"I've missed you around here, Twilight."
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Very sweet. Though I'm not usually crazy about floating dialogue, the minimal approach here is nice. Good job!
I loved it.
I know, not a very interesting review, but it's all I can really say.
All of my d'awwws. And with only dialogue too!
loved it!
This is complete?
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I find it cute and sweet, but the only dialog idea, kind of confused me in the start, but you used it very good.
Make a sequel. Nao
Short and sweet, a good change from time to time is always good.
I liked it....
That said, I one posted a story very much like this and it got rejected because it was 'dialogue only' so I'm kind of wondering what the rule is exactly.
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They reject stories if they're dialogues like:
Twilight: Hello
Rarity: Hi, darling.
Etc.
You get the idea.
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My story was 'like this' other characters yes, but almost the same.
Heavy.. Wants
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Sequel?
Oh my God this was awesome!
That moment when your one shot suddenly demands a sequel.... tantalising, no?
Good read, I liked it
I can always go for a good twilightXcelestia
Ummmmmmmmmmmmmmm...
721000 this got featured.
*Sheds manly tear*
That was beautiful
I've never read a story consisting of only dialogue before...and I must say my very first was not a disappointment of any length. Thank you for this, it's literally exactly what I wanted to read.
Also, This guy here knows what he's talking about. 720375
721043 Thats the point
I can't say I'm a fan of the style. I think any physicalization, even just Twilight leaning closer as Celestia draped a wing over her as they both stared into the starry night, would have made this story stronger. Right now, this feels more like a script than a story; it's only missing the proper formatting to be one.
Still, it's always nice to see more Twilestia.
Great approach. Loved the pure dialogue. Very lovely read.
Well done: I liked the floating dialogue, it set a different mood than it would have in a traditional narration. Good on ya!
This can't be complete! Please do more!
Your style is different, kind of refreshing. I rather like it.
Interesting.
I'm not usually one for floating dialogue, but this was done really well. I did also find Celestia's response to Twilight's confession really quick, but maybe that's just me. Anyway, good job, keep going if you want.
"I've miss you around here." Typo, on a bit of a crucial line... just sayin'... bit of an EXTREMELY crucial line, actually...
The purely dialogue format worked, for the most part, but it felt...a little bland. Since WHAT they say delineates everything for the entire story, you need to be extremely considerate of what they say and how they say it. It felt too much like they were discussing philosophy across a public table and not having the heart to heart that it was. As it is, they sound too alike, and too formal.
I do like this, but I've had ordinary conversations that were at least as descriptively rich and subtle as this was.
Since you're going for a purist approach here, every single last word (all being subvocalized, naturally) has to be the perfectly right word, at the perfectly right pace and the perfectly right subtext.
I'd like to see further attempts at 100% dialogue stories , I think this is a nominally successful attempt.
Though I agree with the above comments, I have to say this is more than nominal.
This is amazing. It's heartfelt, it's sincere, it's a stunning rendition of a very emotional and private moment, and if you'd improve on it in the manner stated above, it would turn from amazing, to an instant classic.
I wanna see a re-do of this, in the hands of a capable editor.
DO NOT DISSAPOINT ME. 
"Let's go back inside, Twilight."
CLOP TIME!
Kidding.
Very nice little story. The floating dialogue was done well, it set a mood and expressed emotion quite well.
While the story and the sweet premise was all well and nice, I liked the conversation they had and Celestia's unconventional theory about the sun and moon. It was fun to read about and quite interesting, then again those topics always fascinate me
Great little story done really well, chalk it up as a success
Less than 2000 words, one chapter, shipping (TwiLestia).
OSQ never works on shipping.
721986 exactly what my pervy brain was thinking
That was super neat! I love it
And dialogue is not a story.
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I feel like there are certain things you can convey solely through dialogue, so I tried my hand at it. The author Nicholson Baker published a novel told only with dialogue and it turned out extremely interesting. It doesn't necessarily need to have a chronology of events to be substantial; emotions, psychology, and how people interact are fascinating in themselves. But, of course, that's just my opinion.
Just a little creative liberty.
We MUST have MORE! Please?
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That there can be a story. Change in character, emotion and psychology can defiantly be a story in it's self.
Hahaha, I loved that ending! For some reason, I can never resist reading this ship - somehow, it always turns out awesome, whoever writes it.
I loved the form of this fanfic - I've seen fic without dialogue, but never fics with nothing BUT dialogue, and I find it rather awesome. Lots of mustaches and a like! 
I loved this
I.. You sir, are just.. Words... Take ALL MY LIKES!!!
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I'm a ma'am.
Haha, thank you! I'm glad you like it. :3
HEAVY DEMANDS A SEQUEL
That story was an adora-fest for me.
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Post a sequel or else....
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Ah of course. As I read it through (quickly though) I noticed that it wasn't so bad. There's just this one thing: FiMFiction is not for scripts, and this here's borderline stuff. Rules ain't created by me but I try to enforce 'em on my behalf (lame results so far though :P)
Usually just romance and less than 2000 words don't fit together. If you'd write "normally", this would've been nearing 5000 words with ease, as you have to express emotions, actions, reactions, facial expressions and so on.
Aww, this was nice. Simple, straight forward, sweet. You pulled the style pretty well.
The ending felt a little.. umm, something, though. Up until "But since you've been 'unabashedly' honest..." it was good, but then it just seems too short and with a loss of emotion and engagement. Maybe. I don't know I'm not a writer.
My one and only complaint is the last line. That gave me the wrong vibe, and ruined the innocence for me. The whole last few sentences just felt sudden, as did the ending.
Other then that, this was very sweet. I love the dialouge-only way you wrote this. I'm normally not for Twilight/Celestia ships, but that was cute. :)
so many sweet emotions and i too must ask for a sequel
the dialogue idea was brilliant i hope to see more