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A meteorite landed just outside of Ponyville, in the heart of the Everfree Forest. Princess Celestia gave me the job of investigating the meteor crash.
Something emerged from the crash. I have no idea what it is. All I know is that it came from the stars, and it wants blood.
Cover art by mirapony.
A collaboration with BootyPopperzZz.
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Hell yeah! New story from one of the best dark writers on the site!
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Going back to my roots a little bit.
Wow. 😃
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Pulling a Chelsea Grin, huh? I can get behind that!
(Chelsea Grin was one of my fave death metal/deathcore bands from back in the day. They went softer for a little bit and tried some new things before going heavier than ever on their last album.)
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I doubt I’m the first.
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Chelsea Grin has been hit and miss for me, but when they're good though, they're really good. I'm more a fan of Born of Osiris, Within the Ruins, and Polyphia. Also After the Burial recently.
Don't have too much to say just yet, but we're only getting started here.
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Okay, we need to talk at length sometime.
I'll be seeing After the Burial live for the fifth time this year on the Rareform Anniversary tour because they're just that amazing. I was also priveleged to see Born of Osiris live a couple times, including a couple months ago. I will never not go apeshit when they play Abstract Art and/or Bow Down live.
Sorry, Jack! Didn't mean to cloud up your comments section!
Aaaand I'm officially going to say that this is a pretty good chapter...
Wait... (reads it again with the lights off)
This is amazing!
As a fan of My Little Pony, the first two Alien movies and H.P Lovecraft, all I can say for now is A) I hope the Crusaders survive and B) FOR THE LOVE OF GOD KEEP WRITING!!
So yeah, this kind of caught my eye, can you tell?
Continue with all due haste, my man!
In other words: MOAR!
Aliens? Check.
Ponies? Check.
Sci-Fi Horror Tropes out the wazoo? Checkeroony!
You now officially have my attention.
Chickenloo meme? Oh now you're just spoiling me!
good shit #lit
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I hope we don't disappoint!
That's an interesting story for an alien story.
Nice old Movie title.
Hmm, interesting start. Can't wait to see best xenobughorsething.
So when are you gonna make the next chapter?
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Whenever my co-writer and I get around to it.
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Okay then
All right. Now I wait for the rest.
IS THAT AN UPDATE, BOY?
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YOU'RE DAMN RIGHT IT IS.
A wild update has appeared!
Are they all going to die?
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Wrong kind of bow, my dude.
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Oh...
I hope Applebloom and her friends are still alive.
Well rip shy and the crusaders enless this is your ailen vs predatory alien then still rip
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Ohhh, these chapters are just like a fine wine.
Very much worth the wait.
Oh god I don't want to find out what happened to Apple Bloom let alone Fluttershy. B-but this is so well written and perfectly paced already!
DAMN IT IT'S GAME OF THRONES ALL OVER AGAIN!
...Believe it or not my ongoing nervous breakdown should be taken as a compliment to this story
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Finally took the time to read it. Aight, here goes.
First of all, I really appreciate the characters so far, especially since this is an AU. many AU stories struggle with writing ponies OOC, but so far these feel perfectly natural. The CMCs trying to put on a brave face, then getting scared but still playing pranks in such a situation is exactly how I would expect them to act in this scenario, so good job on that.
I can't say too much about Applejack, Rarity and Rainbow Dash considering we haven't exactly seen much of them. Well, maybe except for Rarity. Having her offer a place to stay for Twilight, both because she may be able to help and likely also because she was sent by Celestia fits perfectly ( it comes pretty close to what happened in the first episode, so yeah). What I especially liked is that she immediately moved to... well, this isn't quite right, but I don't know how to phrase it better right now, take advantage of him. Or more like making him more infatuated with her by grazing his chin? Whatever, I'm sure you know what I mean
. Whether she did it intentionally or not, it fits either way.
Also, Twilight. When a story includes Twilight but writes her poorly, then I quit reading, no matter what else is offered by the story. Here you pretty much write Twilight how she was in the first episode, which makes perfect sense given the setting, so no issue there (not that I expected any lol). Looking forward to the character developement.
But now for the strong suite of this story: the mystery. In my opinion anyway.
Just the perfect amount of information revealed to actually make the reader interested, while still withholding enough to actually make it mystery.
What exactly is in that meteorite (or rather, how will you portrait it in this AU)? Sure, they are definitely in trouble, but are the CMC actually dead? What about Fluttershy?
You get the point, it works. I'm intrigued and wanna see what happens next.
Gj, have 5 Twilights
No! It can't be her, can it?
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O but it is most likely anaways.
Also NOOOOOOOO NOT FLUTERSHY
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She can’t be, she couldn’t be... could it be?
Nothing good has ever come out of that forest derpicdn.net/img/2012/10/31/137378/full.gif
so this was set before twilight arived in town and the elder sister found the younger sisters missing.
Nice
Hmm, not a bad chapter, but the fact that the creature can talk somehow lessens the fear factor at least for me. A more drawn out game of cat and mouse would have been more intense, as would having every single animal in Fluttershy's cottage going nuts as the creature prowls around outside, not unlike in the movie 'Signs'.
...Oh don't look at me like that, plot holes be damned that movie was terrifying.
Welp, Alienlings gotta eat.
Welp, she dead.
I think I agree with the commenter above, but having the alien not talk except for imitating SB for now would've made it more terrifying.
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I agree completely, the talking does take away from the immersion a bit. My co-writer and I plan on rewriting that little segment of the story. We'll update it once the next chapter is out so that newcomers will get to see the chapter in its prime.
I love this, please continue!
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Chapter 4 is being written!
Shit, dude. I'm very excited for the next chapter.
So, changelings + xenomorphs. And instead of replacing ponies it kills them, meaning it's just typical alien monster that needs to be killed.
Meh. Basically the plot of most alien B-movies.
Wait a minute. I thought you said this story wasn't a crossover. Was it?
Sadly, im setting this down on this chapter, just not, yeah. I could not enjoy this, Part of the mystique with the aliens was that you could not interact, it was a silent and menacing threat, even in the 2nd and 3rd. It was a FoN villain. This with a name, and how its gone. It's not the same.
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I, yeah, blunt, but, correct here.