Princess Celestia has had feelings for her faithful student for some time that go beyond a scholastic admiration. Imagine her sorrowful surprise when she receives a letter from Twilight detailing her foray into the world of romantic relationships, one that takes a sharp down-turn for the worse. It's up to Twilight's long-time mentor and friend to repair the anguish brought upon by a careless and, for all intents and purposes, faceless colt, who was too daft to appreciate somepony the princess would give anything to be with.
(Though tagged "sad", it's not that much. It's certainly a little sarcastic at times, though I wouldn't call it "comedy" per say.)
Chapters (2)
That, escalated a little quickly, but other than that, well done!
I know I've read this somewhere before, but I can't think where.
Regardless, it's as touchingly sweet as I remember. Well done, looking forward to more.
As interesting as this sounds, it is wrong.
Nobody would ever
EVER
dump Twilight Sparkle.
...
EVER.
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I have an account on fanfiction too, which is probably where you might have seen this. Thanks for the compliment.
1292458 That's probably it.
And anytime.
Kinda of a quick Buildup, I don't really think relationships go from;
"Boo Hoo teenage girls angst, I'll never love again"
to
"I love you my mentor whom I've had a crush on forever!"
...then again Twilight is probably abut mid teenager in pony years...
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Heh heh, yeah, I wrote this story for a compilation someone else was doing on fanfiction a while back, and this is more or less the product of running out of good ideas. Definitely not my favorite story to write, and teenage girl's angst describes this perfectly lol.
Next Chapter: Celestia beats the crap out of the cheating colt with her sun flail (a stick and chain that connected to the god damn sun) then thanks him for letting her get closer to Twilight, dood.
It would happen in the Netherworld, dood Probably not here.
You see you got a bigger bang here than the other place
When I started this story:
When princess celestia thought: "OOOOH NOOOO"
and at the end:
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I thought about it, I really did, but I just kind of threw him away in the second chapter (the last for now). It would probably be a LITTLE too comical/random at that point if she had nuked him into oblivion.
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I hope you don't mean "bigger bang" in the sense that I THINK you're implying, Nocturne...jk lol.
1292994 In Disgaea, beating someone to death with the sun or the moon and thinking nothing of it, only to see that they dodged the attack or took no damage, is rather common, dood.
It's rather rude of them to dodge something with so much overkill behind it, dood.
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I knew I had read this somewhere before. Good story, dude. Can't wait to read more.
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Thanks a lot. I think I've seen you before over at fanfiction as well, in the reviews for "Don't Let the Sun Catch You Crying", by loxor. His stories are incredible, and I did enjoy the review that you wrote to him.
Yeah, that's actually the story that inspired me to start writing pony words. Good stuff.
The letter should be italicized.
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Actually, it was said somewhere that all six of them are legal adults. Which one is oldest and which one is youngest remains debatable.
that escalated quickly, not in a rushed way though. otherwise; great chapter!
What I got from the first letter...
Mope mope mope ECSTATIC NEWS, list
Perfect twilight portrayal right there. Have a stache
Good start but I have to agree with 'asylum1388', the letters should really be italicized.
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So it is written, so it shall be done!
Thanks for the heads up. I use notepad to write most of my stuff, which lacks an italics feature, which is probably why I didn't at first.
Oh whaddaya know, I just shot myself in the foot... Notepad in fact DOES have an italics feature... I now, officially, have no excuse for letters not being italicized.
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Its not a major issue, just makes it easier to read
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Other than that, Twilestia FTW.
Send him to the moooon!
Complete? Lemme read this
This story was better than I thought it would be. Anything Twilestia is good
I lol'd at the end
NO!!! It cant be complete, not yet!
Deja vu...
Also-
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Oh and this just keeps getting better and better, hows Twiley going to explain this lol
Somepony interfered with sloppy make outs?
That's
The
Worst
Possible
Thing!
How is this complete? you ended it on a cliffhanger
as for the question a the bottom um you can just use magic encrypted-tbn0.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcSXXZ3-iKR_KvjXnqqXWhtFsfvjFS7SNN6wC5Ish1iGCHFtyAwjvA
Glamour charm, obviously.
Highly entertaining.
Another great cha*notices the story's tagged complete*
That better either be an error, or a sequel better be in the works because that is not how you end a story.
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Well, I had actually ended it at the first chapter. It was supposed to be a one-shot, but I ended up getting a request to make a continuation from someone else, and the second chapter is that continuation. However, for now at least, this is it for the story. I might go back to it a long time from now, but I don't foresee anything else being added to it at this point.
1320703 I should get 20 people to spam you to make more
Was this on Fanfiction?
Coulda sworn I've read this before
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No more?
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Complete?
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"Bright Ray, by his original intent,"
In that context 'per' is probably the correct word. 'by' makes it sound like his original intent is an object he can stand next to :)
I think raunchy would fit better there. Or perhaps lewd. Racy has some different connotations, not all of which are that good.
This is funny, enjoyable, and hilarious. Would love to see more, though I understand if you don't want to.
This feels like it should have a continuation. Yes, definitely.
Utterly. Fabulous.
Think about the hungry children! And the cupcakes!
Really enjoyable story; I hope that it doesn't stay "complete" forever, as it very much feels in need of further expansion.
Huh. I was hoping to read something about that idiot Stallion getting his just desserts from Celestia and a few of her 'special' guards.
... the kind in black three-piece suits wielding clubs...
1295835 actually the thing about note pad is you cant have sections of italics and then sections of non italics its just a universal format you change ti and EVERYTHING changes