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Routine day with a dirt cheap brush, then a week goes by and it goes untouched. Then two, then three, then a month, and the rest of your life you beat yourself up. - Aesop Rock, "Rings"


As a professional athlete, Dash goes to regular physicals. As an Element Of Harmony, she goes to regular magicals too. Soul examination is her least favorite part, but at least the patient blacks out while their spirit is in capable hooves.

Starlight Glimmer's hooves have questionable capability.

This is an entry in the Snippet Series, an anthology of old oneshots that I (and my good buddy Str8aura) wrote based around interesting pics I found. New ones will be posted every other Thursday for the foreseeable future.

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A rather enjoyable short story. I liked how the precived problem ended up being the solution.

very clever! I'd never though of a soul test but it really does fit nicely into the pony world. I love that Dash's soul is equally sassy even without words.
I admit I'd really dig seeing Fluttershy and/or Twilight's test but I imagine they're not on the cards unless the muse strikes. n_n I also feel like Twilight's test would make Starlight a nervous wreck or blinded from the magic she puts off haha.

I'd like to see Fluttershy's test. :pinkiehappy:

Ok, that last line got a chuckle out of me. Well played, clever.

It's stories like this that make me wonder why this site doesn't have a general tag.

Would you say that tweet is the soul inspiration?

Well, this was unique. I quite enjoyed the reaction to the strange experience for everyone involved. Just another day in pony land.

This is just an enjoyable little short story overall. Well written.

Sometimes you just need your soul to sneeze and realign your entire spine. Fun story.

Holy moly, I LOVE this! Reminds me of my sister's story about waking up early from anesthesia and having a coherent science chat with the surprised doctors. I would absolutely do the same thing in Dash's position. For SCIENCE! :pinkiecrazy:

"Umm..." Starlight flipped to a previous year's sheet. "It says here you found your first white hair ten checkups ago."

"That one doesn't count! I got examined right after the first Discord debacle and had some strands leftover from his grey spell. I'm still in my prime! Ponies in their prime just sometimes trip while taking off their flight suits."

Starlight nodded apologetically and scratched out the note.

Dash wasn't flustered at the thought of getting older. Not really. Spitfire was a spry old military mare, and Dash very much looked forward to following in those dignified hoofsteps. No, what really chafed her chaps was the thought of her mane going gray. Through back pain, wing aches, or eye wrinkles, she'd still be Rainbow Dash. But losing her mane color? Half of her entire namesake? That would be like losing a part of her very self. And speaking of having a part of oneself pulled out...

Oddly enough, my mother's side of the family gets grey hair early on. Mom had it, my uncles had it. Hell, I have a few, and I'm only 35. Not blindingly obvious, but I know they're there.

Shattering into many aspects of oneself sounds fun.
I like it.

I desperately want a sequel to this.

"What's up, doc?"

"Pff, we'll be fine. You've yoinked Cutie Marks off a pony before. Yoinking a soul is basically the same trick, right?"

Uhhh I don't know about that that's so kind of dangerous

Another piece from you that brought great amusement. :D

Wonderfully done.

"I mean... Pinkie is Pinkie."

Yeah that's true Pinkie Pie thought the impossible for some reason and sometimes we just can't question her

I got to say this is a pretty interesting story so it looks like Starlight wanted to ask Rainbow Dash to do some testing so with that she wanted to take the soul out to see if she is true to her element but of course the Spirit of rainbow is exactly how rainbow acts and rainbow was pretty interested what this is how everything worked out and she still having some back pains lately but it looks like the ghost wanted to give her one last thing before going back she cracked her own bag but somehow made rainbows back crack as well but some miracle it was okay so apparently the test worked out pretty well and Rainbow Dash was pretty interested how the others were react to their spirits again this was a pretty interesting one keep up the good work

You know... this was really cleverly written, Captured the essence of the characters rather well.
There's something charming about Dash being super quick to work things out, even if she can give off dumbass energy at times.
Like... she's super adept at putting things together, but only once she has all the pieces in front of her, if there's even a single thing missing, she's gonna be stumped.
But I like the idea of Equestria having a secondary type of medical examination specifically for the magical side of things.

Ah, spiritual spine-popping!

"Pff, we'll be fine. You've yoinked Cutie Marks off a pony before. Yoinking a soul is basically the same trick, right?"
A bulging artery in Starlight's forehead hinted that no, soul extraction was not basically the same trick.

Reminded me of this image:

"Ha! Yes ma'am." Rainbow Dash relaxed and did as she was told. If memory served, the icebox in this room's corner had fruit pops for good students who cooperated through their checkups. She decided to ask for one when she woke up.

Are you sure she is growing old?
She sounds pretty youthful to me.

"What else would there be? Coaching your soul to jump through flaming hoops?"
Both Rainbow Dashes perked up excitedly.
"I'm not coaching your soul to jump through flaming hoops."
Spirit Dash harrumphed silently. Solid Dash harrumphed loudly.

Starlight really should have seen that coming.

"Wow. Okay, sure. But in return, you have to make a promise."
Rainbow Dash narrowed her eyes.
"Watch your step next time you take off your flight suit. Doctor's orders."
Rainbow Dash chuffed with annoyed embarrassment, so loudly and deeply that Starlight Glimmer judged it had come from the soul. Then she trotted briskly out.

And then she tripped on a flight suit randomly lying on the floor.
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Good story!
I enjoyed reading it.

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