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Woo it's out.

“It's two oh two, not three oh two. Look at the sun for Celestia’s sake it's not low enough to be three!” The guard smacked his younger upside his head again, making his helmet spin on his head.

“But Luna told me to say two!” He lamented.

Shouldn't it be "But Luna told me to say three"?

Comment posted by Jamin P Rose deleted Oct 11th, 2018

This story seems only half finished. Everything in this chapter felt like a set up for what should come next. If there is a part 2, I'm hoping it won't focus exclusively on sex, but will go into detail about Twilight's new life. Little details that build the world really improve the overall experience in my mind.

I got maybe about 3/4 of the way through and honestly got a bit bored, personally, but I wanted to leave this comment to say

Thank. You.

for including the option to skip watersports. I wish more people would offer this option when it comes to certain fetishes. It's an awesome way to ensure that people can skip what they don't want to read while still being able to continue <3

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Of course! Its not even my cup of tea and I know how it feels to see a really interesting fic only to get to that fetish and just leave because of it.

Is there gonna be a sequel to this story? I would really like to know What Twilight’s life is going to be like now.

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The commissioner has mentioned they are interested in a sequel. It might be awhile though.

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The story might incidently focus on Celestia but ultimately its about breaking down and convincing Twilight.

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Exactly. I've come across just one other fic that piqued my interest and got as far as the watersports and didn't know how to tell when it ended, if at all, so had to stop reading. I left a comment, and I truly enjoyed the fic until that part because seriously not my thing, so I just really wish that there's more fics out there that use this method so we can skip the bits that make us bleh.

Here's to hoping it catches on!!

I'd kind of rather see a prequel where we see just how Celestia became Luna's pet.

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I'll have to menion that to the commissioner.

Comment posted by Jamin P Rose deleted Oct 11th, 2018

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Oh no I had more then one character be the focus and used the addition of a second character to further hit home at the central plot of breaking Twilight down. Truly this was the mother of all hat tricks and I thoroughly bamboozled you all.

Dude get over it. Do I really have to look forward to you coming by this same story every month on the same day to whine about the same thing?

Is this like a FoE story?

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This is not a fallout equestria story.

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No I'm fall of Equestria

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This story is not affiliated with any other story that is not the sequel.

Shouldn't master be replaced with mistress?

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Nope. Thats not qhat she wants to be called.

The younger perked up. “Oh, it's three oh two!”

The unicorn mare gasped, glancing up at the position of the sun. “Oh goodness, I’m late!” With a flash of purple light she was gone.

The elder guard groaned and planted his hoof against his forehead. “You idiot.”

“What?”

“It's two oh two, not three oh two. Look at the sun for Celestia’s sake it's not low enough to be three!” The guard smacked his younger upside his head again, making his helmet spin on his head.

“But Luna told me to say two!” He lamented.

Shouldn´t it be “But Luna told me to say three” ?

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