about is Sombra?
So, that could have been an number of figures from human history/now. Or, judging by the unconfirmed nature of his death, could have been Khan Noonian Sing. Or, since this is a My Little Pony story, it could have been Tirek or Sombra.
We may never know...
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That was my thought too.
THERE'S OUR GIRL
"I dunno Rainbow, sounds pretty metal to me!"
And caught up, always a fan of Horse Trek™ stories but even without being a crossover you capture the trek vibes very well, and I can't wait to see what else you do with the other races and the rest of this vast new Frontier
hope to see more! Loved this!